《TOEFL 4--6月 D-T写作小组》 子期的托福机经第三次作文

子期的美国梦UID: 2588133

第三次作文题目：should the government focus more on preserving nature environment and less on economic development?

What started as a meltdown in the U.S. subprime mortage marker has evolved into an economic crisis affecting every corner of the planet. Millions of people and government are seized with such a panic. Increasing number of people strongly support that the government focus more on economic development to help out our economy. On the contrary，considering the deteriorating environment，a great many people intensively ask government focus more on preserving nature environment. Whether the relationship between economic development and preserving nature environment is exclusive？

Firstly，nowadays the financial crisis is the globalization which is the biggest financial crisis since the Great Depression，and Economic Recovery is a primarily crucial issue. The global financial crisis directly bring on unemployment，business failure，the decline of consumer market and so on. Tremendous pepole and enterprises are in trouble. Aware that the financial crisis could spread to other sectors, the government should formulate many of the policies remarkably aggressively to help out our economy. For instance，the investment strategy of the World's Top Traders，reducing taxation and so on. Especially on China，she suffers from not only the financial crisis but also the shocking earthquake happened in Sichuan province. Therefor，China should pay more and more attention on economic development.

Secondly，the 21st century is a new green environmental protection era，and preserving nature environment is always our most important task . Whoever political leader，enterprise，or the common person，begins to face the planet for the subsistence and development of the mankind by the attitude of green environmental protection. The 21st century is coming with the changing mind. Such as ancient forests，throughout the world, are in crisis. Many of the plants and animals that live in these forests face extinction. And many of the people and cultures who depend on these forests for their way of life are also under threat. What’s more, American President Obama observed：“ Climate change would further depress the economy and threaten national security. ” At last but not least, with the increase in population, the sanitation will become a problem as well.


Overall，it is not mutually exclusive for government to protect natural environment and promote economic development simultaneously. Indisputably , economic development will provide more funds to reseach of preserving nature environment. And a good ecological environment will provide more resources to economic development. Obviously , they are mutual reliance and mutual condition with each other. As for government ，should make a compromise to balance the relationship, then both economic development and nature environment protection can interact and help each other forward . In the long run, it is not only a severe issue needed to respond but also severe challenges full of opportunities.


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云蒸霞蔚UID: 2327352

1# 子期的美国梦
What started as a meltdown in the U.S. subprime mortage marker has evolved into an economic crisis affecting every corner of the planet. Millions of people and government are seized with such a panic. Increasing number of people strongly support that the government focus more on economic development to help out our economy. On the contrary，considering the deteriorating environment，a great many people intensively ask government focus more on preserving nature environment. Whether the relationship between economic development and preserving nature environment is exclusive.

Firstly，nowadays the financial crisis is the globalization which is the biggest financial crisis since the Great Depression，and Economic Recovery is a primarily crucial issue. The global financial crisis directly bring on unemployment，business failure，the decline of consumer market and so on. Tremendous pepole and enterprises are in trouble. Aware that the financial crisis could spread to other sectors, the government should formulate many of the policies remarkably aggressively（我觉得两个副词一起用不是很好） to help out our economy. For instance，the investment strategy of the World's Top Traders，reducing taxation and so on. Especially on China，she suffers from not only the financial crisis but also the shocking earthquake happened in Sichuan province. Therefor，China should pay more and more attention on economic development.!
(作者的例子都和切合时代背景啊~~~ 值得学习~~~)

Secondly，the 21st century is a new green environmental protection era，and preserving nature environment is always our most important task . Whoever political leader，enterprise，or the common person，begins to face the planet for the subsistence and development of the mankind by the attitude of green environmental protection. The 21st century is coming with the changing mind. Such as ancient forests，throughout the world, are in crisis. Many of the plants and animals that live in these forests face extinction. And many of the people and cultures who depend on these forests for their way of life are also under threat. What’s more, American President Obama observed：“ Climate change would further depress the economy and threaten national security. ” At last but not least, with the increase in population, the sanitation will become a problem as well. （最后那句奥巴马的话真的满好的）
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Overall，it is not mutually exclusive for government to protect natural environment and promote economic development simultaneously. Indisputably , economic development will provide more funds to reseach of preserving nature environment. And a good ecological environment will provide more resources to economic development. Obviously , they are mutual reliance and mutual condition with each other. As for government ，should make a compromise to balance the relationship, then both economic development and nature environment protection can interact and help each other forward . In the long run, it is not only a severe issue needed to respond but also severe challenges full of opportunities.

实话我没有什么水平来评价作者的文章，实在是写得太好了。我挺喜欢那几个插入语，和一些小副词，细微之处，足见作者功底之深。

得向你学习了~~~~很庆幸可以改到你的文章，受益匪浅。

chelseajcoleUID: 2589519

What started as a meltdown in the U.S. subprime mortage marker has evolved into an economic crisis affecting every corner of the planet. (次贷次贷）Millions of people and government are seized with such a panic. Increasing number of people strongly support that the government focus more on economic development to help out our economy. On the contrary，considering the deteriorating environment，a great many people intensively ask government focus more on preserving nature environment. Whether the relationship between economic development and preserving nature environment is exclusive？

Firstly，nowadays the financial crisis is the globalization which is the biggest financial crisis since the Great Depression，and Economic Recovery is a primarily crucial issue. The global financial crisis directly bring on unemployment，business failure，the decline of consumer market and so on. Tremendous pepole and enterprises are in trouble. Aware that the financial crisis could spread to other sectors, the government should formulate many of the policies remarkably aggressively to help out our economy. For instance，the investment strategy of the World's Top Traders，reducing taxation and so on. Especially on China，she suffers from not only the financial crisis but also the shocking earthquake happened in Sichuan province. Therefor，China should pay more and more attention on economic development."

Secondly，the 21st century is a new green environmental protection era，and preserving nature environment is always our most important task . Whoever political leader，enterprise，or the common person，begins to face the planet for the subsistence and development of the mankind by the attitude of green environmental protection. The 21st century is coming with the changing mind. Such as ancient forests，throughout the world, are in crisis. Many of the plants and animals that live in these forests face extinction. And many of the people and cultures who depend on these forests for their way of life are also under threat. What’s more, American President Obama observed：“ Climate change would further depress the economy and threaten national security. ” At last but not least, with the increase in population, the sanitation will become a problem as well.

Overall，it is not mutually exclusive for government to protect natural environment and promote economic development simultaneously. Indisputably , economic development will provide more funds to reseach of preserving nature environment. And a good ecological environment will provide more resources to economic development. Obviously , they are mutual reliance and mutual condition with each other. As for government ，should make a compromise to balance the relationship, then both economic development and nature environment protection can interact and help each other forward . In the long run, it is not only a severe issue needed to respond but also severe challenges full of opportunities."


看楼主的连接进来，楼主好谦虚啊，如果这还是高中生，简直就是神童了，直接被哈佛入取了，感觉修改比较难啊，语言上没有能力修改了，结构上，第一段提出两者可以相辅相成，第二段描述经济，第三段描述环境，建议可以放一段对比对立的，这样感觉就会更强烈点