【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 jessie18第六次作业】

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题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by the guide. Give specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

With the development of our country, our people live a more comfortable life than a few decades ago. Until recently, traveling is becoming more and more popular, as we have more leisure time and more money to spend during our vocation. When it comes to ways of traveling, many people prefer to choose a group by travel service and escorted by tour guides, while others argue that they are in favor of traveling by themselves alone. Personally, I prefer the attitude of the former and I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint as follows.

The first plain truth, I am present here, is that we can obtain a great deal of entertainment during our vocation. Usually, a tour group consist of around 20 people. These people travel together, and eat together and stay at the same hotel. You can not feel alone in this travel, and you will make a few friends at the same time. Take me an example, Two years ago, I enrolled a travel group which destination is Huangshan mountain. It was a very fascinated travel. In this travel, I made an acquaintance with a beautiful girl who is my girlfriend now. Thank to traveled in this group, I find my lover. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious that you should travel with a tour group, if you want to make some friends, even make your best lover.

In addition, you will enjoy a comfortable and safety of group travel. When traveling in a group, everything is pre-arranged by the travel service. You do not have to worry about booking a ticket, finding a hotel, decide what places to visit and so on. In the meantime, as you are not preoccupied with arranging the trip by yourself, you may find yourself concentrate more on the trip itself and enjoy it more. In addition, it is much safer to travel within a group. What a relief when you know that your personal safety is always taken cared of by others.

Thirdly, you can learn a great deal of information about the place from a tour guide, and not worrying about missing an important spot. The tour guide will take you to each spot that should be visited, and give you detailed information about the place you visit. I had to find the information about the place I will visit and I had to find it go through the internet or a book from some bookstores when I travel to the place by myself. So only in this way can we save our time and money on information searching.

Admittedly, choosing travel by ourselves alone also has some undeniable merits. For instance, we can travel to the place wherever we want to without any limitation by the tour group, because if someone have something to during the vocation, we should have to wait for them. Hence, although for young people, traveling alone is more advantages and stimulating, for most people, traveling in a group is the best choice.

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With the development of our country, our (删)people live a more comfortable life than a few decades ago（before）. Until recently, traveling is becoming more and more popular, as we have more leisure time and more money to spend during (on)our vocation. When it comes to ways of traveling, many people prefer to choose a group by travel service and escorted by tour guides, while others argue that they are in favor of traveling by themselves alone. Personally, I prefer the attitude of the former (former attitude)and I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint as follows.

The first plain truth, I am present here, （删）is that we can obtain a great deal of entertainment during our vocation. Usually, a tour group consist（s） of around 20 people. These people travel together, and eat together and stay at the same hotel. You can not feel alone in this travel, and you will make a few friends at the same time. Take me (as) an example, Two years ago, I enrolled a travel group which destination is Huangshan mountain. It was a very fascinated travel. In this travel, I made an acquaintance with a beautiful girl who is my girlfriend now. Thank(s) to traveled(traveling) in this group, I find (have found)my lover. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious that you should travel with a tour group, if you want to make some friends, even make (没见过这种用法)your best lover.

In addition, you will enjoy a comfortable and safety（safe journey） of group travel. When traveling in a group, everything is pre-arranged by the travel service. You do not have to worry about booking a ticket, finding a hotel, decide (deciding)what places to visit and so on. In the meantime, as you are not preoccupied with arranging the trip by yourself, you may find yourself concentrate more on the trip itself and enjoy it more. In addition, it is much safer to travel within a group. What a relief when you know that your personal safety is always taken cared of by others.

Thirdly, you can learn a great deal of information about the place from a tour guide, and not worrying(worry) about missing an important spot. The tour guide will take you to each spot that should be visited, and give you detailed information about the place you visit. I had to find the information about the place I will visit and I had to find it go through the internet or a book from some bookstores when I travel to the place by myself. (整句话时态！！)So only in this way can we save our time and money on information searching

Admittedly, choosing travel（直接traveling） by ourselves alone also has some undeniable merits. For instance, we can travel to the place wherever we want to without any limitation by the tour group, because if someone have something to (少了动词)during the vocation, we should（删） have to wait for them. Hence, although for young people, traveling alone is more advantages （advantageous）and stimulating, for most people, traveling in a group is the best choice.

问题较多：主谓搭配、动词时态、变位都要注意，句子不够精炼，楼主加油啊！

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题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by the guide. Give specific reasons and details to support your opinion.
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With the development of our country, our people live a more comfortable life than a few decades ago. Until Recently, traveling is becoming more and more popular, as we have more leisure time and more money to spend during our vocation. When it comes to ways of traveling, many people prefer to choose a group by travel service and (escorted)accompanied by tour guides, while others argue that they are in favor of traveling by themselves alone. Personally, I prefer (the attitude of the former)the former and I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint as follows.

The first plain truth, I am present here, is that we can obtain a great deal of entertainment during our vocation. Usually, a tour group (consist)consists of around 20 people. These people travel together, and eat together and stay at the same hotel. (You can not feel alone in this travel,
and you will make a few friends at the same time. ) Because it’s easy to make friends in this kind of travel, nobody will feel lonely. Take (me)myself as an example. Two years ago, I enrolled a travel group,
(which destination)the destination of which is Huangshan Mountain. It was a very fascinated travel. In this travel, I made an acquaintance with a beautiful girl who is my girlfriend now. Thanks to the (traveled)travel in this group, I (find)found my (lover)love. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious that you should travel with a tour group, (if you want to)in which you can make some friends, even (make)find your best (lover)love. _; S* L4 ^% C3 X

(In addition)Secondly, you will enjoy a comfortable and safety of group travel, when traveling in a group. Everything is pre-arranged by the travel service. You do not (have)need to worry about booking a ticket, finding a hotel, (decide)deciding what places to visit and so on. In the meantime, (as)since you are not preoccupied with arranging the trip by yourself, you may find yourself concentrate more on the trip itself and enjoy it more. In addition, it is much safer to travel within a group. What a relief when you know that your personal safety is always taken (cared)care of by others.# t9 U2 H" \) g

Thirdly, you can learn a great deal of information about the place from a tour guide, and not worrying about missing (an)any important spot. The tour guide will take you to each spot that should be visited, and give you details information about the place you visit, (I had to find the information about the place I will visit and I had to find it go through the internet or a book from some bookstores when I travel to the place by myself.)while you would do all these by yourself when travelling alone. So only in this way can we save our time and money on information searching and money on the journey.
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Admittedly, choosing travel by ourselves alone also has some undeniable (merits)benefits. For instance, we can travel to the place wherever we want to without any limitation (by the tour group, because if someone have something to during the vocation, we should have to wait for them)such as waiting for others we travel together with when they encounter some troubles. (Hence, although for young people, traveling alone is more advantages and stimulating)Thus, to someone, especially the young people, travelling by themselves may be a good choice, (for most people,)but to most people traveling in a group is the best choice.

文章观点明确思路较清晰还是不错的呵，语言上还应多下下功夫，个人觉得最好不要用you will、you can之类的句式，换做someone、people之类的泛指比较好一点。
Travel这个词使用频率也过多了，可以换journey，trip之类的使文章变化一下。字数有些偏多，300多字即可，否则考场上恐怕难以成文。+U~