u『Toefl Dark_Tournament写作组laqfanfan第22次作业』

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to finish a project and then start another than to finish two projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

There is no way around the fact that we live in a world where people face with a burgeoning development of technology and economy are suffering a intense competition than has ever been before. How can we become efficient in a method of finishing a project and then starting another while everyone seems to lack of energy and time? As for me, people in current times will be more productive would they finish two objectives at the same time.

First of all, working on two concurrent projects can be very urgent for a person. Hence individuous will utilize time more effective and find a most efficient way to accomplish them. For instance, a student who want to go to America to study and obtain a higher diploma will not only promote his/her competence of English, but also have to acquire an excellent GPA, therefore, they will utilize class time more effective to study specific knowledge in the university   than ever before and learn English after class,the time in which they read textbooks before they decided to study away.

In addition, if we concentrate on one thing day in and day out, maybe we can not undertake it well. As we know, any things in the nature have mysterious connection with each other, so maybe we'll obtain amazing inspiration as we turn into doing another thing when we confront difficulties on one task. For example, a chemical experiment must have affiliation with the principles of physics, when a student confront a difficulty in a laboratory, if he distracts his attention to physics, maybe he will have a surprising detection.

Finally, with the mounting pace of life and increasingly competitive job market, we should accomplish projects more and more productive. As the reasons presented above and such examples are numerous, I strongly confirm that it is better to finish two projects at the same time than to achieve a task and then start another.

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gaoxchunUID: 2403883

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gaoxchunUID: 2403883

There is no way around the fact that we live in a world where people face with a burgeoning development of technology and economy are(is) suffering a intense competition than has ever been before.(经济受到强烈竞争？？不太通吧) How can we become efficient in a method of finishing a project and then starting another while everyone seems to lack of energy and time? As for me, people in current times will be more productive would they finish two objectives at the same time.（这句语法有点问题）

First of all, working on two concurrent projects can be very urgent for a person. Hence individuous（individual） will utilize time more effective and find a most efficient way to accomplish them. For instance, a student who want to go to America to study and obtain a higher diploma will not only promote his/her competence of English, but also have to acquire an excellent GPA, therefore, they will utilize class time more effective to study specific knowledge in the university   than ever before and learn English after class, the time in which they read textbooks before they decided to study away.

In addition, if we concentrate on one thing day in and day out, maybe we can not undertake it well. As we know, any things in the nature have mysterious(latent 或者 potential怎样) connection with each other, so maybe we'll obtain amazing inspiration as we turn into doing another thing when we confront difficulties on one task. For example, a chemical experiment must have affiliation with the principles of physics, when a student confront a difficulty in a laboratory, if he distracts his attention to physics, maybe he will have a surprising detection.

Finally, with the mounting pace of life and increasingly competitive job market, we should accomplish projects more and more productive. As the reasons presented above and such examples are numerous, I strongly confirm that it is better to finish two projects at the same time than to achieve a task and then start another.

用词比较单一，分析不是很有力。
能力有限，仅供参考

gaoxchunUID: 2403883

不好意思。。字体不知道怎么回事改不大了。复制出来看吧。。

风辰的眼泪UID: 2618183

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to finish a project and then start another than to finish two projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

There is no way around the fact that we live in a world where people face with a burgeoning development of technology and economy are(这是哪个成分？) suffering a intense competition than（that） has ever been before. How can we become efficient in a method of finishing a project and then starting another while everyone seems to lack of energy and time? As for me, people in current times will be more productive would （if?）they finish two objectives at the same time.
First of all, working on two concurrent projects can be very urgent for a person. Hence individuous (individuals)will utilize time more effective and find a most efficient way to accomplish them. For instance, a student who want(s) to go to America to(for) study(studying) and obtain(ing) a higher diploma will not only promote his/her competence of English, but also have to acquire an excellent GPA, therefore, they will utilize class time more effective to study specific knowledge in the university   than ever before and learn English after class,the time in which they read textbooks before they decided to study away.(这个例子好像不是很能说明论点)
addition, if we concentrate on one thing day in and day out, maybe we can not undertake it well. As we know, any things in the nature have mysterious connection with each other, so maybe we'll obtain amazing inspiration as we turn into doing another thing when we confront difficulties on one task. For example, a chemical experiment must have affiliation with the principles of physics, when a student confront（s） a difficulty in a laboratory, if he distracts his attention to physics, maybe he will have a surprising detection.
  Finally, with the mounting pace of life and increasingly competitive job market, we should accomplish projects more and more productive(productively). As the reasons presented above and(前后两个句子成分不一致，不能用and) such examples are numerous, I strongly confirm that it is better to finish two projects at the same time than to achieve a task and then start another.
楼主文笔不错，但有些例子说明不是很充分，如果改下会更好，我技术有限，改的不好，还望见谅哈。