TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 网兜妮妮第二十四次作业

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Every one may make mistakes, no matter how good he/she is, it is inevitable. However, when things come to our friends, we meet a dilemma: say or do something to their mistakes or just let it be? As to me, I will choose to tell my friends the mistake, and I think only in this way could I keep my friendship.

Firstly, trust is the foundation of friendship. We should be honest to our friends whatever the situation is. To be honest is to tell the truth, or to tell right from wrong. For example, my friend smokes at a non-smoke area; I certainly will stop him and tell him it is a bad manner to do so. Although in the moment, he can not do what he wants, to smoke, but actually, the little unhappy avoid him to be punished, and to some extent, my action let him aware of doing the thing wrong, I mean, he will finally know that I was helping him. So, it strengthens our friendship than destroys it.

Secondly, a friend is a mirror of oneself. What you did on him/her, he/she will return the same way. If I saying or doing something to my friend's mistake, he/she will find out my mistakes and help me to do better as well. No one is born perfect, we should do things and recurrent our actions along the way we live. In this process, friends act as a vital role. If I cheat in an exam and my friend does something to stop me, it will have a great impact on me that I will recognize I should work hard to achieve success than do something apparently, only on exam papers. So, in this case, my friend not only helps me in an exam, but in a larger scene,shows me the truth of life, which benefits a life-long time. So, like what I said, through helping with each other, my friends and I may keep our friendship longer.

Of course, some one will argue that let a friend to make a mistake is better because one can only learned by his/her own experience. This is partly true. Friend is of great importance in our life, and we can learn a lot by other’s advices. So, when we see a mistake in our friends, just speak it out or do something to stop; when the mistakes are out of our eyes, just let it be and let our friends to learn by his/her own.

To sum up, what is really good to friendship, as to me, the answer is telling my friends the truth and helping them out of their mistake. I think it is the best way to strengthen our friendship and it goes well in my life.

Jessie奔奔UID: 2627156

楼主我的语法很差，所以不能给你看语法上错误了实在很抱歉。在内容上， 我感觉比较好，但应该多注意例子的运用，观点应该鲜明，提出后能够展开论述然后用例子论证。总体上来看我觉得比较好值得我学习。

soilinkinUID: 2163892

Every one（everyone） may make mistakes, no matter how good he/she is, it is inevitable(what is inevitable？...句子不完整外国人可没法明白...). However, when things come to our friends, we meet a dilemma: say or do something to their mistakes or just let it be? As to me, I will choose to tell my friends the mistake, and I think only in this way could I keep my friendship.

Firstly, trust is the foundation of friendship. We should be honest to our friends whatever the situation is. To be honest is to tell the truth, or to tell right from wrong. For example, （if）my friend smokes at a non-smoke area; I certainly will stop him and tell him it is a bad manner to do so. Although in the moment, he can not do what he wants, to smoke, but actually, the little unhappy（unhappiness） avoid him to be punished, and to some extent, my action let him （be）aware of doing the thing wrong, I mean, he will finally know that I was（am） helping him. So, it strengthens our friendship （rather）than destroys it.

Secondly, a friend is a mirror of oneself(这个表达是不是太中国化了啊...). What you did on（to） him/her, he/she will（would） return the same way. If I saying or doing（say or do） something to my friend's mistake, he/she will find out my mistakes and help me to do better as well. No one is born perfect, we should do things and recurrent our actions along the way we live. In this process, friends act as a vital role. If I cheat in an exam and my friend does something to stop me, it will have a great impact on me that I will recognize I should work hard to achieve success than do（doing） something apparently, only on exam papers. So, in this case, my friend not only helps me in an exam, but（also） in a larger scene,shows me the truth of life, which benefits（will benefit me） a life-long time. So, like what I said, through helping with each other, my friends and I may keep our friendship longer.

Of course, some one will argue that let a friend to make a mistake is better because one can only learned（learn） by his/her own experience. This is partly true. Friend is of great importance in our life, and we can learn a lot by other’s advices. So, when we see a mistake in our friends, just speak it out or do something to stop; when the mistakes are out of our eyes, just let it be and let our friends to learn by his/her own.（这段的观点似乎有点混乱...第一句说不说更好...后面却说应该说...有点矛盾...也没有转折过度啊...）

To sum up, what is really good to friendship,(用问号...) as to me, the answer is telling my friends the truth and helping them out of their mistake. I think it is the best way to strengthen our friendship and it goes well in my life.

没什么大问题...但是细节问题需要处理好...

jackie1983UID: 2484456

Every one may make mistakes, no matter how good he/she is, it is inevitable. However, when things come to our friends, we meet a dilemma: say or do something to their mistakes or just let it be? As to me, I will choose to tell my friends the mistake, and I think only in this way could I keep my friendship.& Z7 B! ?$ ]0 U7 f, G1 V; D$ M
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Firstly, trust is the foundation of friendship. We should be honest to our friends whatever the situation is. To be honest is to tell the truth, or to tell right from wrong. For example, my friend smokes at a non-smoke area; I certainly will stop him and tell him it is a bad manner to do so. Although in the moment, he can not do what he wants, to smoke, but actually, the little unhappy (+experience) avoid(s) him to be punished, and to some extent, my action let him aware of doing the thing wrong, I mean, he will finally know that I was helping him. So, it strengthens our friendship than destroys it.+ [( Z7 V( {( P

Secondly, a friend is a mirror of oneself. What you did on him/her, he/she will return the same way. If I saying（say） or doing（do） something to my friend's mistake, he/she will find out my mistakes and help me to do better as well. No one is born perfect, we should do things and recurrent our actions along the way we live. In this process, friends act as a vital role. If I cheat in an exam and my friend does something to stop me, it will have a great impact on me that I will recognize I should work hard to achieve success than do something apparently, only on exam papers. So, in this case, my friend not only helps me in an exam, but in a larger scene,shows me the truth of life, which benefits a life-long time. So, like what I said, through helping with each other, my friends and I may keep our friendship longer.  M: C' I, U' W  }

Of course, some one will argue that let（letting） a friend to(去掉) make a mistake is better because one can only learned（learn） by his/her own experience. This is partly true. Friend is of great importance in our life, and we can learn a lot by other’s advices. So, when we see a mistake in our friends, just speak it out or do something to stop; when the mistakes are out of our eyes, just let it be and let our friends to learn by his/her own.

To sum up, what is really good to friendship, as to me, the answer is telling my friends the truth and helping them out of their mistake. I think it is the best way to strengthen our friendship and it goes well in my life.
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jackie1983UID: 2484456

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网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

3# soilinkin
谢谢帮我拍，你改的地方都是我的惯常错误，下回一定多注意~~