【5.6月份 互改作文cracking ibt essay! wydv9 第31次作业】

wydv9UID: 2631605

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In such a society full of stress and competition, People, from young to old, woman to man, are always facing with a variety of challenges and difficulties derived from all aspects of life.These obstacles have laid too much pressure on people, which will lead to body or mental disease.so how to relax and live at easy is a critical problem for us. Some people argue that we can solve the problem by ourselves, but in my opinion, go to others for sharing your distress is the best way.

Society consists of human beings, so there must be a lot of people around you, choose one or two, or even more to complain your confuse or sadness.

Firstly, you can go to your friends. Go for friends, in my mind, may be the most effective way to relax. the reason is that friends may be the very people who know you the most, even better than your parents. I guess most people have an experience that talking with your best friend about your little secret or something you do not want to inform your parents. That's why friends can give your some advice when you stuck in stress or something disagreeable. Try to talk with them, or go to some noisy place like pub to play with wild.

Besides, parents must be the person who loves you best in this world, so you can also run to them without any hesitation. your sadness is their upset, which will make them worry a lot. so they may rush to you to inquire you
about all your problems, and needless to say, they will give your opinion sincerely according to their experience. When you solve the problem, you are relaxed. parents will listen to all your complaints with a full patience, you can even cry in front of them to reduce your stress, and they will not laugh at your like, maybe, some of your friends.

Everyone wants to be happy all the time, and each of you wants to solve all the things by yourselves without bothering others. However, believe me, go for others around you when you want to relax and eliminate all your pressure, and you will enjoy not only the beauty of life ,but also the love and care between people in the world.

shancaoUID: 2637576

1# wydv9

In such a society full of stress and competition, People, from young to old, woman to man, are always facing with a variety of challenges and difficulties derived from all aspects of life.These obstacles have laid too much pressure（lay pressure能这么用吗？我上网查了一下，没找到啊） on people, which will lead to body（physical） or mental disease.so how to relax and live at easy is a critical problem for us. Some people argue that we can solve the problem by ourselves, but in my opinion, go to others for sharing your distress is the best way.
Society consists of human beings, so there must be a lot of people around you, choose one or two, or even more to complain your confuse or sadness." Z8 b, Q# s. ~) W



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Firstly, you can go to your friends. Go for friends, in my mind, may be the most effective way to relax. the reason is that friends may be the very people who know you the most, even better than your parents. I guess most people have an experience that talking with your best（可以用closest or intimate具体化） friend about your little secret or something you do not want to inform your parents. That's why friends can give your some advice when you stuck in stress or something disagreeable.（这句话和上句话有因果关系吗？） Try to talk with them, or go to some noisy place like pub to play with wild.- q4 d3 }- F6 D

Besides, parents must be the person who loves you best in this world, so you can also run to them without any hesitation. your sadness is their upset, which will make them worry a lot. so they may rush to you to inquire you
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Everyone wants to be happy all the time, and each of you wants to solve all the things by yourselves without bothering others. However, believe me, go for others around you when you want to relax and eliminate（上google看了一下，eliminate好像没有用在情绪压力上的个人觉得relief更好） all your pressure, and you will enjoy not only the beauty of life ,but also the love and care between people in the world.

我也27号考，也才写了一次。你第一次写写成这样，基础已经很不错了。建议你下次把题目附上，我写的和你不一样，所以没办法看你的文章结构什么的~~~
总之写的很不错，呵呵，共同努力吧！

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lingyao1UID: 2467525

1# wydv9

很不错，是在30分钟内写完直接贴上的吗。楼主写的挺好，没有什么特大的错误，就是在第三段结尾的“or go to some noisy place like pub to play with wild.”我觉得有些生硬并且和前一句还有中心句联系不大，感觉去pub之类的地方并不一定是和朋友一起去或是那里的人多就等于在那里解压和周围的人有关。

wydv9UID: 2631605

呵呵 整整写了30分钟的。。。我同学说最好20分钟写完 这样可以留出时间检查~~~我会继续练得啦 呵呵
谢谢你哦~~~pub这个问题我再看下 其实我写的时候也觉得很。。。只是实在不知道说啥了。。
谢谢谢谢！！我有信心了
3# lingyao1

wydv9UID: 2631605

2# shancao
呵呵 谢谢你哦！！你看的好仔细啊 我认真研究了你提的那几个问题 我觉得你指出的特别好 我以后会改正的~~
第一次写特别紧张 就害怕超时间。。呵呵
很感谢你哦~~~很感谢你的问题和这么认真的阅读哦~~我们要一起加油！！灿烂在六月 呵呵