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[活动] 2009 进军美利坚作文组 wondersmiths2第十三次作业 8.31 [复制链接]

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In the lecture, the speaker talks about the advantages of the prescribed fire. He totally disagrees with the arguments stated in the reading passage, due to the following reasons.

First, contrary to the opinion that the prescribed fire can cause severe air pollution and global warming, the speaker thinks that in fact the process of prescribed fire is very slow and the outcome of the fire mostly is ashes, which can reduce the risk of big fire caused by sunlight. And also that cannot be done by disking alone. So this is a direct contrast to the statement of the reading passage.

Second, the speaker points out that the prescribed fire has already been put into practice for a long time and there are a lot of trained people taking part in controlling the fire. Hence, people can limit when and where the fire will happen and it is not necessary to worry about the danger of the fire.

Finally, compared to the damage caused by big fire, not to mention the influence on home and family, the expense of the prescribed fire is less than tenth of that. Therefore, it is wise to use small fire to protect our society and nature.
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In the lecture, the speaker talks about the advantages of the prescribed fire. He totally disagrees with the arguments stated in the reading passage, due to the following reasons
简单明了的. 大家开头都是很简洁的.
First, contrary to the opinion that the prescribed fire can cause severe air pollution and global warming, the speaker thinks that in fact the process of prescribed fire is very slow and the outcome of the fire mostly is ashes, which can reduce the risk of big fire caused by sunlight. And also that cannot be done by disking alone. So this is a direct contrast to the statement of the reading passag 看了你们的第一段 看来我听的不到位, 不知道有没有自圆其说啊...

d, the speaker points out that the prescribed fire has already been put into practice好的 for a long time and there are a lot of trained people taking part in controlling the fire. Hence, people can limit when and where the fire will happen and it is not necessary to worry about the danger of the fire.

inally, compared to the damage caused by big fire, not to mention the influence on home and family, the expense of the prescribed fire is less than tenth of that. Therefore, it is wise to use small fire?? to protect our society and nature.短小精悍, 点也说的很全

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发表于 2009-9-1 20:46:06 |只看该作者
In the lecture, the speaker talks about the advantages of the

prescribed fire. He totally disagrees with the arguments stated in the

reading passage, (这里逗号不用加)due to the following reasons.

First, contrary to the opinion that the prescribed fire can cause

severe air pollution and global warming, the speaker thinks that in

fact the process of prescribed fire is very slow and the outcome of the

fire mostly is ashes, which can reduce the risk of big fire caused by

sunlight. And also that cannot be done by disking alone. So this is a

direct contrast to the statement of the reading passage.(这里可以再多

写点原因,不过自己也没做到,做了这个听力练习的听抄才发现,有很多没记下

来)

Second, the speaker points out that the prescribed fire has already

been put into practice for a long time and there are a lot of trained

people taking part in controlling the fire. Hence, people can limit

when and where the fire will happen and it is not necessary to worry

about the danger of the fire.

Finally, compared to the damage caused by big fire, not to mention the

influence on home and family, the expense of the prescribed fire is

less than tenth of(好像没有这种用法) that. Therefore, it is wise to

use small fire to protect our society and nature.

总评,写得还是很好的,没有大的语法错误,只是听力方面还要加强。一起努力

吧,俺的听力也不行。

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