美利坚第一次作业 9.25 by跑跑

liuguaguaUID: 2569375

9.25 有的人认为网络给人们带来了大量的信息，好啊，也有的人觉得这些信息带来了麻烦，你的观点; `3 e# s" C"
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第一趟写，狠批吧

With the development of technology, many new invention emerges as the spring mushroom such as television, mobile vechiles, gene projects and internet. Those new inventions brings great facilities to the whole society, meanwhile great potential risks also exist anywhere. As far as I am concerned, comparing with the disadvantages including loss of privacy and increasing of crimes benefits brought by internet such as timely global communication and fast learning opportunities outweights.

To the beginning, internet enable people to avoid the information restriction on regions and accelerate the global communication, which can improve the economy development of whole world. In the ancient years, most people have to walk nearly 1 day to send a message to relatives living in the other side of the city. Not only time but also energy are wasted in the useless process. Nowadays, one computer, internet wire, keyboard and mouse can let you achieve your aim without going out. A second’s time can realize your communication with the other side of earth. The communication proficiency enhance heavily which will lead to the gigantic economy increase. The appearance of Alibaba and Taobao are the best proofs to illustrate this viewpoint. Instead of going to swissland, you can buy the Tissot Watch with cheap price.

Additionally, people can get their needed knowledge as soon as possible. Take myself as example, when I have any problem google or baidu are my first choice to seek for help. Internet are filled with many useful knowledge, which is very economical without the cost of buying books and the traffic fees. Moreover, every people can easily access the knowledge ocean no matter they are poor, old or disabled. They can freely enjoy the joy of learning instead of facing embassard. Just imagine, without internet how can they get the knowledge so easily?

In all, although internet exists a lot of problems like internet crimes or risk of loss of privacy, I still hold the opinion that internets cast more advantages on people. If we want the internet to play its most postive effects on society, government should enact the corresponding policies or regulations to decrease the negative influences.

sharamandeUID: 2597186

With the development of technology, many new invention emerges as the spring mushroom such as television, mobile vechiles, gene projects and internet(最好用Internet，这大小写代表的意思不一样呢). Those new inventions brings(主谓一致) great facilities to the whole society, meanwhile great potential risks also exist anywhere(everywhere). As far as I am concerned, comparing with the disadvantages including loss of privacy and increasing of crimes benefits brought by internet such as timely global communication and fast learning opportunities outweights.(感觉第一段刚开始跟Internet关系不大，不够直接)

To the beginning(in the beginning), internet enable(主谓一致) people to avoid the information restriction on regions and accelerate the global communication, which can improve the economy development of whole world. In the ancient years, most people have(这里应该是过去时吧) to walk nearly 1 day to send a message to relatives living in the other side of the city. Not only time but also energy are wasted in the useless process. Nowadays, one computer, internet wire, keyboard and mouse can let you achieve your aim without going out. A second’s time can realize your communication with the other side of earth. The communication proficiency enhance heavily which will lead to the gigantic economy increase. The appearance of Alibaba and Taobao are the best proofs to illustrate this viewpoint. Instead of going to swissland(国家名首字母大写), you can buy the Tissot Watch with cheap price.(我觉得你这个例子不太对应，前面说的是communication，这后面又说的是网上购物)

Additionally, people can get their needed knowledge as soon as possible. Take myself as (an)example, when I have any problem google or(and) baidu are my first choice to seek for help. Internet are filled with many useful knowledge, which is very economical without the cost of buying books and the traffic fees. (这一句很好！)Moreover, every people can easily access the knowledge ocean no matter they are poor, old or disabled. They can freely enjoy the joy of learning instead of facing embassard(这个词是什么？). Just imagine, without internet how can they get the knowledge so easily?

In all, although internet exists(这里觉得不太对，不如说there exists...on Internet) a lot of problems like internet crimes or risk of loss of privacy, I still hold the opinion that internets cast more advantages on people. If we want the internet to play its most postive effects on society, government should enact the corresponding policies or regulations to decrease the negative influences. (结尾不错)

两点理由还是很不错滴，语言也可以，注意些小错误吧