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发表于 2009-10-6 22:57:21 |显示全部楼层
In the recent years, there is a generalcontroversy over the topic that whether government should pay more attention onthe health care issues than on the environmental issues. Although some peopleclaim that health care problems are closely related to human beings,personally, I prefer to support that environmental issues are the ones needmore attentions and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my pointof view.

First and foremost, there is no denyingthat environmental problems are so severe and urgent that government must takeimmediate actions to solve them. It is universally acknowledged that along withthe rapid development of technology, modern society also suffers from a myriadof environment-related problems. For instance, due to the damage of habitats,many species of wild plants as well as animals are on the edge of extinction,the biodiversity of eco-system has largely reduced, which will finally destroythe food chain in the eco-system and further influence the survive of humanbeing, since we are living in the same nature. Another example is the energycrisis caused by the quickly growing demands of fossil fuels as a main power forautomobiles. It will at the end make our next generation have not enough energyto use, and suffered from serious poor energy time. Accordingly, it is obviousthat we have no alternative but to deal with the environmental trouble asquickly as possible..

In the second place, if the energy problemscan not be handled at once, they could result in some other questions such as riskthe health of human. It is well known that things are always inter-related witheach other, when one shifts, other will meanwhile have some changes. Forinstance, when the air pollution is not controlled well, the dirty air willbreathed by citizens, and eventually cause some respiratory diseases, certainare even fetal to human beings. What is more, the polluted water by pesticidesor other chemical materials will also make a great influence on people's lives,through drinking or eating, they could easily absorb the poison water, whichwill bring detrimental to their health.

Last but not least, unlike the environmentalissues, health care problems can be solved in other methods besides governmentenforcements. For example, when people are aware of the fact that health isquite significant in their lives, they will take it seriously by keeping healthdiet, taking exercises and so force.

To sum up, taking into account the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonablefor the government to pay more attention on the environmental issues.

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发表于 2009-10-7 12:00:35 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 happyzhengang 于 2009-10-7 12:02 编辑

In the recent years,there is a general controversy over the topic that whether government shouldpay more attention on the health care issues than on the environmental issues.Although some people claim that health care problems are closely related tohuman beings, personally, I prefer to support that environmental issues are theones need more attentions and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstratemy point of view.呵呵,跟miaz的开头很类似,有种千篇一律的感觉,这也是不不赞同的原因

First and foremost,there is no denying that environmental problems are so severe and urgent thatgovernment must take immediate actions to solve them. It is universallyacknowledged that along with the rapid development of technology, modernsociety also suffers from a myriad of environment-related problems. Forinstance, due to the damage of habitats, many species of wild plants as well asanimals are on the edge of extinction, the biodiversity of eco-system haslargely reduced, which will finally destroy the food chain in the eco-systemand further influence the survive of human being, since we are living in thesame nature. Another example is the energy crisis caused by the quickly growingdemands of fossil fuels as a main power for automobiles. It will at the endmake our next generation have not enough energy to use, and sufferedsuffer from serious poor energy time.Accordingly, it is obvious that we have no alternative but to deal with theenvironmental trouble as quickly as possible. 个人觉得很好了,没有什么毛病,通顺流畅

In the second place,if the energy problems can not be handled at once, they could result in someother questions such as risk the health of human. It is well known that thingsare always inter-related with each other, when one shifts, other will meanwhilehave some changes. For instance, when the air pollution is not controlled well,the dirty air will (add be) breathed by citizens, and eventually cause some respiratorydiseases, certain are even fetal(fatal) to human beings. What is more, the polluted water(water polluted) by pesticides or otherchemical materials will also make a great influence on people's lives, throughdrinking or eating, they could easily absorb the poison water, which will bringdetrimental to their health. 本段在前段的基础上更进一步说明,我觉得开头换成furthermore会更好些~~


Last but not least, unlike the environmental issues,health care problems can be solved in other methods besides government enforcements.For example, when people are aware of the fact that health is quite significantin their lives, they will take it seriously by keeping health diet, takingexercises and so force.
这段的出现很是重要,有点题之效

To sum up, taking into account the discussion mentioned above, wemay safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonable for thegovernment to pay more attention on the environmental issues.

感觉楼主的写作能力确实不一般,言之有物言之有理,实在是佩服啦~~
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发表于 2009-10-7 15:49:35 |显示全部楼层
In the recent years, there is a generalcontroversy over the topic that whether government should pay more attention onthe health care issues than on the environmental issues. Although some peopleclaim that health care problems are closely related to human beings,personally, I prefer to support that environmental issues are the ones needmore attentions and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my pointof view.(我们开头真的很像,我是考G的时候模版看多了。。) ; e- B" N6 U9 h# J9 w

First and foremost, there is no denyingthat environmental problems are so severe and urgent that government must takeimmediate actions to solve them. It is universally acknowledged that along withthe rapid development of technology, modern society also suffers from a myriad of environment-related problems. For instance, due to the damage of habitats,many species of wild plants as well as animals are on the edge of extinction,the biodiversity of eco-system has largely reduced, which will finally destroythe food chain in the eco-system and further influence the survive (survival)of humanbeing, since we are living in the same nature. Another example is the energycrisis caused by the quickly growing demands of fossil fuels as a main power forautomobiles. It will at the end make our next generation have not enough energyto use, and suffered(suffer) from serious poor energy time(suffer from time..不太好). Accordingly, it is obviousthat we have no alternative but to deal with the environmental trouble asquickly as possible..

In the second place, if the energy problemscan not be handled at once, they could result in some other questions such as riskthe health of human(这里不是举的例子吧). It is well known that things are always inter-related witheach other, when one shifts, other will meanwhile have some changes. Forinstance, when the air pollution is not controlled well, the dirty air willbreathed by citizens, and eventually cause some respiratory diseases, certainare even fetal to human beings. What is more, the polluted water by pesticidesor other chemical materials will also make a great influence on people's lives,through drinking or eating, they could easily absorb the poison water, whichwill bring detrimental(detrimental是adj,用be就好了) to their health.7 _& Q* i- ~  X; }% h: [+ j% w

Last but not least, unlike the environmentalissues, health care problems can be solved in other methods besides governmentenforcements. For example, when people are aware of the fact that health isquite significant in their lives, they will take it seriously by keeping healthdiet, taking exercises and so force(forth).

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To sum up, taking into account the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonablefor the government to pay more attention on the environmental issues.(结尾也差不多,呵呵) % i  }+ x) P! G' D! }
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