12.15综合写作 TPO9 by lijr03

lijr03UID: 2522963

The lecturer completely confuses the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.

First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.

Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then internal-combustion engines, the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are polluted. The produce process causes a lot of pollution.

Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work.

In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.

shiwei83UID: 2680950

（开头最好能用一句话简要介绍一下阅读材料的中心意思）The lecturer completely confuses the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.
First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. （liquid）Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.
Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then internal-combustion engines, (but)the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines (would)(删去are polluted). The produce process causes a lot of pollution.
Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work.（最好能提到是因为引擎需要一种稀有金属，导致价钱昂贵）
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.
（结构不错，要点也基本正确，但是没有与阅读材料结合起来。最好每段能先介绍一下阅读材料的观点，再结合听力材料逐条反驳）

lijr03UID: 2522963

谢谢

tiantian_raoUID: 2623283

（我也同意shiwei的观点，应该第一段简单的写下总述的观点）The lecturer completely confuses（我觉得这个词不恰当，应该用反驳的意思的词） the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.
First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be （加stored）very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines. （每一段也应该说下阅读中的内容）
Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then （than）internal-combustion engines, the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are polluted. The produce process causes a lot of pollution.
Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work. （不是因为没有它就不能工作，而是它是由rare mantel制造的，而且现在还不能用cheap mental 去制造）
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.

听力的内容复述的不错，但应该也有阅读中的内容……而且有些听力的小细节没写到……加油加油~