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[活动] 12.15综合写作 TPO9 by lijr03 [复制链接]

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The lecturer completely confuses the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.

First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.

Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then internal-combustion engines, the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are polluted. The produce process causes a lot of pollution.

Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work.

In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.
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发表于 2009-12-17 11:37:09 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 shiwei83 于 2009-12-17 11:38 编辑

开头最好能用一句话简要介绍一下阅读材料的中心意思)The lecturer completely confuses the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.
First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. (liquid)Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.
Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then internal-combustion engines, (but)the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines (would)(删去are polluted). The produce process causes a lot of pollution.
Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work.(最好能提到是因为引擎需要一种稀有金属,导致价钱昂贵
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.
结构不错,要点也基本正确,但是没有与阅读材料结合起来。最好每段能先介绍一下阅读材料的观点,再结合听力材料逐条反驳

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发表于 2009-12-17 12:25:51 |只看该作者
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发表于 2009-12-17 19:51:17 |只看该作者
(我也同意shiwei的观点,应该第一段简单的写下总述的观点)The lecturer completely confuses(我觉得这个词不恰当,应该用反驳的意思的词) the statements in the reading passage. The lecturer says that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution of the problem.
First, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not practically available. Hydrogen is very artificial and it needs to be (加stored)very cold. It requires high technology to produce hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines. (每一段也应该说下阅读中的内容)
Second, although hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are less polluted then (than)internal-combustion engines, the factories of producing hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines are polluted. The produce process causes a lot of pollution.
Third, fuel-cell engines are also expensive. This is because the fuel-cell engines need component engines which are expensive. Without component engines, fuel-cell engines could not work. (不是因为没有它就不能工作,而是它是由rare mantel制造的,而且现在还不能用cheap mental 去制造)
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with the writer and she thinks that fuel-cell engines are not successful.

听力的内容复述的不错,但应该也有阅读中的内容……而且有些听力的小细节没写到……加油加油~
等到老了,即使一无所有,只要心是满的就好……

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