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1.7 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.



Considering the benefits brought by television for individuals and society, I disagree with the statement that watch television will not have negative impact on issue raised, such as destroying communication among friends and family.


To begin with, it is undeniable that television, which serves as a prevailing media nowadays, will provide more talking topic among friends. As far as I know, the TV shows or programs everyday are the majority topics among friends. Take my roommate May for example. I was not quite familiar with May in the beginning of the semester since we were freshmen. When I moved to our dormitory, May began to chat with me about a prevailing TV program-Planet Discovery-at that time. It is the TV program we watched that provided us a opportunity to share our common interests, especially on the astronomy science. Thanks to this TV program, I easily found my best friend in a short time. Meanwhile, I bet majority of friends would like to talk about the program in TV and share their comments.


Furthermore, it is also indisputable that the relationship of the whole family will be tied closer by watching TV together in the spare time. I found that it is the best change for the whole family to share our happiness or experience in our daily routines, when the whole family watch TV together. Take my family for another instance. My grandma usually calls us to accompany her to watch TV. Meanwhile, she would tell amounts of her story in her life compared to that happened in the TV programs. In this case, it is the TV ties our relationship closer and shortens our generation gap in the communication. Therefore, TV plays an important function to tie our family relationship.


Finally, although we'll spend time in watching TV, this entertainment will not cause us to spend less time in mutual communication or having social activities with our friends or family. From a recent survey, scientists find that it is the internet online-game, not TV , destroy the communication among friends and families. So, we should not blame TV for the responsibility.


Judging from the evidences I offered above, it is television that helps us have more communication with each other, makes atmosphere in family more harmony. Therefore, the superiorities of television is obvious and will not have detrimental effects on the issue mentioned.

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Considering the benefits brought by television forindividuals and society, I disagree with the statement that watch television willnot have negative impact on issue raised (这句话貌似没有说清楚,我不同意地是看电视不会带来负效应?那就是带来负效应?), such as destroying communication among friends andfamily.

To begin with, it is undeniable that television,which serves as a prevailing media nowadays, will provide more talking topicamong friends. As far as I know, the TV shows or programs everyday are (become to be the source of) the majority topics among(discussed by) friends. Take my roommate May forexample. I was not quite familiar with May in the beginning of the semestersince we were freshmen. When I moved to our dormitory, May began to chat withme about a prevailing (popular,前面用了prevailing) TV program-Planet Discovery-at that time.It is the TV program we watched that provided (可以用gave,避免重复使用)us a (an) opportunity to share our common interests, especially on theastronomy science. Thanks to this TV program, I easily found my best friend ina short time. Meanwhile, I bet majority of friends would like to talk about theprogram in TV and share their comments.

Furthermore, it is also indisputable that therelationship of the whole family will be tied closer by watching TV together inthe spare time. I found that it is the best change for the whole family toshare our happiness or experience in our daily routines, (especially at the time,增加句子的连贯性)
when the whole family watch TV together. Take myfamily for another instance. My grandma usually calls us to accompany her towatch TV. Meanwhile, she would tell amounts of her story in her life comparedto that happened in the TV programs. In this case, it is the TV ties ourrelationship closer and shortens our generation gap in the communication.Therefore, TV plays an important function to tie our family relationship.

Finally, although we'll spend time in watching TV,this entertainment will not cause us to spend less time in mutual communicationor having social activities with our friends or family (觉得这句话需要重新组织一下,我想了半天也想不好。。).From a recent survey, scientists find that it is the internet online-game, notTV , destroy the communication among friends and families. So, we should notblame TV for the responsibility.


Judging from the evidences I offered above, it is televisionthat helps us have more communication with each other, makes atmosphere infamily more harmony. Therefore, the superiorities of television is (are) obvious and will not have detrimental effects onthe issue mentioned.

内容组织方面不错,读完之后我才发现原来我写得太绕弯了,就应该像搂住一样几下就切中要害呵呵
主要就是要注意同义词的换用,尽量不要重复使用同一个词:)

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