1.8 独立作文

liuyixuanUID: 2408648

1.8 Some people think that the automobile has improved modern life. Others think that the automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Automobile influences our lives a lot and it’s a great invention in the world in 19th century. As the change of the world, everything has been renewed. People’s modern lives need much efficiency. Automobile helps us a lot in both daily lives and social society.

As modern humans, we can’t live without automobiles. We are not allowed to waste time on the way. Busy days beginning in the morning, we drive a car or take a taxi to go to work. On occasion, we have to drive somewhere to handle problems. In the working day, we use automobile to save our precious time. Distance is not the main problem anymore if we make use of a car. What’s more, Automobile is also protects us from the rain or snow weather when we are on the road. Automobile turns to be a most convenient, fast and economical vehicle.

Internet makes people to people closer, automobile makes place to place nearer. In the past, we need to spend almost one month to get to another place where is far away. Now we will get there only within a couple of days by automobile. It is not only changed our traffic conditions but also expands the city. It makes the life style becoming true that is living in the country and working in the city. Because of it we have more choices to choose living places. It influences our views of life, consumption structures and the way of doing activities.

Automobiles’ popularization brings the social reform. A great many new fields are appeared. For example, Auto distributions, Auto Arts, Auto Advertisements, Auto Models and Auto Exhibitions are coming out. These fields stimulate domestic demand. Furthermore they bring lots of jobs which help to reduce social pressure. Around me, there are many people working in the field that related to automobiles.

Automobiles make our lives to be more colorful and wonderful.

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

Automobile influences our lives a lot and it’s a great invention in the world in 19th century. As the change of the world, everything has been renewed. People’s modern lives need much efficiency. Automobile helps us a lot in both daily lives and social society.

As modern humans, we can’t live without automobiles. We are(do) not allowed to waste time on the way. Busy days beginning in the morning, we drive a car or take a taxi to go to work. On occasion, we have to drive to somewhere(someplace) to handle problems. In the working day, we use automobile to save our precious time. Distance is not the main problem anymore if we make use of a car. What’s more, Automobile is also protects us from the rain or snow weather when we are on the road. Automobile turns to be a most convenient, fast and economical vehicle.
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Internet makes people to people closer, automobile makes place to place nearer.(这个类比很好！) In the past, we need to spend almost one month to get to another place where is far away. Now we will get there only within a couple of days by automobile. It is not only changed our traffic conditions but also expands the city. It makes the life style becoming true that is living in the country and working in the city.(这句是不是应该这样说：It makes the life style that living in the country and working in the city become true) Because of it we have more choices  to choose living places. It influences our views of life, consumption structures and the way of doing activities.

Automobiles’ popularization brings the social reform. A great many new fields are appeared. For example, Auto distributions, Auto Arts, Auto Advertisements, Auto Models and Auto Exhibitions are coming out. These fields stimulate domestic demand. Furthermore they bring lots of jobs which help to reduce social pressure. Around me, there are many people working in the field that related to automobiles.

Automobiles make our lives to be more colorful and wonderful.(结尾有些仓促！)个人认为：没有太多句子上的问题。表扬的话不说了，直接进入正题：
1.LZ需要加强一下文章的思路和逻辑，开头，中间，结尾应该相互呼应，并且每个论证段落最好能够有关系，并列 or 递进 or转折
2.每段的TS以及后面怎么样论述，论点，论据，举例这些怎么样分配。例如：第一段个人认为写得稍微有些散，句子之间没有太多联系，感觉都比较独立。
3.结尾这样写估计不太好吧！呵呵！就一句话！
都是 我的个人意见，LZ仅供参考，个人觉得重点放在逻辑和结构上，句法，用词慢慢积累！