第一篇作文

oracletanUID: 2759589

is it better to travel with a tour guide?
    Objectively,the prevalence of traveling in a group led by a tourist guide reveals the fact that such form of excursing is more widely welcomed.thus,is it persuasive to conclude that the best way to travel is this sort of form?Apparently not,because traveling independently has its own irreplaceabke advanvantages over traveling with a group of people led by clients of guide.
    the freedom to handle the time spend on each spot or historical relic is rarely achievable in trips with guides,however,access to individual travel.for one thing,due to the investigation of sights using internet sourses,one can arrange his or her trip according to his or her own tastes and interests.for instance,during the vacation in San Franscisco,the guide led us to visit specific spots,tower,fishing bay,flower streets and Golden Bridge.Sacastically,however,i prefer to enjoy the beach and sunshine of the seashore instead of hurrying from one place to another exausted.
    Apart from the possessing more freedom,traveling alone will enable one to enjoy more adventure interests and fun.it's very logical for a guide to take the security of the group into significent position,which will largely inhibits him or her from taking his group to experience some location where even slight danger exists.for example,i used to travel in Mount Huang,a famous tourism in China.on the way to the highest peak of Mount Huang,the guide only led the group several hundrend meters below that peak then began to go down,which stimulates my curiosity and left the group to sought the highest point.eventually,i saw the grandy beautiful scenery of the spot in contrast with those people in group,who have to leave with regret.
    although traveling alone consists so many obvious advantages,the conquering of the market by group traveling is still the real phenomenon.to begin with,the guide will arrange all the things,like routes,spots,time,accomodation and transporation carefully and comfortable in exchange of some money.on the other hand,they will ensure the security and provide somewhat careful explaination of the history and legends of the local people,even the experience of his own.thus,the conclusion of which way is the best method to travel is arbitrary.
    considering the advantages and disadvantages of both means,it's a wiser choice to make dicision according to one's own conditions and needs.

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这篇是2.2号的作文，应该在前天交，然后参与昨天的分组，今天分的组是昨天的作文哦
因为并不是每个人都天天写作文，所以大家写一样的题目有对比有不一样所以好修改一些
所以今天没有给楼主分组

建议楼主今天写今天的作文题目，参与明天的分组:)

oracletanUID: 2759589

thanks mm
2.4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

It's a universally acknowledged fact that technology symbolize the high civilization and the development of human society.in other words,technology dramatically enhance people's working and production efficiency which eventually results in people's simpler life rather than more complicated ones.thus,technology brings more colourful living conditions instead of a more complicated lifestyle.

one reason that technology makes people's lives simpler is that it provides more comfortable and convenient conditions.for instance,with the aid of Google,the worry of shortage of information will be unnecessary.if not for the benefits we get from automobile,could we still be able to live far from our office?what's more,remote ancestors desire to solve the problem of temperature in different seasons affecting their normal life,which is easily solved by air conditioners nowdays.how could we deny the positive impacts of technology in making our lifes simpler?

another reason should be mentioned is that despit the complicate process of designing new technology,the operation for normal users is quite convenient and simple.admittedly,the programming process is a chanllenging and difficult task needing most genius staff while products operation are designed for customers as simple as possible.although Windows has renewed for several generation so far,the operation becomes easier and safer.similarly,an intelligent engineer may spend years in designing a new car,in contrast to a customer needn't waste much time in adapting to the use of such cars.

last but not the least,so-called more complecated sometimes come from those who are not willing to adopt new things.for example,women may find that washing clothes besides river is tiring and wasting time,but the unfamiliarity with washing machine will result their unwillingness to learn to use it.just because habits inhibits people from recieving more efficient and simpler new technologies.apparently,the variety of technology is somewhat a obstacle for eldly generation to accept,which does not indicate that technology makes the life more complicated.

in conclusion,according to the comprehensive analysis of technologies' effects on daily life,i disgree with the point that technology makes people's lives more complicated and agree with the idea that it makes people's lives simpler.

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3# oracletan 贴在附件里拉，怕颜色都变成一样的了

rmbzhcUID: 2404001

我来晚了，先道歉哈。

rmbzhcUID: 2404001

第一，文章整体：结构过关，论证逻辑过关，恭喜恭喜，值得学习；
第二，句式：我注意到句式有很丰富的变化，尤其第一点分论点非常漂亮。（我自己反正是分论点二，三的时候会越写越力不从心，攒的东西有限，第一点都显摆完了）
第三，我看到你开始注意把物放做主语。恭喜。说明mm英文已经有了一定境界。只是，有个别句子看起来还是比较生硬。
第四，last but not the least, 拼写错误和基本语法将把我上述给你罗列的优点统统毁掉！！！最简单的例子就是第一句
It's a universally acknowledged fact that technology symbolize the high civilization and the development of human society。你没加动词s !!!!这可是第一句啊， 这一句就足以把你作文打低一个档次了！！universally, acknowledged, symbolize, civilization 这些好词统统浪费。并且，我感觉the 用的不对。（这个是感觉，因为我的定冠词也很糟糕，是一个老美给我改作文我才发现的。中国学生极为痴迷地使用the,the the ）
我希望提请你，尤其是你这样水平的选手一定一定重视这个问题。

因此，我想给你改一点点语法，但不能贴附件，就没有发。那些小错误，都是你检查一遍马上可以看出来的，你的水平足够。

其次，我自己也能力有限，刚提到的看起来生硬的句子也改不出一个非常顺畅的出来。

非常建议你把自己的小语法，小拼写改进，10天之内足以冲到25+。因为mm 的英文真的已经相当不错了。

rmbzhcUID: 2404001

论坛总是限制我一个小时内法帖次数 真郁闷 等半个小时又上来发的

oracletanUID: 2759589

6# rmbzhc 非常感谢宝贵的意见丫~:）

oracletanUID: 2759589

Being profoundly advocated and inluenced by all sorts of media,people nowdays seems to be instigated with a prejudice that being creative is always the better choice at all costs.However,possessing a objective mood to sought truth,I fairly disgust such cliches as it should be categorated to fallacy.
       
        As a main reason to object this prevalent view,I have to declare that the ordinary methods may not be creative enough to satisfy some people's fake content of being "creative",but the detailed plaining,plus with past lessons,might as well be the best solution to an ordinary problem.To begin with,how extraordinarily lucky will we be to encounter a case which is not able to be tackled with by normal means?For instance,if you had bought a new car from ...with the engine undermined while you were an excellent worker to repair elecronic equipments,would you prefer to fix it by yourself instead of sending it back to where you bought it in a more ordinary way?on the other hand,examination is universally acknowledged the main fair and credit way for universities to select students from graduates.Though it has been doubted by many people for many years that it is not reasonable nor creative at all to measure a student's talent through merely a test.But how about the others?Can anybody lodge a better and creative way to evaluate the ability of thousands and hundrends of students through the country?No,i think.Thus,sometimes traditional ways,most of the times containing cautious planning,may not seems creative nor convincing,but it actually solve the problem indeed,which matches the benefits of the majority.
       
        Another reason that I assault the opponion that being creative can come up with best solution than planning carefully is that creative ideas cannot solve practical problems at many times,unless they are really creative and fit for the situation.Obviously,using developed medical measures,such as surgery or advancing equipments,and taking new bills are certainly new and creative ways to solve the problem of obesity.However,if we make an old-fashioned but careful planing,which includes daily meals nutrition,exercise and extra appropriate supplementary takings,Would  it be possible that most people accept the latter methods?Apparently.Morever,I,of course,will not blame being creative to be a nuisance or even harming thing,but the possessing of a creative attitude doesn't mean we have to be creative all the time,straying from normal thoughts towards a problem.As for daily matters,carefull planning is essential for most of the cases.
       
        last but not least,unless being applied to practical solution of a problem more efficient a creative methods,it has little meaning.In one case,Pro. KaiFu Li,the once Microsoft Asian chief and senior administrator of Google,used to work for SGI,another magnate.During his occupation,under his lead a brand new products was created.It really stimulate him and his staff for a while for it possesses most advanced technology in the world and assembling most creative ideas of his fellow.Ironically,this products failed as it did not fit the markets.That is to say,its too advance technology made consumer feel uncomfortable and not easy to use.Eventually,KaiFu Li had to leave for his fail in developing that product and other reasons.Therefore,creative might not attain the goal as it might seems.Careful planning is incredible significant as we can see from the example.Had if KaiFu Li done careful market requirments,would his genius work fail to grasp consumers' attention?It hard to forecast but promising.Whatever,careful planning should never be ignored no matter in normal cases nor among creative ways of dealing a trouble.
       
        In conclusion,being creative should be advocated among our children and spare a place in our minds for creative thinking.However,the importance of planning carefully should always be taken into account.Because most of the time, we do not need a Newton to lodge a new theory,but we need more workers to have the work done by the deadline.

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9# oracletan
Being profoundly advocated and influenced by all sorts of media,people nowadays seems to be instigated with a prejudice that being creative is always the better choice at all costs. However, possessing a objective mood to sought truth, I fairly disgust such clichés ？？是不是拼错了 as it should be categorized to fallacy.
这一段 是不是写的太复杂了？可能是我水平有限 读起来太费力了
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        As a main reason to object this prevalent view, I have to declare that the ordinary methods may not be creative enough to satisfy some people's fake content of being "creative", but the detailed planning, plus with past lessons, might as well be the best solution to an ordinary problem. To begin with, how extraordinarily lucky will we be to encounter a case which is not able to be tackled with by normal means? For instance, if you had bought a new car from ...with the engine undermined while you were an excellent worker to repair electronic equipments, would you prefer to fix it by yourself instead of sending it back to the place where you bought it in a more ordinary way? On the other hand, examination is universally acknowledged the main fair and credit way for universities to select students from graduates. Though it has been doubted by many people for many years that it is neither reasonable nor creative at all to measure a student's talent through merely a test. But how about the others? Can anybody lodge a better and creative way to evaluate the ability of thousands and hundreds of students through the country? No, I think??/我认为什么？？. Thus, sometimes traditional ways, most of the times containing cautious planning, may not seems creative nor convincing, but it actually solve the problem indeed, which matches the benefits of the majority.
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        last but not least, unless being applied to practical solution of a problem more efficient a creative methods, it has little meaning. In one case,
Pro. KaiFu Li, the once Microsoft Asian chief and senior administrator of Google, used to work for SGI, another magnate. During his occupation, under his lead a brand new products was created.It really stimulate him and his staff for a while for it possesses most advanced technology in the world and assembling most creative ideas of his fellow.Ironically,this products failed as it did not fit the markets.That is to say,its too advance technology made consumer feel uncomfortable and not easy to use.Eventually,KaiFu Li had to leave for his fail in developing that product and other reasons.Therefore,creative might not attain the goal as it might seems.Careful planning is incredible significant as we can see from the example.Had if KaiFu Li done careful market requirments,would his genius work fail to grasp consumers' attention?It hard to forecast but promising. Whatever, carefully planning should never be ignored no matter in normal cases nor among creative ways of dealing a trouble.( k  U4 x+ A! ^
        
/ W! O3 w' {+ I4 u+ `( R2 b$ Z        In conclusion, being creative should be advocated among our children and spare a place in our minds for creative thinking .However, the importance of planning carefully should always be taken into account. Because most of the time, we do not need a Newton to lodge a new theory, but we need more workers to have the work done by the deadline.

读完楼主的文章 有种上不来气的感觉 长句子实在实在是太多了 而且在写长句子的同时应该注意语法

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这么长 好强。

oracletanUID: 2759589

10# yuminjia mm辛苦了~~~

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Being profoundly advocated and inluenced by all sorts of media,people nowdays seems to be instigated with a prejudice that being creative is always the better choice at all costs. However,possessing a (an) objective mood to sought (seek) truth (这句的作用还是不是很清楚), I fairly disgust (am disgusted by) such cliches as it should be categorated to fallacy.

As a main reason to object (to) this prevalent view,I have to declare that the ordinary methods may not be creative enough to satisfy some people's fake content of being "creative",but the detailed plaining,plus with past lessons,might as well be the best solution to an ordinary problem.To begin with,how extraordinarily lucky will we be to encounter a case which is not able to be tackled with by normal means?For instance,if you had bought a new car from ...with the engine undermined while you were an excellent worker to repair elecronic equipments,would you prefer to fix it by yourself instead of sending it back to where you bought it in a more ordinary way?on the other hand,examination is universally acknowledged the main fair and credit way for universities to select students from graduates.Though it has been doubted by many people for many years that it is not reasonable nor creative at all to measure a student's talent through merely a test.But how about the others?Can anybody lodge a better and creative way to evaluate the ability of thousands and hundrends of students through the country?No,i think.Thus,sometimes traditional ways,most of the times containing cautious planning,may not seems creative nor convincing,but it actually solve the problem indeed,which matches the benefits of the majority.

Another reason that I assault the opponion that being creative can come up with best solution than planning carefully is that creative ideas cannot solve practical problems at many times,unless they are really creative and fit for the situation.Obviously,using developed medical measures,such as surgery or advancing equipments,and taking new bills are certainly new and creative ways to solve the problem of obesity.However,if we make an old-fashioned but careful planing,which includes daily meals nutrition,exercise and extra appropriate supplementary takings,Would  it be possible that most people accept the latter methods?Apparently.Morever,I,of course,will not blame being creative to be a nuisance or even harming thing,but the possessing of a creative attitude doesn't mean we have to be creative all the time,straying from normal thoughts towards a problem.As for daily matters,carefull planning is essential for most of the cases.

last but not least,unless being applied to practical solution of a problem more efficient a creative methods,it has little meaning.In one case,Pro. KaiFu Li,the once Microsoft Asian chief and senior administrator of Google,used to work for SGI,another magnate.During his occupation,under his lead a brand new products was created.It really stimulate him and his staff for a while for it possesses most advanced technology in the world and assembling most creative ideas of his fellow.Ironically,this products failed as it did not fit the markets.That is to say,its too advance technology made consumer feel uncomfortable and not easy to use.Eventually,KaiFu Li had to leave for his fail in developing that product and other reasons.Therefore,creative might not attain the goal as it might seems.Careful planning is incredible significant as we can see from the example.Had if KaiFu Li done careful market requirments,would his genius work fail to grasp consumers' attention?It hard to forecast but promising.Whatever,careful planning should never be ignored no matter in normal cases nor among creative ways of dealing a trouble.

In conclusion,being creative should be advocated among our children and spare a place in our minds for creative thinking.However,the importance of planning carefully should always be taken into account.Because most of the time, we do not need a Newton to lodge a new theory,but we need more workers to have the work done by the deadline.

LZ的文章跟前面一位叫captainich的同学的风格很像，都是以极长极绕的句子来进行陈述，我读完文章的感觉楼上另外一位改LZ作文的同学一样，喘不过气，另外感觉很累，LZ这篇文章限时了吗？写文章目的在于让人明白，虽然T考的是语言的应用，但却不是语言的炫耀，其基础仍然是在使人明白的基础上灵活地运用语言。另外本文几乎全是长句，长句里面又重重叠叠加上很多复杂的修饰，最后感觉整个文章的内容都twisted了。但不可否认，楼主在句子和词汇上都是有非常丰厚的功底的。只是文章应该跟好听的音乐一样，长短句结合，有乐感，这样才能让人读起来舒服，让人舒服了，接下来才是仔细理解你的内容，所以，加油！！个人建议，如有不容易见，欢迎讨论！