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Playing sports teaches people lessons about life.


As we all know,sports is playing a more and more important role in modern life.why sports is
so popular taday,why people pay a lot attention to sports,can sports have else benefits other than improving health?Yes,sports can not only give us a good body,but also teach us
philosophies of life.There are many reasons I think are very forehead.In the following discussion,I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my opnions.
More importantly,life spirt is essential in our daily life just like the sports spirt.
when doing exercise,things such as competitive, steel spirt,and comfortable feelings come one by one.Take running for example,running is a sport most similar to life and the life we are living is a long run.While running,someone reach the end and someone gives up in half,the one who persists in running can insist in life,it can success he or she.On the other hand,when we are playing tennis,is also a competion.Nowadays,all of our society full of competions,in schools,in companies,and even in family menbers.Everyone want to be the excellent one,have advantiges in any area.If people can learn spirt from sports competion,
it is not difficult for them to aquire how to competite at work or else.
Another thing i would like to mention is that sports have an power to make peple released.
The whole society is tention,everyone in society is under the stress.If people feel relax while doing sports,then they should release themselves in life.
To sum up,given reasons discussed above,which sometimes intertwine t form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive,people are required, including ourselves,to do some sports.
Becuase sports teaches people a class of life at the time they forging themselves.

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It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you


What is the function of movies?Different people have different opinions.Some people maintain
that movies should deep people's mind.Other people,however,argue that relax people is an
main function of movies.As far as I am concerned,whether a movie is a serious one or not,
we should see it under certain condition.

Mostly,A movie with profoundity,can shake a asleep heart and be a light for missing people.I still remember the movie named Forrest Gump，a story about a disable and retarded man with a kind simple heart,which i was saw 5 years ago firstly.I like the dramatis personae,and his experience teachers me how to live a happy life,what to do is the best for me,when I should give up and when I should go on.Obviously,the society really need this kind of movies.It is an art that can heal people's heart.And i think it is also the reason why most of the top directors decide to direct these serious films.

On the other hand,it is neccessary for the existence of funny movies.Just as a Germany philosopher saying,the existence means the rationality.A funny movie can make people laugh,let then fell relax,which many of serious movies can not.More importantly,this is why
there are a lot of cartoon cooperations such as disney,dream factory and so on.An investigate shows that during the first season of 2009,box office of amuse movies are much
bigger than the serious,which means in the depress economic environment,entertaining movies
can comfort people,release the anxienty of dersperete men and wenmen.

To sum up,as discuss above,we can  reach conclusion simply,both serious movies and lessure
movies are essential for life,though they are through different ways.Profound movies set people to think,muise movies give laugh and happy to the world.They are all the cherish of human.

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3.1 修改 by speedzshaw

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As we all know,sports is playing a more and more important role in modern life.why sports is so popular taday,why people pay a lot attention to sports,can sports have else benefits other than improving health?Yes,sports can not only give us a good body,but also teach us8 f* ?: D2 U" V9 l# _* j
philosophies of life.There are many reasons I think are very forehead(想表达啥？用essential/important/vital之类比较好).In the following discussion,I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my opnions(表达啰嗦）

More importantly,life spirt(spirit) is essential in our daily life just like the sports spirt.when doing exercise,things such as competitive, steel spirt,and comfortable feelings come one by one.(句子结构逻辑有问题）Take running for example,running is a sport most similar to life and the life we are living is a long run.While running,someone reach the end and someone gives up in half,the one who persists in running can insist in life,it can success he or she.On the other hand,when we are playing tennis,is also a competion(competition).Nowadays,all of our society full of competions,in schools,in companies,and even in family menbers.Everyone want to be the excellent one,have advantiges in any area.If people can learn spirt from sports competion,2 zit is not difficult for them to aquire how to competite at work or else.
Another thing i would like to mention is that sports have an power to make peple released.4 |  b  S7 C4 T; V5 q2 ]
The whole society is tention(tension),everyone in society is under the stress.If people feel relax while doing sports,then they should release themselves in life.2 l3 \) \2 U$ g; u, C3 r, ^, L+ J
To sum up,given reasons discussed above,which sometimes intertwine t form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive,people are required, including ourselves,to do some sports.
Becuase sports teaches people a class of life at the time they forging themselves.
童鞋的句子表达和逻辑说理能力需要加强。。还有单词的拼写错误也多了点，请努力改进
建议同学还是先去练练135，多看点范文吧。。。加油

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It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you
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What is the function of movies? (with)Different people have different opinions. Some people maintain that movies should deep people's mind. Other people, however, argue that relax(relaxing) people is an(a) main function of movies. As far as I am concerned, whether a movie is a serious one or not, we should see it under certain condition(句子有问题).' C6 D5 L( w- h8 [6 X) ?' C, X. t

Mostly, A movie with profoundity(profundity), can shake a asleep heart and be a light for missing people(不懂).I still remember the movie named Forrest Gump，a story about a disable and retarded man with a kind simple heart, which i was saw 5 years ago firstly. I like the dramatis personae, and his experience teachers me how to live a happy life, what to do is the best for me, when I should give up and when(where) I should go on. Obviously, the society really need(needs) this kind of movies. It is an art that can heal people's heart. And i think it is also the reason why most of the top directors decide to direct these serious films.
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On the other hand(However), it is necessary(necessary) for the existence of funny movies. Just as a Germany philosopher saying, the existence means the rationality. A funny movie can make people laugh, let then(them) fell relax(relaxed), which many of serious movies cannot. More importantly, this is why there are a lot of cartoon cooperations, such as Disney, dream factory and so on. An investigate shows that during the first season of 2009, box office of amuse movies are much bigger than the serious, which means in the depress economic environment, entertaining movies can comfort people, release the anxienty(anxiety) of dersperete(depression) men and wenmen(women).5 N8 @$ S5 ~- {3 }  O

To sum up, as discuss above(from the above discussion), we can  reach conclusion simply, both serious movies and lessure(leisure) movies are essential for life, though they are through different ways. Profound movies set people to think, muise(amused) movies give laugh and happy to the world. They are all the cherish of human.


1.        结构很
2.        拼写好多问题，注意先用word纠错一下，在发上来，自己去总结拼写错误
3.        感觉好像你跑题了，题目要求你要做出一个选择，但是好像你没有
4.        句子也很中式，多练句子，多看看范文

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Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is

necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.



Is the more homework to do, the more perfect the student is?Some people believe that practise
make perfect,while the other people maintain different views.In my opinion,I more agree on
the second one.
firstly,daily homework assignment may not come into effect.For one hand,students would not do

these assignments because of losing intersting in this subjuct or other reasons.If they have

to do ,they just copy and copy.On the other hand,even if students finish homeworkby

themselves,the process may be mechanical without thinking.So it doesn't for assign homework

everyday.
secondly,homework is not the only way to improve students capacity.Take learnning by doing for
example,I still remenber the class when i was a high school students.Our chemical teacher

bring us to watch the oil refinement processat a chemical factory.This traveling not only give

us a vivid impression in our mind,but also inspire our enthusiasm on chemical study.
What is more,sometimes,homework is a burden which makes them do nothing else.Though we can

strength knowlwdge by doing homework,it also spare much time which can be uswd to everthing
attracting us.For example,I am a students majoring finance,but finance is not the whole world

for me.To be a good invest,not only to be famililar to economics,but also can percieve

political orientation.The more homework teacher assign,the less time we have to recognize the

society.
To sum up,as discuss above,we can  reach conclusion simply,daily homework is not essential ,it
is a compressive stress on students and does not work sometimes,though maybe proper excerses

are positive.

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3.9amendment by 小伙子
不好意思啊，晚上才回来，所以有点晚，见谅

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contests.




Why do children play sports?Some people believe that children play sports just for fun,while others maintain different opions.Generally seaking, I more agree on the second one.Children shouldn’t play sports just for fun,they can gain more from sports,such as competition or contest.

For one hand,communication and coorperation gained from playing sports is neccesary for childern.As a human being, communication is a key living skill in the modern society and coorperation is also essential wherever at school or other places.It is ture that communication and coorperation can be obtained through playing sports for competition.For example,while children are playing football,they should know ,how to plan tractics ,what is the weakpoint of their enemies and themselves,where is the best position for everyone, to win the game.And the good news is that
communication and coorperation that are contained in the process are neccesary during the children’s whole life.

On the other hand,it is better for children to adapt the society by playing sports for competition or contest.Unlike the old days,our society becomes prosperous,immigrarants from poorer regions can come to everywhere looking for job,which will cause a competitive circumstance.It is hard to immaging children who always lead a simple life without any competitives consiousness should face the flesh and blood one day.So it may be a good chance for children to recognize the real and competitive society and gain the competitive consiousness by playing sports for competition..It can be argued that playing sports for competition can a allimatize children themslves to the society.

To sum up,as discussed above,children play sports not only for fun,but also for competion or contest.Just as the old saying,life is relying on sports,I believe it’s truth because people can acquire health, knowledge,and competition from sports,not just fun.



鉴于大家对我作文的评价都有语言太中国话，但我自己又感受不出来，所以希望改这篇作文的同学能指出来，谢谢大家一直以来对我的帮助

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Why do children play sports?Some people believe that children play sports just for fun,while others maintain different opions.Generally seaking(SPEAKING), I more agree on the second one.Children shouldn’t play sports just for fun,they can gain more from sports,such as competition or contest.(SUCH AS不对哦。COMPETITION和CONTEST不是SPORTS的种类呢）

For one hand,communication and coorperation gained from playing sports is neccesary for childern（错别字）.As a human being, communication is a key living skill in the modern society and coorperation is also essential wherever at school or other places.It is ture that communication and coorperation can be obtained through playing sports for competition.For example,while children are playing football,they should know ,（去掉）how to plan tractics（？） ,what is the weakpoint of their enemies（what the shortcoming of their opponents and theirselves are) and themselves and where is the best position for everyone, (去掉）to win the game.And（这个AND换成一个连接词） the good news is that 1communication and coorperation that are contained in the process are neccesary during the children’s whole life.- q. c# x( H% z" B! T

On the other hand,it is better for children to adapt the society by playing sports for competition or contest.Unlike the old days,our society becomes prosperous,immigrarants （？）from poorer regions can come to everywhere looking for job,which will cause a competitive circumstance.It is hard to immaging（错别字） children who always lead a simple life without any competitives consiousness should face the flesh and blood one day.So it may be a good chance （CHANCE不是书面语。用oppotunity）for children to recognize the real and competitive society and gain the competitive consiousness by playing sports for competition..It can be argued that playing sports for competition can a allimatize children themslves to the society.0 V4 ~1 \6 b, x& i( p5 Y/ S4 |
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To sum up,as discussed above,children play sports not only for fun,but also for competion or contest.Just as the old saying,life is relying on sports,I believe it’s truth because people can acquire health, knowledge,and competition from sports,not just fun.1 Y, S7


总的来说。逻辑很清楚。思路有条理。
但是句子来说。可能过于简单了。而且举例还需要充分点。多举点身边的例子来充实文章。
错别字有点多。建议写完后用WORD检查下。
还要多多锤炼吧。我也写得不好。要一起学习。

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不好意思啊，昨天没在家，今天才来看3.13的文哦~ h" v
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Why do children play sports?Some people believe that children play sports just for fun,while others maintain different opions.Generally seaking, I more agree on the second one（我觉得这句话这样说更好点：I agree with the second more.）.Children shouldn’t play sports just for fun,they can gain more from sports,such as competition or contest(这个两点貌似不是sports的例子呀，感觉sports， competition和contest是一个东东哦~).1 e% {: I* p/ i+ a: Y0 u5 y
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For one hand,communication and coorperation gained from playing sports is neccesary for childern.As a human being, communication is a key living skill in the modern society and coorperation is also essential wherever at school or other places.It is ture that communication and coorperation can be obtained through playing sports for competition.For example,while children are playing football,they should know ,how to plan tractics（我猜是不是制定战术的意思？） ,what is the weakpoint（weakness吧~） of their enemies and themselves,where is the best position for everyone to win the game.And（要用and的话，把前面的“.”换成“；”，然后and小写就可以了。） the good news is that communication and coorperation that are contained in the process are neccesary during the children’s whole life.（还是觉得这句话的表达有点问题吧，good news觉得不和是，但是不知道要怎么换……）

On the other hand,it is better for children to adapt the society by playing sports for competition or contest.Unlike the old days,our society becomes prosperous,immigrants from poorer areas can come to everywhere looking for job,which will cause a competitive circumstance.It is hard to image children who always lead a simple life without any competitives consiousness should face the flesh and blood one day.So it may be a good chance for children to recognize the real and competitive society and to gain the competitive consiousness by playing sports for competition..It can be argued that playing sports for competition can a allimatize children themslves to the society.+ b* ]& R4 h3 g4 \/ h; u

To sum up,as discussed above,children play sports not only for fun,but also for competion or contest.Just as the old saying,life is relying on sports,I believe it’s truth because people can acquire health, knowledge,and competition from sports,not just fun.


思路听清楚的，有点spell mistake，其他的话，句子简单没问题，我见过一篇满分作文全是简单句的，但是表达的意思要清晰哦~~~

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Should the government pay more attention to health care issues than on environment issues?Some people maintain that heath problem is essential for everyone,while others people think that is not wise for our humman beings to regret the environment problem.As to the topic,as far as i am concerned,it is a little bit haste to piont out which is the more serious problem that the government should take care firstly.
As we all know,healtj is neccesary for every citizen.If a government can't handle the problem effiently,there are a lot of different problems following.Take health insurance for example,id a society like china without heath insurance mechanism,hou the millions of farmers can do when they are deeply ill,and what is the conditions that the thousands of workers face when they lost basic heath to work.It hard for us to immage the serious sequence without basic heath insurance.So,government should pay attention on heath issues and do what they can do to improve the society' health conditions.
As to the environment problem,it is also important too.The environmentis the prerequiste for the health of citizens.A bad living environment is not only the question of nature,but also the problem of our human beings.For instance,there is a sandstorm attacting beijing rencently,the sand,which we breath in,someday may be result in lung cancel.Another example,is polluted water,citizens drink the polluted water drained by factories,which may lead to strange illness .
As to which is important,the answers is vary.We can give priority to the environment issues if our living condition execrably our heath deeply,on the other hand,it is no argue that the government should focus on heath problems if the environment is good enough.

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改好啦！加油！！

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Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.


How to learning things from abroad,some people obtain news and traditions from foreign countries by reading newspapers and magazines.To be honest,it definitely an efficient way to gain knowleges from abroad.But in my opinion,I think it is a little bit haste to say newspapers and magazines are the best way.Methods such as traveling, is also a convenient way.

It is easy for us to obtain the knowleges from a country we don’t live in by newspapers and magazines,especially the edition of international. Reading newspapers and magazines can give us news about other countries.News papers such as New YorkTimes published everyday and conveys everyday news about America from politial to economic and to entertrainment.We can know from these newspapers that how to deal with the consequence of striking,why American president take measures to force chinese improve it cash value,what is the newest movie holly wood will prompt.
On the other hand, Unlike newspapers,magazines pay more attention on traditions of other countries.These ,magazines introduce the people who is being there how to live and what to eat,the most beautiful place there and the most important thing for them.

But it is not the only way that know news and traditions from other counties.we can travel around the world to learn this knowledge face by face.For example ,when I was travel to tai when I graduated from my collegue ,I find people in there use banana to beat each other,it is a method to plea the peace of the next year.Until now,I remember it clearly,and I don’t think I will forget it allmy life.Traveling is not only can relieve ourselves,but also can have a deep depression in the countries we visited.An increasing number of people living in big city travel around the world to get knowleges.Though it need time and money,but no one can deny this trend.

So ,as we discussed above ,I maintain that newspapers and magazines maybe a good way to learn the knowleges of other places,but is better to travel just an old says,walking to much better than reading to much.

写得很不好，大家多多指教

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Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.

How to learning things from abroad, some people obtain news and traditions from（应该用about） foreign countries by reading newspapers and magazines. To be honest, it（没有谓语，应该加个is definitely an efficient way to gain knowleges ( knowledge拼写错而且这个词不可数不能加s) from （还是把from改成about）abroad.But in my opinion, I think it is a little bit haste to say newspapers and magazines are the best way. Methods such as traveling, is also a convenient way.(无法从字面了解你的意思••只能猜••)

It is easy for us to obtain the knowleges（knowledge） from(about) a country we don’t live in by newspapers and magazines, especially the edition of international. Reading newspapers and magazines can give us news about other countries. News papers such as New YorkTimes published everyday and conveys everyday news about America from politial(political) to economic and to entertrainment（entertainment）. We can know(know之后一定要加东西) from these newspapers that how to deal with the consequence of striking, why American president take measures to force chinese improve it cash value(这句话表意不明••), what is the newest movie （应该加个in） holly wood will prompt(是被提示，应该为will be prompt). On the other hand, Unlike newspapers,(这个中间要加and才能连接句子) magazines pay more attention on traditions of other countries. These ,magazines introduce the people who is being there how to live and what to eat（这句话太繁琐了••直接可以改成magazines introduce the custom of foreign countries）,the most beautiful place (中间要加in)there and the most important thing for them（them指代不明）.
But it is not the only way that know news and traditions from（about） other counties. we can travel around the world to learn this(用this不明确，一般用some即可) knowledge face by(to) face(面对面用to). For example ,when I was travel （加ing）to tai(什么意思) when(一个句子中怎么又两个when,应该用after) I graduated from my collegue(直接说graduated就行了不用加后面的成分， 多余，而且college应该这么拼) ,I find（found过去时） people in there use  banana（s） to beat each other, it is a method to plea the peace of the next year(语义不明••没看懂).Until now, I remember it clearly, and I don’t think I will forget it all my life. Traveling is(不用加is) not only can relieve ourselves, but also can have a deep depression(这个词是萧条的意思，应该用impression) in the countries we visited. An increasing number of people （在补充说明的句子中少主语，主语不能舍 应该改成people who are） living in big city travel around the world to get knowleges(knowledge). Though it need time and money, but(though/although本身就指但是或转折，它们引导的句子中不能用but )no one can deny this trend.
So ,as we discussed above ,I maintain that newspapers and magazines maybe（are） a (去a)good way（s）to learn the knowleges（knowledge） of(about) other places, but is better to travel just(加一个like) an old says(应该是saying), walking to much better than reading to much.
我觉得语法上与词汇上问题比较多，多加强基础的巩固

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Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?

In the last decade, there is general discussion over scientist's responsibility. One of the question under debate is whether scientists should responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries. A large menber of people tend to live under the illusion that it is scientists liability to the negative influence of their discoveries,while others maintain that people can not blame scientists because of the negative impact of their discoveries. As to me, I think it is a little bit haste to point out which one hold the truth.

More importantly, it is scientist's job to do some discoveries, we can hardly accuse them due to the worse influence of their job. Now, it is commonly accepted that the one who abuse the discoveries should responsible for it. For example, Nobel invent detonate was willing to help worker who diged tunnels, but no one can deny that the invention become to be a weapon that kill millions of people in second world war and contitue widely used in any of the following war. In fact, we should admit that aggressions of people is the key to the death, not nobel who invent detonate.

On the other hand, people can definitely blame scientists who's discovery is negative and do it on purpose. For instance, in the second world war, japan invade china, and some japanese scientists discover some bacteria which is harmful for humans health. And then, they use it as a weapon attact innocent chinese people. What a terrible they are. Acording to an investgaition recently, an increasing munber of chinese believe that scientists who discovery the bateria should apologize to all chinese who death in that weapon.

For what have been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that, whether scientists are responsible for the negative, it depends. But it is indisputable that scientists's discoveries usually improve our life and we should appreciate cientists for their work.