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3.5：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become a financially responsible adult, people should be taught how to manage money at an early age.         Are you a responsible person in finance? If you answer yes, were you taught how to manage money at an early age? I doubt most people were not, so was I. It’s no deny that a child who is trained to manage money may grow to be a financially responsible adult. However, on the opposite, it’s unnecessary to learn money management in purpose at an early age in order to(in order to 改为for the purpose of ) turn to be an economically responsible person.6 P2 i3 v6 P$ ]! m6 Z - \% s2 X3 \2 r- e: C! x4 x7 ?                   What kinds of people you will be in the future is decided by your experience. Not all financially responsible adults were taught how to manage money in their early age. For example, my father, who (不用who了）was born in a very（extremely) poor family. Not to mention managing money, seldom did he see a coin in his childhood. But he is still responsible in finance when he grows up. This is not the only example- a lot of people are of (可以这样用么？）this kind. Earning money by themselves is so laborous, they are carefully dealing with the money. Therefore, a suitable environment will stimulate the occurance of the financially responsible people with no money management training.' _1 A/ a  x- Q! q) D& A ; h( Y( o3 F/ N8 h6 o& s  T; Y            On the other side, the childhood is a period for playing and they do not really understand the interint（什么意思啊？） or the signifance of managing money. In my mind, it’s a waste of time to teach children to manage money. What are taught are no more than saving money in the bank for future use. I bet never will you say to your child to save money to buy a house or some sort of these realistic things. However, these things are what a finnacially responsible adult will consider! In addtion, with time going by, children usually recognize the importance of owning a financial responsibility.3 Z+ U5 {/ l4 g5 A 7 L3 V  l0 M/ v4 N) l                          From what I have concerned above, I don’t think becoming responsible in finance,（这句话的结构有点怪怪的） people should be taught how to manage money at an early age. Actually, children even do not know the signifance. In addition, a suitable environment will be a better method. 个人意见：觉得写得很好，就是还有一些很小很小的错误，词汇方面在高级点就perfect 了