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发表于 2010-3-12 00:39:44 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 xiguaduo 于 2010-3-17 07:16 编辑

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A teacher who is a serious and strict person is more effective in teaching than a teacher who is a humor and easygoing person.

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When it comes to the question what kind of teacher is more effective, a strict person or an easygoing one? There may come different answers. Some will prefer an serious person to be their teacher because this will help to conquer their own laziness. While others are prone to choose a humor and easygoing person, so that they could just be themself. In my opinion, I would like to choose the latter one to be my teacher because a humor and easygoing teacher will help you release your stress and build up your confidence.

There is no doubt that a strict teacher will help students set up good study habit. You will go to class on time, hand up your homework, and obey the rules of the school because you scare the strict teacher. Several years later, a young student may do things that way because it becomes a habit in their life.

Although a strict teacher is more effective on establishing good habit in a child's early life, a humor teacher is much more effective in educating
teenagers. Teenagers are very sensitive, if the strict teacher simply told them what they just did is wrong, they will feel hurt. But a easygoing teacher say that in a humor way, that will be much easier to accept. I remember that the best teacher in my high school is a very humor person. He always points out the drawback of students in class in a funny way. Students in his class laughed and thinked, they improved in a happy way.


At the first sight, a strict teacher has high efficiency because they build up good discipline in class, but, a humor teacher is good at helping students release stress which is the
most import thing we need to learn. Of course students need to face all kinds of exams and at the same time they need learn to solve other problems during life such as friendship. A humor teacher will let a student take it easy, just be yourself, not bother to follow kind of routine, be positive and be happy that is the attitude to face the problems.


In summery, a humor teacher is more effective during the whole life of a person even though a strict teacher could build up good habit in a child's early life. Here I restate my viewpoint that a humor and easygoing teacher is more effective than a serious and strict teacher.

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发表于 2010-3-17 07:14:38 |显示全部楼层
316 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.


In the last decades, advances in transportation have made it  possible to travel between different cities. However, when it comes to the question whether to live in one city all their lifes, people may have different answers. Some are prone to live in the same city for their whole life because it gives you sence of security and will not cost too much money. While others will prefer to move to different places whenever they need because new city means more opportunities and could build up more independence of one person.In my opinion, I will like to choose the latter one.

There is not doubt that living in one city for the whole life will make you feel safe and convinient. Because you have been living in the city ever since you were born, surely you are familiar with everything in the city. You may know which resteraunt is good but with low prices, you may even know every small alley of the city and never be afraid of being lost and you have lots of relatives and friends around you, supporting you, helping you. On the other hand, moving to a new city will cost a lot of money such as to find a new house, to buy new furnitures,or to set up new appliances.

Even though there may be some benefits of living in the same city, there are more advantages of moving to live in different places. By moving to a new city, we will have an excellent chance to be independent. When I went to the University which is located in the north of China while my hometown is in the south of China, I learn to handle a lot of problems in my life, such as how to spend your money within budget , how to wash clothes, how to get along with roommates  or how to deal with the cold weather. One year after that, when I  went  back home for vacation, mom said I have already grown up.

Moving to different places will meet the need of the different stages in your life. When you are a kid, you stay in Beijing where is your hometown and your parents could take care of you. When you grow up , you go to Upen to study finace and when you graduate from school, you might find an economical job in wall street in New York. And when you retired, you could spend your time in Florida where the climate is very approparate for seniors.

Although living in the same city all the live has some advantages, I feel that moving to different places has more advantages. You could learn to be independent when you have to solve all kinds of problems yourself. In addition, living in different cities will meet the need of the different stages in your life and make your life more splendid.

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发表于 2010-3-17 22:43:05 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 cp19880313 于 2010-3-17 22:45 编辑

316 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.

During the last decades, advances in transportation have made it  possible to travel between different cities. However, when it comes to the question whether to live in one city all their lifes, people may have different answers. Some are prone to live in the same city for their whole lives because it gives you前后所指的人不一样 sence of security and will not cost too much money. While others will prefer to move to different places whenever they need because new city means more opportunities and could bring up more independence of one person这句很奇怪,你可以换一种说法.In my opinion, I will like to choose the latter one.

There is not doubt that living in one city for the whole life will make you feel safe and convinient. Because you have been living in the city ever since you were born, surely you are familiar with everything in the city. You may know which resteraunt is good but with low prices, you may even know every small alley of the city and never be afraid of being lost and you have lots of relatives and friends around you, supporting you, helping you. On the other hand, moving to a new city will cost a lot of money such as to find a new house, to buy new furnitures,or to set up new appliances.
我认为,你既然是支持moving to other places, 那你就不要花一大段的篇幅去描写living in a same place, 这个会让人疑惑的,只需要写几个小例子,然后就论述你所支持的观点。

Even though there may be some benefits of living in the same city, there are more advantages of moving to live in different places. By moving to a new city, we will have an excellent chance to be independent. When I went to the University which is located in the north of China while my hometown is in the south of China, I have learned to handle a lot of problems in my life, such as how to spend my money within budget , how to wash clothes, how to get along with roommates  or how to deal with the cold weather. One year after that, when I  went  back home for vacation, mom said I have already grown up.

Moving to different places will meet the need of the different stages in your life. When you are a kid, you stay in Beijing where is your hometown and your parents could take care of you. When you grow up , you go to Upen to study finace and when you graduate from school, you might find an economical job in wall street in New York. And when you retired, you could spend your time in Florida where the climate is very approparate for seniors如果你要指老人的话,就直接说 the old,senior指等级高的人.

Although living in the same city all the live has some advantages, I feel that moving to different places has more advantages. 和第三段首句几乎一样 You could learn to be independent when you have to solve all kinds of problems yourself. In addition, living in different cities will meet the need of the different stages in your life and make your life more splendid.和倒数第二段的首句又重复了。

这篇文章你的例子很好,但论述的内容有点少,把第二段去掉,再加一个论点,这样就差不多了。
我感觉你的最后一段完全是把每段的首句给摘了下来,这样不太好,还有就是单词有些都太简单了,可以适当使用一些比较高级的单词,也能使文章更好看。
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