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Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students, do you agree or not, explain why.（09.03.27）

When it comes to teachers' own social or political views, a hot controvercy about whether they should convey their attitude to their students or not emerges. Some people deem that teachers should make their social or political views known to students while others believe teachers don't have to do this. Nevertheless, I am in favor of the later assertion for two reasons as follows in terms of my personal experience and emotions.

To begin with, most of the classes have no relation to social or political events or problems, it is not necessary for teachers to show their assertions to students. Majors or classes on sociaty or policy are not common, so that personal views on those problems won't  be helpful to improve their study. And one of the most important teachers' duty is to help students learn better. But for the time taken in conveying social or political views, I think they should be spend on teachers' efforts to improve their students study.

What should also be noticing is that teachers' views on social or political problems are always subjective, which will influence students judgement. If teachers, who students certainly believe in, demonstrate their own opinions on those peoblems, it will be unfair to students for the reason that students have rights to have their own views all alone. What students learn in class are always and should be objective like laws in the nature or formula for computing. Social and political views by teachers are personal opinion which shouldn't be taught as knowledge, especially when anything come out from teachers, it becomes knowledge for students.

to sum up, I don't agree with the point the teachers should make their social or political views known to student because it not helpful for students study and it will influent students view on judging those problems.

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When it comes to teachers' own social or political views, a hot (个人觉得hot这个词用在作文里面比较随便，可以试试 growing or increasing) controversy about whether they should convey their attitude to their students or not emerges. Some people deem that teachers should make their social or political views known to students while others believe teachers don't
(do not, 正式作文里面不要用缩写，该是什么单词就写什么单词)have to do this. Nevertheless (这个词我的理解是转折，所以我觉得用在这里不适合，如果是我，我会写 As for me), I am in favor of the later assertion for two reasons as follows in terms of my personal experience and emotions.

To begin with, most of the classes have no relation to social or political events or problems, it is not necessary for teachers to show their assertions to students. Majors or classes on society or policy are not common, so that personal views on those problems won’t be helpful to improve their study. And one of the most important teachers' duty (duties) is to help students learn better. But for the time taken in conveying social or political views, I think they should be spent on teachers' efforts to improve their students’ study.

(是不是应该加个递进词汇或者句型呢)What should also be noticing (noticed) is that teachers' views on social or political problems are always subjective, which will influence students judgment. If teachers, who students certainly believe in, demonstrate their own opinions on those problems, it will be unfair to students for the reason that students have rights to have their own views all alone (不错的表达和句型，赞). What students learn in class are always and should be objective like laws in the nature or formula for computing. Social and political views by teachers are personal opinion (opinions) which shouldn't be taught as knowledge, especially when anything come out from teachers, it becomes knowledge for students.(没读明白这句话要表达的意思，汗)

To sum up, I don't (do not, 正式作文里面不要用缩写，该是什么单词就写什么单词)agree with the point the teachers should make their social or political views known to student because it not helpful for students study and it will influence students’ view on judging those problems.

1、你的文章有好几处单词拼写错误，我就直接帮你改正了，你写完以后放到WORD里面错误其实一目了然。

2、你文章很精简，很简练，这也是一种风格，只要把问题说清楚即可。不过你有没有想过加一些让步的观点和理念进去呢？我的这篇作文也没加让步的观点，是因为我当时根本没想到让步的观点，后来慢慢想还是尽量写上去。你可以看下我的这篇文章，不知道我说的意思你明白没。

3、总体文章结构和观点都比较明确，不过拼写等小错误尽量少一些，不要让这些影响了你文章的整体。

4、我也是菜鸟，就是在我的能力范围内帮你改一版，你看看吧，一起帮助，一起加油。