6.19 Independent writing-June

junedreamjuneUID: 2700743

What would you prefer to spend money on?Traveling and vacation, or merely saving it for the future? People would havedifferent preferences on that. In terms of me, I suppose it is wiser not tofall into either extreme option. I prefer to distribute my money for bothvacation and deposition.



After laborious work, a person, if s/he isnormal, should be desperate for relaxing. Travelling is just such an ideal wayfor recreation. Companies would offer their employees holidays or even freetrips to attractive places, because they understand clearly that a holidayvacation help their stuffs reconstruct their passions and enthusiasm for work.If their employees are not given the chance to travel, the job simply could notbe finished efficiently. Thus, it is obvious to see that travel functions asproviding basic needs for recreation.



Of course, people cannot spend all theirmoney on traveling and recreation. For self promotion and development, namely,reproduction demands, people also need some deposits as supporting funds. Inthis case, a typical example would be further study. It often requires not asmall sum of money for a person who already worked for a period of time, to goback to study. Because in most cases, that means they have to quit thecontemporary job and get back to campus again. Without a big amount of money,they would not have the chance to further study for promotion and self-development.Saving money also acquires its valuation in a more general sense, for itsnecessity to prevent emergency events and risks.



Thence, neither spending all the money ontraveling nor saving it all in the bank is considered rational enough. Peopleneed reproduction as well as recreation.

写得匆忙，有点短，求拍~

tmdxlpUID: 2745223

What would you prefer to spend money on? Traveling（是不是应该用travel？） and vacation, or merely（merely觉得用得不是很合适） saving it for the future? People would havedifferent
（记得空格） preferences on that. In terms of me, I suppose it is wiser not tofall into either extreme option. I prefer to distribute my money for bothvacation and deposition.

After laborious work, a person, if s/he isnormal, should be desperate（觉得这个词有点太过了） for relaxing. Travelling is just such an ideal wayfor recreation. Companies would offer their employees holidays or even freetrips to attractive places, because they understand clearly that a holidayvacation help their stuffs reconstruct（没有见过这个词能这么用，觉得recover就可以了）their passions and enthusiasm for work.If their employees are not given the chance to travel, the job simply could notbe finished efficiently. Thus, it is obvious to see that travel functions（ the function of travel）  asproviding basic needs for recreation.

Of course, people cannot spend all theirmoney on traveling and recreation. For self promotion and development, namely,reproduction demands,( 觉得没有必要加上这一句) people also need some deposits as supporting funds ( to support ). Inthis case, a typical example would be further study. It often requires not asmall sum of money for a person who already worked for a period of time, to goback to study. Because in most cases, that means they have to quit thecontemporary (contemporary 应该是指“当代的”，作者你应该是想表达“现在的”吧？不知道present 合不合适) job and get back to campus again. Without a big amount of money,they would not have the chance to further study （study further） for promotion and self-development.Saving money also acquires its valuation in a more general sense,（Saving money also acquires its valuation in a more general sense， 这句话不懂事啥意思） for itsnecessity to prevent emergency events and risks.

Thence, neither spending all the money ontraveling nor saving it all in the bank is considered rational enough. Peopleneed reproduction as well as recreation.

1. 标点符号之后记得用空格。
2. 单词粘在一起，没有分开
3. 有些用词感觉有点机器，不知道是不是有用电子词典
4. 结尾觉得有点简单了

能用不同的词表达，我好羡慕，向你学习


ps: 我是在word改的，有些粘在一起的词，还有标点之后没有空格的词，我都标了红色，但是发现复制黏贴之后到这里之后显示的都是黑色，我就偷懒一下，不再一个一个找出来啦，呵呵，以后你注意一下就好啦··

junedreamjuneUID: 2700743

谢谢修改~很受用。关于电子词典...我真的没有用~:L 2# tmdxlp

tmdxlpUID: 2745223

哈哈·那你的词汇真的好强大···佩服ing··有什么方法么？

junedreamjuneUID: 2700743

呵呵，其实我很弱的，托福单词都没背完，有点词汇积累的可能因为之前看了些英文journal吧，一起add oil ha:loveliness: 4# tmdxlp