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mollymollymollyUID: 2839509

A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.  p# l4 Q- Q5 ^; ^( s*
In contemporary world , the issue of jobs in many respects has long been in the heated discussion. Perspectives toward it varies from person to person. As for me, when facing a dilemma between a job with a high salary but less vocation timeand a job with low payment but long vocation time, I will definitely choose the latter one. Reasons are given in th following passage.
At present , I didn’t have sufficient money to have a vocation. In a month ,I must spend a lot of money in all sorts of things, such as food, close and rents. If I use the money to take a vocation, then my life can be even hard.. also
if I had the chance to get a higher salary , I would definitely choose
the well-paid job ,
I could buy more delicious food, I can buy decent clothes for my job and I can afford a better department to enhance my life quality.
What’s more, I am not interested in traveling. I think it was a waist of time and money. When I was taking a trip, I usually felt
exhausted. The unfamiliar stranger make me home-sick. The food cook in a
different way was disgusting for me .the time waste made me feel bad, also what’s more ,
I can’t adjust to the life in different cities well, I always can’t fall asleep in travel. if I choose the job with less vocation time,
I would choose to visit a museum or to watch a movie, which attact me more than a trip does.
Last but not least, I planed for a long time about saving money to buy my father a lucury car. my father loved and cared me very much since I was a little child. he have looked after me for weeks when I got seriously ill.
He
made a phone call to me every day . I love him very much.
I made up my mind to buy my dear father his dream car. if I pick up the job with higher salary , I suppose I could fulfill my dream
sooner.
In summery, with the reasons mentioned above, I make the choice of the job with high salary but less trip time.

mollymollymollyUID: 2839509

A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.  p# l4 Q- Q5 ^; ^( s*
In contemporary world , the issue of jobs in many respects has long been in the heated discussion. Perspectives toward it varies from person to person. As for me, when facing a dilemma between a job with a high salary but less vocation timeand a job with low payment but long vocation time, I will definitely choose the latter one. Reasons are given in th following passage.
At present , I didn’t have sufficient money to have a vocation. In a month ,I must spend a lot of money in all sorts of things, such as food, close and rents. If I use the money to take a vocation, then my life can be even hard.. also  if I had the chance to get a higher salary , I would definitely choose  the well-paid job ,  I could buy more delicious food, I can buy decent clothes for my job and I can afford a better department to enhance my life quality.
What’s more, I am not interested in traveling. I think it was a waist of time and money. When I was taking a trip, I usually felt  exhausted. The unfamiliar stranger make me home-sick. The food cook in a  different way was disgusting for me .the time waste made me feel bad, also what’s more ,  I can’t adjust to the life in different cities well, I always can’t fall asleep in travel. if I choose the job with less vocation time,  I would choose to visit a museum or to watch a movie, which attact me more than a trip does.
Last but not least, I planed for a long time about saving money to buy my father a lucury car. my father loved and cared me very much since I was a little child. he have looked after me for weeks when I got seriously ill.  He  made a phone call to me every day . I love him very much.  I made up my mind to buy my dear father his dream car. if I pick up the job with higher salary , I suppose I could fulfill my dream   sooner.
In summery, with the reasons mentioned above, I make the choice of the job with high salary but less trip time.

peggy890UID: 2812709

A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.   
In contemporary（换成current更加贴切） world , the issue of jobs in many respects has long been in the heated discussion. Perspectives toward it varies from person to person. As for me, when facing a dilemma between a job with a high salary but less vocation time and a job with low payment but long vocation time, I will definitely choose the latter one. Reasons are given in th following passage.
At present, I didn’t have sufficient money to have a vocation. In a month, I must（少用情态动词，改成have to） spend a lot of money in(in改为on) all sorts of things, such as food, cloth and rents. If I use the money to take a vocation, then my life can be even hard (改为harder). Also（转折词用morover）  if I had the chance to get a higher salary , I would definitely choose  the well-paid job ,  I could buy more delicious food, I can buy decent clothes for my job and I can afford a better department to enhance my life quality.  b: B* a! G- c# G
What’s more, I am not interested in traveling. I think it was a waste of time and money. When I was taking a trip, I usually felt exhausted. The unfamiliar stranger(两个词意思重合，用一个就好) make me home-sick. The food cook（被动cooked） in a  different way was disgusting for me .the time waste made me feel bad, also what’s more ,  I can’t adjust to the life in different cities well, I always can’t fall asleep in travel. if I choose the job with less vocation time,  I would choose to visit a museum or to watch a movie, which attact me more than a trip does.. `3 V3 }4 f1 {9 n' x0 y
Last but not least, I planed for a long time about saving money to buy my father a luxury car. my father loved and cared(用一般现在时就可以了) me very much since I was a little child. he have looked after me for weeks when I got seriously ill.  He  made a phone call to me every day . I love him very much.  I made up my mind to buy my dear father his dream car. if I pick up the job with higher salary I suppose I could fulfill my dream sooner（sooner改成as soon as possible,意思不是很明确）.2 P7 X8 ]6 }- R& N3 E" N* r
In summery, with the reasons mentioned above, I make the choice of the job with high salary but less trip time.
整个论点的理由展开很充分，但是文章中的一些诸如拼写错误、语法问题，希望以后注意一下，最后结尾的总结相比而言稍显单薄
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