请各位大仙指点啦（作文本本）

NO.xiaoyuyuUID: 2842596

June 28th
It is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.

The complicated issue why to reserve land is not so easy to answer as it seems. Some people do believe that protecting animals are more important. Because animals are one part of the nature, they have close connection with human beings.
Animals are fine can enhance the quality of the environment. For one side, this argument may be reasonable. However,
I have to lend more support to the view that it is more significant to reserve land for humanity.

There are numerous explanations why I hold confidence on it. If we think about this topic deeply, we could consider that reserving land for animals first is not proper. The main statement with this point that the aim of keeping land
is to bless human beings. For example, we may think about exaggeratedly, if one day the weather is so badly, or there
is only one piece of land, and we give it to animals, then humanity may disappear and animals are the masters. How can we go? And what is the purpose of reserving land? So people are the lord.

In addition, another explanation rests on the fact that reserving land is to allow human beings and animals to live together well. Now the weather is worse than befor, like the globle warming, and some places are over-exploited, so
we hope that having land for endangered animals. It is a good way to maintain the ecological balance. Therefore the
key of the problem is not what is more important about that leaving land for humanity or endangered animals.

There is bound to be the third subtle reason, namely, maybe endangered animals are the process of the organization's evolution. We can read it in some biological magazines, they said that some weak animals or some animals which cannot adapt to the variable environment deserve to eliminate. This is called the efficient one's will prosper and the inefficient one's will be eliminated. We cannot protect all kinds of animals.

From all the discussion above we may safely draw the conclusion that reserving land for human beings sometimes is wiser.

麦托UID: 2816626

June 28th
Itis more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.

The complicated issue why to reserve land is not so easy to answer as it seems. Some people do believe that protecting animals are more important. Because animals are one part of the nature, they have close connection with human beings.
Animals are fine can enhance the quality of the environment. The argument seems reasonable, However,I have to lend more support to the view that it is more significant to reserve land for humanity.

There are numerous explanations why I hold confidence on it. If we think about this topic deeply, we could consider that reserving land for animals first is not proper. The main statement with this point that the aim of keeping land is to bless human beings. For example, we may think about it exaggeratedly, if one day there
is only one piece of land(我觉得这跟天气好像没多大关系吧,就把天气那句去掉了）, if we give it to animals, humanity may disappear and animals would become the masters. How can we go? And what is the purpose of reserving land? Undoubtedly,  people are the lord.

In addition, another explanation (rest 去掉）on the opinion( 我认为这里opinion 比fact 合适） that reserving land is to allow human beings and animals to live together well. Now the weather is worse than befor and some places are over-exploited, so we hope that having land for endangered animals. It is a good way to maintain the ecological balance. Therefore the key of the problem is not which one  is more important, leaving land for humanity or endangered animals.

There is bound to be the third subtle reason, namely, maybe endangered animals are the process of the organization's evolution. We can read it in some biological magazines, they said that some weak animals or some animals which cannot adapt to the variable environment deserve to eliminate. This is called the efficient ones will prosper and the inefficient ones will be eliminated. We cannot protect all kinds of animals.

From all the discussion above we could safely draw the conclusion that reserving land for human beings is wiser.

加油吧，我只是把我认为不对的地方标出来咯。

NO.xiaoyuyuUID: 2842596

谢谢你的修改 我会下次注意的 你是什么时候考 我9月11 我们互相加油吧

NO.xiaoyuyuUID: 2842596

A house or a business?(6.30)
The complicated issue how to use money valuably is not as easy as it seems. Some people do believe that buying a house is a worthy thing. Because a house could give a reliable environment to yourself and your family members. For one side, this argument seems reasonable. However, I have to lend more support to the view that managing a business is a way of foresight.
There are numerous explanations why I hold confidence on it. If we think about this topic deeply, we could consider that having enough money to purchase a house directly is not proper. The main statement with this point is that doing business can lead to more good opportunities in the future. If you get a success, you can have many things, not even a luxurious house, but also a car or some healthy insurance. For example, like in Beijing, many young men living in a rentable house at the beginning, and using money to do some business, they make some money. And many of them have got success already. So I think this way is correct and the wisest method.
In addition, another explanation rests on the opinion that purchasing a business reflects a person's value. A person who has the urge for improvement may desire to do some meaningful work during his or her life. Compare with a house is only one's property, it can not bring your honorary even a very big house.
There is bound to be the third subtle reason, namely, as a young man, I think we need have responsibilities to bringing people who loves you a better environment. Giving a stable circumstance for your lovers, and a guaranteed old live for parents. Hence if you have enough money to purchase a business is a good way to start.
From all the discussion above we may safely draw the conclusion that doing business has more merits if we have enough money.

麦托UID: 2816626

3# NO.xiaoyuyu 我6月12考过一次，不理想，也准备9月再考呢~~共勉！