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发表于 2010-7-27 22:27:23 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Nowedays,our life is filled with advertisments. Many times ,we can not tell ourself how many ads we hear and see every day.So we can get that ads are really a strong madie .But ,as we all
know,
all ads are not true.Sometimes they tell its costumers wrong information ,especily , ads in order to intruduce a kind of food.,they will tell their customers the adventures of it ,but often,they will include some information which do not exsit and often mislead their audidence.Not all audidence can distinguish them.Of course ,they will affect their healthy eating habit.And I think it maybe the key cause of unhealty eating habit.Above , I say ads will tell us unhealthy eating habit because they do not tell us the true information of the food ,such as “sanlu”,a milk powder producer,whose food includes some bad material: which hurt many babies .On the side , the audidence do the habit unactively.But ,on the other side, they are ready to do the habit,like ,many children ,who just know how delicious they are and ignore the unhealth side.They bealive the ad and want to have the food. Wow,they can not control themselvs.

To the conclude,I agree that advertisments are the key cause of unhealthy habit.
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发表于 2010-7-28 22:15:15 |只看该作者
Nowedays,our life is filled with advertisments. Many times ,we can not tell ourself how many ads we hear and see every day.So we can get that ads are really a strong madie<这个词写错了吧 media> .But ,as we all know, all ads are not true<武断了吧>.Sometimes they tell its costumers wrong information ,especily , ads in order to intruduce a kind of food.,they will tell their customers the adventures<这个词在这里是什么意思> of it ,but often,they will include some information which do not exsit and often mislead their audidence.Not all audidence can distinguish them.Of course ,they will affect their healthy eating habit.And I think it maybe the key cause of unhealty eating habit.Above , I say ads will tell us unhealthy eating habit because they do not tell us the true information of the food ,such as “sanlu”,a milk powder producer,whose food includes some bad material: which hurt<这里用hurt不合适吧>many babies .On the side , the audidence do the habit unactively<没有这个词>.But ,on the other side, they are ready to do the habit,like ,many children ,who just know how delicious they are and ignore the unhealth side.They bealive the ad and want to have the food. Wow,they can not control themselvs.
To the conclude,I agree that advertisments are the key cause of unhealthy habit.

同学 恕我直言
1 字数不够
2 没有段落 开头不像ets要求的开头 中间部分就更让我迷糊了 结尾倒是很干脆 但是最好不要只写一句话
3 没有论段 论据的相应结合
4 议论的很乱
5 用词需要斟酌 多背单词吧
6 下次可以先把自己写的作文放到word里 word有自动检查语法和拼写错误的功能 可以让你自己检查出来你的小毛病和不通顺的地方
7 加油!
God Bless me!
我想我可以的!是一定可以的!是一定一定不错的!

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发表于 2010-7-29 23:53:25 |只看该作者
Nowedays(拼写错误),our life is filled with advertisments((拼写错误)). Many times ,we can not tell ourself (拼写错误)how many ads we hear and see every day.So we can get that ads are really a strong madie(拼写错误) .But ,as we all
know,1 ^' Q! k9 Z* S2 Z4 M
all ads are not true.Sometimes they tell its costumers wrong information ,especily(拼写错误) , ads in order to intruduce(拼写错误) a kind of food.,they will tell their customers the adventures of it ,but often,they will include some information which do not exsit (拼写错误)and often mislead their audidence.Not all audidence(拼写错误) can distinguish them.Of course ,they will affect their healthy eating habit.And I think it maybe the key cause of unhealty(拼写错误) eating habit.Above (不通), I say ads will tell us unhealthy eating habit because they do not tell us the true information of the food ,such as “sanlu”,a milk powder producer,whose food includes some bad material: which hurt many babies .On the side , the audidence(拼写错误) do the habit unactively.But ,on the other side, they are ready to do the habit,like ,many children ,who just know how delicious they are and ignore the unhealth(拼写错误) side.They bealive the ad and want to have the food. Wow,(貌似用这个词太口语了)they can not control themselvs(拼写错误).
To the conclude(拼写错误),I agree that advertisments(拼写错误) are the key cause of unhealthy habit.
语法 句式 单词拼写 用词
还得多多收集整理。

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发表于 2010-7-31 21:32:53 |只看该作者
Have you read newspapers and magazines in foreign language?Do you feel benefit from them?As for me,I tried the method,but the result is not as well as expected.In my view,there no exsit the best way to study a second language,but you will face the choice—which one is the fittest one for you.
Again,talk my own experience.I bought some English newspapers and magazines in order to improve my English level.However,after a year,they are still what they were a year ago.Only one difference is that—they made close friends with “dirty”.Around me,some people speaking English well are faithful fans of the means.What a pity!When I followed the footsteps of examples.,the magic power was disppeared.Finally,I changed my mind and found my most effective learning road—hearing English songs and watching English movies,which can hold my enthusiasm,rejecting dull and tiredness.That is to my liking.
From what has been mentioned above,we see that which one we tend to use is which one oriebtates on your own situation best.Other`s fittest methed may be not your must.Your fittest one will become your day`s work.And you will be attached to it.Do you have find your apptite?

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发表于 2010-7-31 22:26:41 |只看该作者
不好意思,我好像没有看到“country”,以为是“language”,可不可以将就着改一下。

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发表于 2010-8-1 14:13:50 |只看该作者
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发表于 2010-8-1 20:27:07 |只看该作者
丫头,总算找到你了。要加油啊,就算一开始有差距也不要灰心!!!加油加油!!!
我要加油!!!

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发表于 2010-8-3 21:18:20 |只看该作者
4# Joannalove1992
Have you read newspapers and magazines in foreign language? Do you feel benefit from them? As for me, I tried the method, but the result is not as well as expected. In my view, there no [url=]exsit[/url][o1]
the best way to study a second language, but you will face the choice—which one is the fittest one for you.*
Again,[url=] talk my own experience[/url][o2]
. I bought some English newspapers and magazines in order to improve my English[url=] level[/url][o3]
.However, [url=]after a year[/url][o4]
, they are still what they were a year ago. [url=]Only one difference[/url][o5]
is that—they made close friends with “dirty”. [url=]Around me, some people speaking English well are faithful fans of the means. [/url][o6]
What a pity! When I followed the footsteps of examples, the magic power was [url=]disppeared[/url][o7]
. Finally, I changed my mind and found my most effective learning road—hearing English songs and watching English movies, which can [url=]hold[/url][o8]
my enthusiasm ,[url=]rejecting[/url][o9]
dull and tiredness. [url=]That is to my liking.[/url]$[o10]
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From what has been mentioned above, we see that which one we tend to use is which one [url=]oriebtates[/url][o11]
on your own situation best. Other`s fittest [url=]methed[/url][o12]
may be not [url=]your must[/url][o13]
.Your fittest one will become your day`s work.And you will be [url=]attached to[/url][o14]
it.Do you have find your [url=]apptite[/url][o15]
?

我觉得这个题目可能没有粘贴完整,a foreign ?,楼主是按照language写,当然没有问题,不过,字数不够300。另外,建议楼主看一下模板,因为文章结构上显得凌乱。另外,楼主有一些拼写错误,最好写完检查一遍。加油:)

[o1]Exist,而且可以这么用么?这不是动词么?



[o2]祈使句?但是好像有些奇怪。



[o3]Level删去,English就可以了。



[o4]跟后面的a year ago重复,其实,这儿用now就行了。



[o5]The only difference



[o6]逻辑上有转折,建议用转折的连词或者副词。



[o7]Disappearing更好一些吧?而且拼写错误。



[o8]Keep



[o9]Keep away



[o10]有这个用法?



[o11]



[o12]Method



[o13]?有点奇怪



[o14]Interested in



[o15]Appetite

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