zak_chemistry的8.7作文

zak_chemistryUID: 2612236

09.06.12NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.
With the development of the society the competition is becoming more and more fierce. I don't think that not taking part-time jobs is good to nowadays students and, to be a responsible person a student should try to take part-time jobs.
First and foremost, considering more and more students graduate from schools, students who just graduate cannot fit the taste of most companies. Most companies want to hire people who have working experiences which students who just graduate from schools are not equipped. So, for most students, graduation means unempolyment and this is a serious challenge. In order to find a good job after graduation, students should take part-time jobs during the universities. Students can improve their working skills, such as the ability to communicate, the ability to handle with pressure and the ability to coperate, in the part-time jobs. And after graduation, students can find good jobs they like.
What's more, the knowledge we learn from universities is going to be used. But the skills and what the students learn are relatively theoritical and students cannot use them directely in their jobs. This is the second challenge on the way to good jobs for most students. Part-time jobs can help students abridge the distence between the studying and working and can make students handle the jobs well after graduation.
Thirdly, in my opinion, students should not use parents' money after they going into the universities. Parents have given out as much as they have to cultivate us. Being a person who know love his parents, he should at least not give burdon to their parents as early as possible if he can not give parent anything in returen. Students who are in universities have more free time than before. So they could do part-time jobs after classes in order to feed themselves.
However, studying is the most important thing to students in the universities. Students should try their best to do well in the universities. Students can do part-time jobs if they can study well and have extra time. So doing part-time jobs is not necessary thing to do in the universities.
In sum, most students in the universities should take part-time jobs. It does not only because of money, but also because doing part-time jobs is a way to being a more mature person.

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zak_chemistryUID: 2612236

09.08.01NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people

(especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments,

you will never get successful in life

I do agree with the statement. With the development of our society and increasing number of the people on Earth, every person has to have too much stress from society, and the competition in front of them is more fierce than ever before. People have to make themselves outstanding enough
in order to
defeat their competitors and win a good chance.

First, what can be called success? In different areas, success has its different meaning. But generally, a person's success can be defined as that he gets much wealth or are in high status or has a great power. No matter which one of them, wealth, status or power, comes from society. So a person's success must be s kind of success that could not be isolate from society. As a result, getting acceptations of society and authorizations is the standard of being successful. In other words, if you want to be successful, you have to make society and authorizations know your strengths and accomplishments, and make they acknowledge your accomplishments. Take Vincent van Gogh for instance, Van Gogh had made a lot of high level paintings in his whole life, but he was not acknowledged by society when he lived. After he died for some time, he became famous all over the world, and any piece of painting worth millions of dollars. Although all paintings was painted, he can not be called being successful when he was alive, because he could not even had a good meal everyday.

Second, nowadays people have to do more to make themselves outstanding, if they want to successful. Why? Because there are more challenges and crisis than ever before in this world. The explosion of the population, serious economic crisis, pollutions of environment, exhaustion of the earths natural resources, all of these seriously threaten every person's survival in this world and on earth. So competition becomes more fierce. Take finding jobs as an example, companies not have to consider how to find employees, because the jobs are too few. Considering excellent people are also too much, if you want to get your ideal job, you have to show how you are excellent as much as possible in order to make the interviewers think you are the best one in the elites. To some extent, the interview is not a test for the abilities but the test of how to show your abilities. The person who can show his abilities most and make the interviewers acknowledge him can be successful in the competition.

However, we should emphasize on improving our abilities at the same time we are thinking how to make us seems to have more abilities. Because it is to difficult to be successful nowadays, a lot of people use bad ways to make them successful. For example, even some famous professors and people with high status forge confirmations of achievements to make society and authorizations acknowledge them. These things bring so neglect influences to our society. So we should think more how to be excellent but not just seems to.

In sum, there have been a great difference between today and yesterday. We should not view things in the way as we did before. Considering the competition today, we all have to think how to make society and authorizations acknowledge us and make the goal.

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zak_chemistry 的8.17 作文
谢谢大家批评！！！

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BY XSDGJ 20100819

2008.5.16 NA
independently writing: 是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effect

(谈影响时，谈正面， 负面， 谈对习惯 和风俗的改变)
In my opinion, telephone is more effect to human (has more effect 好点).
Telephone have already had effect on every aspects in our lives. It affects our traditions, our customs and the way in which we used to live. Nowadays we can leave without it even one day （好别扭， 是不是not leave it even for one minute 更好）or the whole world will mess up.

First, telephone can bring our voice to thousands mills away. With telephone, we can easily hear our parents’s voice in another place immediately. Hundreds of years ago, our ancestors has dream that only gods has this kind of ability to hear the voice from thousands miles away, (时态不对) but now almost everybody has the gods' ability. Hundred of year ago, people in different place communicated only through the way of letters, but now people in different country can whisper "good night" before going to bed. Because of telephone, the distance between people is almost disappear （disappeared）. We do not have to wait anxiously weeks, even months, for the letter from the people we deeply love. We do not have to be sorrow because of the mountains, oceans that depart people whose heart are always together. We do not need to admire birds that can travel very fast. Just because of television (???), the world becomes smaller.

Second, telephone can bring messages to anywhere immediately. Telephone short time that it spend sending messages almost to none.(感觉不通) Nowadays time is money and time is life. Because of telephone, businessmen can always know the situations of his chain shops in other places. And he can also control all of things of his shop all the time. He transmit his orders immediately. What's more, we have know idea how many lives that telephone have saved. When a man get sick seriously, neighbors can call the hospital to come and save the man's life immediately. When a house lost fire (get fire）, people can call firemen to come as soon as possible to kill the fire and save more people in danger. When somebody crime and run away, people can call police to catch the crime and reduce the number of people who are going to be hurt.

However, telephone also brings us negative effects. Although telephone short (shorten) the physical distance among people, but to some extent it extend the mental distance among people. In old days, people always visit their friends' home in the festivals. But nowadays people get use (used) to just making a telephone call to greet their friends and just talk a few sentences and hang off. As a result, the relationship between friends is no longer that close. What's more, because of telephone, lies are more easily to make. On the telephone, we cannot see the person's face on the other end of the line and we can just hear his voice. So a lot of people use this shortage of telephone to pretend people's relatives or friends and cheat their money.

In sum, no matter what kind of effective telephone have on us, it greatly influence our lives and the ways we live. But we have to say thanks to telephone because it brings us too much happiness to us after all.
观点很明显，论据很充分。 但是，可以很明显地看到，你写得很匆忙，对于一些句子，单词的变化都没注意。多有不当之处，请见谅！

zak_chemistryUID: 2612236

谢谢大家多提意见！狠屁莫虑！

zak_chemistryUID: 2612236

不好意思是狠批！！

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我来鸟~嘻嘻

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谢谢各位批评！！！我会继续努力！！！