Issue104 第一次写，不敢限时，渴望拍砖，必回拍

zjcq2002UID: 2113577

104.It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears.


What the auther has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas seleted down from one generation to another,which sounds specious at first .However,I partly agree with it considering there are still other ways.

First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for.Teachers teaches us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways having been proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and access the culture needs,are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture,for instance, the famous law that the earth is move around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexaminated and bolstered by the fact,are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience ,thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallcies and discredited them.

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth presevering and perpetuating.We are taught to be sceptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including methods and words teachers says which sounds without proper reason or to be doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason.In this kind of cases,education plays an role not only prepertuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly,the formal education plays an important role as I concede above, which does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used.We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influnce,the law, the media,all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does.Parents are the first and the most influnce teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors,which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the right and wrong.Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countries'law to be illegical,whereas in the east countries such as china,it is required and compeled when a couple already has a child.Another way that is also important is the media.Media such as books, internet,televisions,music and film are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does .These means have their own uses and advantages in different situation and in contrast with the formal education, it is hard to say which is primary or major according to personal experience and growing surroundings.

In sum, formal education is an important way but without the comparation with other means such the parents' influnces, the law and the media,the auther's saying that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.

shinekqUID: 210236

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What the auther(author?) has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas seleted(ly) down from one generation to another,which sounds specious at first .However,I partly agree with it considering there are still other ways.

First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for.Teachers teaches us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways having been proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and access the culture needs,are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture,for instance, the famous law that the earth is move around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexaminated and bolstered by the fact,are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience ,thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallcies and discredited them.

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth presevering and perpetuating.We are taught to be sceptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including methods and words teachers says which sounds without proper reason or to be doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason.In this kind of cases,education plays an role not only prepertuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly,the formal education plays an important role as I concede above, which does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used.We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influnce,the law, the media,all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does.Parents are the first and the most influnce teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors,which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the right and wrong.Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countries'law to be illegical,whereas in the east countries such as china,it is required and compeled when a couple already has a child.Another way that is also important is the media.Media such as books, internet,televisions,music and film are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does .These means have their own uses and advantages in different situation and in contrast with the formal education, it is hard to say which is primary or major according to personal experience and growing surroundings.

In sum, formal education is an important way but without the comparation with other means such the parents' influnces, the law and the media,the auther's saying that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.

vieripingUID: 207712

104.It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears.


What the auther has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas seleted down from one generation to another,which sounds specious at first .However,I partly agree with it considering there are still other ways.
开头应该更明确一点提出自己的观点

First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for.Teachers teaches us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways having been proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These后面名词是不可数的 knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and access the culture needs,are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. 不完全同意这个观点Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture,for instance, the famous law that the earth is move around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexaminated and bolstered by the fact,are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience ,thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallcies and discredited them.举的例子可以

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth presevering and perpetuating.We are taught to be sceptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including methods and words teachers says which sounds without proper reason or to be doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason.In this kind of cases,education plays an role not only prepertuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly,the formal education plays an important role as I concede above, which does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used.We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influnce,the law, the media,all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does. 这个观点（父母）很好Parents are the first and the most influnce teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors,which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the right and wrong.Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countries'law to be illegical,whereas in the east countries such as china,it is required and compeled when a couple already has a child.Another way that is also important is the media.Media such as books, internet,televisions,music and film are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does .These means have their own uses and advantages in different situation and in contrast with the formal education, it is hard to say which is primary or major according to personal experience and growing surroundings.我认为这段举的几个因素都很不错

In sum, formal education is an important way but without the comparation with other means such the parents' influnces, the law and the media,the auther's saying that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.结尾可以升华一点

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我觉得修改文章的内容不需要看观点是否正确，或者与修改者的观点是否相符， 只需批判其逻辑正确性即可。

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What the auther(author) has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas selected down from one generation to another, which sounds specious at first .However, I partly agree with it considering there are still other ways.
First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for. Teachers teaches(teach) us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways having been proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and access the culture needs, are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture, for instance, the famous law that the earth is move around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexaminated(reexamined) and bolstered by the fact(facts), are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience ,thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallcies(fallacies) and discredited them.

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth presevering (preserving) and perpetuating. We are taught to be skeptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including methods and words teachers says(say) which sounds without proper reason or to be(to be 可以不要吧) doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason. In this kind of cases, education plays an role not only prepertuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly, the formal education plays an important role as I concede above,(however, it) which does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used. We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influence, the law, the media, all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does. Parents are the first and the most influence(influence) teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors, which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the right and wrong. Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countrie’s law to be illogical (illegally), whereas in the east countries such as china, it is required and compelled when a couple already has a child. Another way that is also important is the media. Media such as books, internet, televisions, music and film are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does .These means have their own uses and advantages in different situation and in contrast with the formal education, it is hard to say which is primary or major according to personal experience and growing surroundings.(感觉和题目没有 必然关系)

In sum, formal education is an important way , but compared with other means such the parents' influences, the law and the media, the author’s saying that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.
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zjcq2002UID: 2113577

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同志们，非常感谢，我明天要回南京，今晚上来不及和大家讨论了，请把各位的文文连接附在后面，我会尽快回拍。

lingli_xiaoaiUID: 172506

你把别人给你的修改意见整合一下,把文章重新修改后,我再帮你改的效果好一些,我记住你的ID,改好了,我就过来帮你改.

zjcq2002UID: 2113577

好的，谢谢灰原，我昨天没看到，改好了我会尽快贴来

zjcq2002UID: 2113577

104.It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears.


What the author has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas selected down from one generation to another, which sounds plausible at a first glance .However, I partly agree with it because formal education do play a role and partly disagree with it considering there are still other ways.

First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for. Teachers teach us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways having been proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and satisfied the needs of culture, are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture, for instance, the famous law that the earth is move around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexamined and bolstered by the facts, are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience, thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallacies and discredited them.

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth preserving and perpetuating. We are taught to be skeptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including methods and words teachers say which sounds without proper reason or doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason. In this kind of cases, education plays a role not only perpetuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly, the formal education plays an important role as I concede above, however，it does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used. We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influence, the law, the media, all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does. Parents are the first influence teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors, which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the right and wrong. Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countries' law to be illegal, whereas in the east countries such as china, it is required and compelled when a couple already has a child. Another way that is also important is the media. Media such as books, internet, televisions, music and film are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does but last much longer and more flexible in time. To an infant and a child under the age of going to school, it is parents tell them the right and wrong; to an adult, books and television are primary way to get the culture idea after leaving school; To all the people, law on the basis of the culture is doubtless and inextricable. These means have their own uses and advantages in different situations in contrast with the formal education, hence it is arbitrary to say which is primary or major according to different personal experience and growing surroundings.

In sum, formal education is an important way but without the comparison with other means such as the parents' influences, the law and the media, the author's conclusion that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.

我重新改了一下，感觉开头观点的明确提出和结尾的升华都好难，本想改好一点，却无从下手，结果还是像阿狗一样生硬。然后我最担心的偏题问题和提纲就麻烦你帮我看一下了

zjcq2002UID: 2113577

谢谢灰原，辛苦你了

jingdawei83UID: 198818

What the auther has concluded is that the formal education is the major way for culture to hand the ideas seleted down from one generation to another,which sounds specious at first .However,I partly agree with it considering there are still other ways.(agree with it while some other ways exist. )

First of all, I certainly believe that formal education is an important way to perpetuate ideas and it is what the formal education comes for.Teachers teaches(teach) us the knowledge and experience of the ancestors and the ways(method) having been(has been 可去掉） proved by them to be efficient in solving different problems. These knowledge and experience such as the golden mean and the law of gravity, through the test of hundreds of years and access(accessing) needs,are well preserved and handed down by the means of formal education. Other ideas which had been rejected and discarded by the former culture,for instance, the famous law(thesis） that the earth is move(moving)around the sun founded by Copernicus, once were reexaminated and bolstered by the fact,are also been handed down though the classes whereas the pseudoscience ,thriving in the past and welcomed by the former culture, such as the alchemy and the astrology, never come back to the classes because the new culture has recognized their fallcies and discredited them.

Secondly, the formal education is also used to judge whether the idea is worth presevering and perpetuating.We are taught to be sceptical to the ideas pressed on our mind, including (the)methods and words(that) teachers says(say) which sounds without proper reason or(nor) to be doubtful. By checking books, doing experiments, debating on the internet or face to face and write to the famous experts to searching for the right answer and the reason.In this kind of cases,education plays an(a) role not only prepertuating the ideas but also valuing the ideas through preserving.

Admittedly,the formal education plays an important role as I concede above, which does not means it is the major and primary way that the culture used.We can not except other means insofar as the parents' influnce,the law, the media,all of which may have the same effect as the formal education does.Parents are the first and the most influnce(effective) teachers to us in most cases ,for a large account of the social principles are taught by them and young children are likely to imitate the adults' social behaviors,which usually adapt to the culture of the society. Laws are the fundamental rule of people to restrain themselves and to judge the(what is) right and(or) wrong.Different culture influences different laws in the same aspect ,for example, Abortion is considered to be(as) a kind of murder in the west culture and reflects in the west countries'law to be illegical,whereas in the east countries such as china,it is required and compeled when a couple already has a child.Another way that is also important is the media.Media such as books, internet,televisions,music and film(films) are good teachers to introduce us the knowledge just like the formal education does .These means have their own uses and advantages in different situation and in contrast with the formal education, it is hard to say which is primary or major according to personal experience and growing surroundings.

In sum, formal education is an important way but without the comparation with other means such the parents' influnces, the law and the media,the auther's saying that it is the primary way is reasonless and unconvincing.

jingdawei83UID: 198818

我个人认为写这个题目应当主要支持，最后稍稍点出还有其他途径。因为毕竟社会，文化对事物的喜恶确实主要依靠传统教育。而且我觉得文化也是在不断成长的，所谓的传统教育也在不断变化，不太可能使一种喜恶“不朽“，我觉得这方面也可以写一些，大家说说啊