ISSUE48 (自个琢磨的，没看讨论和素材)

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第一次发，不怕死的很惨~~~:p
提纲和下文有些地方出入比较大，按憋出的文章为准吧！
超时了不少，但比以前有进步了，550字左右。
谢先，先谢！！！

Issue48
某个时代的某一群人能够代表这一时期，成为这个时期的标志。（建国的英雄；和平时期的英雄：人民公仆）
但是历史并不是少数人促成的，而是整个社会群体在某一时期共同创造的。
1人民大众的意愿往往会改变历史，重新书写新的篇章。（每一次革命都是如此）
2历史的潮流确实是由一些身份已经被淡忘的人群引导的。（抗日战争的所有战士；文化大革命时街上只有绿，蓝，灰色）
通过研究某一群代表所处历史时期大众的特点的人是有助于研究历史的发展过程的，但是不能忽视大众的重要作用。
When it comes to the question that whether the study of history should focus more on individuals standing for a period of time or groups of people being forgotten but making the trend of history, people's views vary a lot towards it. Some insist that the leaders or some famous individuals navigate the tendency of history while others argue that it is groups of people but not only those individuals that write our history. As far as I am concern, I hold the opinion that both those sparkle individuals and a large amount of no-name people play an active role in the long river of history.
It is true that we can figure out some individuals as token of a period of history, for they are at a leading position to control the whole society or make great contribution to the human-being or are remembered by the touching story they process...No matter for what reasons, these people do make themselves permanent to the history and their offspring. At the time of foundation of the People's Republic of China, which is also known as the "brand new China", we can name our new and virile leadership, such as Chairman Mao, Premier Zhou and so forth, because of their preterhuman courage and insight, their unprecedented stratagem, and more their final achievement--liberate the land of China, which attacked and occupied by the invaders from outside for years, and make it a free homeland where Chinese people can govern ourselves and be our own master. As for now, anytime we talk about this period of history, no way we can miss the names of the ones giving the happy life that we can feed ourselves on what we earn from our hands back to our Chinese People.
However, judging how the trend of history goes, we should say fairly that there are other groups of people devoting a lot even their lives to make changes take place to do the conversion to that moment’s situation. A large quantity of heroes, for instance, stand out during the time of the anti-Japan War. They, with the concrete faith to achieve the goal of final success, even would love to be only a little stone to build the road straight to the victory. Unfortunately, from the limited names we always mention to memorize that war, we cannot imagine the exact number, which we only describe as numerous, of the heroes devoting their young lives to fight against our enemies to win our freedom.
Furthermore, the wish of the majority of the population, despite of some leading ones, may create the new page of history. Here we can take every revolution as example that it every time happens when the minority as the power governors cannot follow the way the society want their life to be anymore or even treat their people with a cruelly wicked management, as a consequence, the people from the bottom level of the society or suffering from starve and pains from life would stand up together to overturn the government, and at the meantime, they rewrite the tendency of the history.
As the evidences provided above, whether positive or negative, I agree that one thing, placing much emphasis on individuals typical for that specific period of time may help the study of history, on the other, the indispensable influence of groups of people also contributing to the history cannot be ignored either. If both points we place our interests on, we can see explicitly how the history covers the past and what it will do to the moment as well as the future.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-24 at 23:49 ]

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ISSUE48 (自个琢磨的，没看讨论和素材)

第一次发，不怕死的很惨~~~
提纲和下文有些地方出入比较大，按憋出的文章为准吧！
超时了不少，但比以前有进步了，550字左右。
谢先，先谢！！！

Issue48
某个时代的某一群人能够代表这一时期，成为这个时期的标志。（建国的英雄；和平时期的英雄：人民公仆）
但是历史并不是少数人促成的，而是整个社会群体在某一时期共同创造的。
1人民大众的意愿往往会改变历史，重新书写新的篇章。（每一次革命都是如此）
2历史的潮流确实是由一些身份已经被淡忘的人群引导的。（抗日战争的所有战士；文化大革命时街上只有绿，蓝，灰色）
通过研究某一群代表所处历史时期大众的特点的人是有助于研究历史的发展过程的，但是不能忽视大众的重要作用。
When it comes to the question that whether the study of history should focus more on individuals standing for a period of time or groups of people being forgotten but making the trend of history, people's views vary a lot towards it. Some insist that the leaders or some famous individuals navigate the tendency of history while others argue that it is groups of people but not only those individuals that write our history.(这一句和上一句内容是重复的) As far as I am concern, I hold the opinion that both those sparkle individuals and a large amount of no-name people play an active role in the long river of history.(语言很棒)

It is true that we can figure out some individuals as token of a period of history, for they are at a leading position to control the whole society or make great contribution to the human-being or are remembered by the touching story they process...No matter for what reasons, these people do make themselves permanent to the history and their offspring. At the time of foundation of the People's Republic of China, which is also known as the "brand new China", we can name our new and virile leadership, such as Chairman Mao, Premier Zhou and so forth, because of their preterhuman courage and insight, their unprecedented stratagem, and more their final achievement--liberate the land of China, which attacked and occupied by the invaders from outside for years, and make it a free homeland where Chinese people can govern ourselves and be our own master. As for now, anytime we talk about this period of history, no way we can miss the names of the ones giving the happy life that we can feed ourselves on what we earn from our hands back to our Chinese People.(论述很清晰，语言很流畅，佩服!!! 最后最好有个总结句,回到学习名人有助于研究历史这个主题上来)

However, judging how the trend of history goes, we should say fairly that there are other groups of people devoting a lot even their lives to make changes take place to do the conversion to that moment’s situation.(这句有点过长了,有点不舒服) A large quantity of heroes, for instance, stand out during the time of the anti-Japan War. They, with the concrete faith to achieve the goal of final success, even would love to be only a little stone to build the road straight to the victory. Unfortunately, from the limited names we always mention to memorize that war, we cannot imagine the exact number, which we only describe as numerous, of the heroes devoting their young lives to fight against our enemies to win our freedom.(个人觉得从论述上来说已经很到位了,但论点可以更深入一些,可以说一下他们在历史研究中的作用,毕竟issue 里面有个关键词是study of history)
Furthermore, the wish of the majority of the population, despite of some leading ones, may create the new page of history. Here we can take every revolution as example that it every time happens when the minority as the power governors cannot follow the way the society want their life to be anymore or even treat their people with a cruelly wicked management, as a consequence, the people from the bottom level of the society or suffering from starve and pains from life would stand up together to overturn the government, and at the meantime, they rewrite the tendency of the history.(论点感觉和上一段有些重复）

As the evidences provided above, whether positive or negative, I agree that one thing, placing much emphasis on individuals typical for that specific period of time may help the study of history, on the other, the indispensable influence of groups of people also contributing to the history cannot be ignored either. If both points we place our interests on, we can see explicitly how the history covers the past and what it will do to the moment as well as the future.

作者的语言能力真是没的说，描述的例子也很棒，找不太出漏洞,很是佩服！
提两点建议吧
１＼结尾总结句最好加上
２＼我觉得这篇文章的提高空间在论点的选择上，文章主要讲了名人和普通人在历史上起的作用，而没讲述他和历史研究的关系．另外b3和b4两段论点有些重复，这样会显得文章的信息量不大．

比我写的好多了，有时间指点一下
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1