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25. Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and

courage is to move in the opposite direction—in other words, to make things as

simple as possible.

As the speaker said, it is easy for anyone to follow his inclination and neglect

the proper method to make things bigger and more complex which, in my observation,

contributes to no good things but making problem more difficult to understand,

explain and solve. However, what serves as the right practice, as far as I

concerned, is the opposite－to simplify to a proper degree.

Simplification is so crucial that it deserves our more effort. In fact, to

simplify is an essential process for humans(human beings) to learn and

understand the laws and ideas existed in our world. In retrospect, almost all

kinds of science develop in the approach utilizing the simple technology to

generate the complex(almost all kinds of science developed in the approach

utilize the simple technology to generate the complex我理解是这样语法较好吧), the

well-understood theory to demonstrate the unknown one(把one 删了会整齐一些), the

basic phenomena to explain the advanced. It is those simplest theories that A

Brief History of Time written by Stephen William Hawking employed to explain the

most complex phenomenon to the world. (我想你这一段是要说明简化的重要性吧，可是你

只是举例了以前和现在人们都在用简化，可是以前人们用的不一定就是好的啊，所以我想你可

以以议论的方式说明一下简化的优点，再有就是我感觉你排比用的挺好的)

Simplification is so tough as to require our courage indeed. (我觉得在这里加个because较好，这样因果关系较明确，不然后面总觉得你一直在解释现在的世界多复杂，和Simplification is so tough as to require our courage联系不大)Things become complex

with the explosive growth of knowledge and gradually improvement of technology. As

the knowledge and experiences are accumulated boldly, humans(human beings) seem to have more

references to help us pick the right choices, however it lead humans(human beings) to a negative

direction,(逗号应该去掉更想同谓语) reckoning the given and the lost excessively. Over-thinking may lead to

passion lost and courage faded. Further more, although we endeavor to make

everything more convenience and simpler, our society has a natural tendency to

complicate everything. The complicating personal life can present this strong

trend well. The more kinds of food are provided, the more difficulty we have to

pick; the greater mobile we are, the greater our number of destinations we have to

reach each day; the more comfortable conditions we have, the greater probability

we have insomnia and the more facilities we get, the more trifles await us to

address. It is hard to ‘betray’ tendency and break inertia, thus certain courage

is demanded in this situation.

However, without basic principle, simplification can bog us down in the adversity

and even result in huge damages. No one wants to live in an over-simplified house.

If a designer expect to reduce the cost in the way diminish(diminishing) necessary materials

and simplify(simplifing) the building processes, probably he has to spend the rest time of his

life in the asylum, the prison or the complexity of both(是不是罗嗦了？). Further, over

simplification is dangerous in terms of the truth of knowledge, it is only when we

have sufficient pieces of mosaic that we can see that they may revive its original

outlook.(without basic principle, simplification can bog us down是你的主题句吧，可是没看到basic principle的作用啊，所以我觉得你的论述不够充分，应该举几个缺乏basic principle而硬要simplify所带来的危害)

In sum, we must try to make things simple with our real effort and courage, at the

same time we should be circumspect about the principle to accomplish it, and keep

away with blindness.
顺便问一句，这是你的第几篇习作啊，我在语法上不是很好，有一句我还没看懂呢就是simplification is dangerous in terms of the truth of knowledge, it is only when we

have sufficient pieces of mosaic that we can see that they may revive its original

outlook.看上去是不错的句子，让我学习一下好吗？

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Over simplification is dangerous in terms of the truth of knowledge, and  it is only when we have sufficient pieces of mosaic that  we can see that they may revives its original out look. 少了一个and, 后面的是强调句原本语序是we have sufficient pieces of mosaic that  we can see that they may revives its original out look, when we have sufficient pieces of mosaic 我的第二篇未限时，几个月前写得，觉得改不好了，就扔上来看看大家的意思

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恩,懂了,感觉句子不错,但是缺乏证据啊