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At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
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During the long history of evolution of species, a lot of them have become extinct. It is true that they are extinct due to natural process. I partly agree that to some extent the society do not necessarily save all the endangered species.

First of all, the extinction of species is the natural process and it is impossible for us to save all the endangered species. In the evolution history of species, many of them have been extinct due to their disability to adapt to the environment. Since the climate on the earth has changed significantly, many species that cannot endure these changes have disappeared. Only the strongest and most adaptable species have survived. Moreover, there a lot endangered species live in some areas that human being have never accessed to. For example, some species live deep in the sea may become extinct. In this case, it is really difficult for people to save them. The equipment of us is limited, which means people are not able to dive into such a depth to investigate the reason of these species' extinction and work out a good solution. Thus, many species have been disappeared due to natural processes and it is difficult for people to save all the endangered species because of the limitation of technology.

Furthermore, the economic ability of the society is limited to save all the endangered species. In order to save all the endangered animals and plants, the governments have to spend a lot time and money. Nevertheless, there are a lot other fields that the government to support, such as the scientific researches, medical programs, the national securities, and so forth. All these fields need the subsidy of the government, and the funds of government is limited. In addition, there are a lot of problems that confronts the government. Poverty is still a fundamental issue in the African countries. It is the first and most serious for them to solve, which means they do not have to ability to save all the endangered animals in Africa. Also there still a lot of  incurable diseases threaten people's lives in our society. The governments have to emphasize on the work to save people's lives rather than the extinct species. And the education, provided to students for the sake of the society in the future needs the funds of the government annually. Therefore, the government are not able to save all the endangered species due to others vital problems it confronts.

Admittedly, it is true that some of the species that become extinct are resulted by human being. With the development of the society, people tend to explore more and more areas that a lot of animals live previously and destroy their homelands, which make them extinct. In this case, human being is responsible to prevent these species from extinction to atone their behaviors. Additionally, the governments, in some countries have enough money to save the endangered animals, although it is not possible for it to save them all. But it should try every effort to save as many species as possible. Because the species and human being share the same earth, they have the right to live on this planet. And keeping the diversity of species is good for human being as well. Hence, those governments that have the ability to save endangered species should try their best to achieve so.

To sum up, it is true that some species become disappeared due to the natural processes. And because of a lot other serious problems, the society may not be able to save all the endangered species. However, those governments that have enough ability should cooperate together to prevent the endangered species from extinction.

[ Last edited by nickaaronlee on 2005-8-7 at 12:19 ]

mrealUID：201732

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issue121 V6 大家来拍啊，回拍回拍：）

------题目------
At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
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During the long history of evolution of species, a lot of them have become extinct. It is true that they are extinct due to natural process. I partly部分同意？到怎样的程度呢？是不是在开头应该说的清楚些？ agree that to some extent the society do not necessarily save all the endangered species.

First of all, the extinction of species is the natural process and it is impossible for us to save all the endangered species. In the evolution history of species, many of them have been extinct due to their disability to adapt to the environment. Since the climate on the earth has changed significantly, many species that cannot endure these changes have disappeared. Only the strongest and most adaptable species have survived. Moreover, there a lot endangered species live in some areas that human being have never accessed to. For example, some species live deep in the sea may become extinct. In this case, it is really difficult for people to save them. The equipment of us is limited, which means people are not able to dive into such a depth to investigate the reason of these species' extinction and work out a good solution. Thus, many species have been disappeared due to natural processes and it is difficult for people to save all the endangered species because of the limitation of technology.

Furthermore, the economic ability of the society is limited to save all the endangered species. In order to save all the endangered animals and plants, the governments have to spend a lot of time and money. Nevertheless, there are a lot of other fields that the government needs to support, such as the scientific researches, medical programs, the national securities, and so forth. All these fields need the subsidy of the government, and the funds of government is limited. In addition, there are a lot of problems that confronts the government. 是问题confront政府还是政府confront问题？我觉得好像是反了~怎么一下子跑到非洲来了？加点连接词吧Poverty is still a fundamental issue in the African countries. It is the first and most serious for them to solve, which means they do not have to ability to save all the endangered animals in Africa.这句话有问题啊，前半部分接上一句的，后半句有语病，两个放一起说有点让人听不明白~ Also there still a lot of  incurable diseases threaten people's lives in our society. The governments have to emphasize on the work to save people's lives rather than the extinct species. And the education, provided to students for the sake of the society in the future， needs the funds of the government annually. Therefore, the government are not able to save all the endangered species due to others vital problems it confronts.

看看你首段的第二句话，和这段的首句是不是有些矛盾啊？Admittedly, it is true that some of the species that become extinct are resulted by human being. With the development of the society, people tend to explore more and more areas that a lot of animals live previously and destroy their homelands, which make them extinct. In this case, human being is responsible to prevent these species from extinction to atone their behaviors. Additionally, the governments, in some countries have enough money to save the endangered animals, although it is not possible for it to save them all. But it should try every effort to save as many species as possible. Because the species and human being share the same earth, they have the right to live on this planet. And keeping the diversity of species is good for human being as well. Hence, those governments that have the ability to save endangered species should try their best to achieve so.

To sum up, it is true that some species become disappeared due to the natural processes. And because of a lot other serious problems, the society may not be able to save all the endangered species. However, those governments that have enough ability should cooperate together to prevent the endangered species from extinction.

mrealUID：201732

我觉得你这次的开头不好，与后面论证还有结尾都有所出入~
先说物种消失是自然过程，人类不可能都救。
又说社会经济能力限制人类就濒危物种。社会资金还要用在别的地方。
确实有好多物种的消失和人类活动有关，对这些物种人类要保护。而且有钱的国家也应该保护。
b1b2有交叉的部分，是不是在分开说的更清楚一些？
又说物种消失是自然过程又说和人类活动有关？？？感觉没有定论啊，是不是我理解的有问题，或者你表述的再清楚一些？
b3又突然提出一个有钱的要保护，感觉有点愣，换换顺序到b2后面可能好一些。
先说这么多，呵呵，再加油啊！！！有问题再讨论~

nickaaronleeUID：183378

b1b2有交叉吗？可否指出一下呢？我这两个部分写的时候感觉完全不同啊。b2是强调不是每个一个政府都有能力，b3是说经济比较发达的政府如果有能力应该保护。这样，你觉得呢？

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