Issue144 V6站队 8.7，高频题！！！今天上午第二篇，感觉好一些了

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

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nickaaronleeUID: 183378

I concede with the speaker that critics are helpful in making art works' lasting value accessible to the mass and be appreciated. However,（ the term of giving is conspicuously appropriate for critics' function. 这个思路挺新颖）Moreover, the speaker also ignores possible negative influence of critic.

Critics help us to appreciate art works and establish a aesthetic standard for our society, which is a access to the lasting value of the artistic masterpieces. Critics, who are excellent at evaluating works of art or artists themselves, are far more insightful than ordinary individuals in the domain of art; therefore,（ they can serve as a filter to make the mass access to the most distinguished artistic works, which can save time for the potential audience, readers, and so forth我觉得这里用guide比filter更好）. Moreover, the commentary from critic, if represents the preference of the mass can be taken as constructive feedbacks, which in turn can serve to improve quality of art works.

However, "giving", which is a misleading term, masks the actual function of critic--to discover and to appreciate. The misleading assertion overstates the importance of critics by. In fact the creation of art works are premise of any meaningful appreciation--that is no criticism can be made until the accomplishment of an artistic masterpiece. And the development of art is right the cornerstone for the advancement by critics. Moreover, the lasting value, which are innate in a masterpiece can neither be enhanced by criticism nor depreciated. Van Gogh's paintings get their fame only until the death of the talent, and the symphony of Beethoven are criticized to be discordant at its first display, however, the masterpieces manifest their lasting value as time passes by, despite the initial acrimonious commentary received before. Both of the telling example illustrate that the lasting values of art works just stay here, waiting to be discovered, no matter what is in critics’ commentary.（这段没有很明白，你第一段不是赞同critic的嘛？怎么一个however就开始说artist的lasting value了呢？）

In the concern with the negative effects of critics, lies another reason why I content with the speaker. In this business-oriented society, critics sometimes prove themselves no more than vehicles for attracting eyeballs, especially when facilitated by mass media. In this matter, the objectivity and integrity commentary is severely impaired by the pursuit for profit. For the acrimonious commentary usually catch ones' attention first, the criticism of art works are distorted to pander the preference and take potshots on the artistic creation, which, in turn, oppress the passion of artists’ creation and undermine the lasting value actually given by artists. （这段分析得不错，可还是在说critic不好啊）

In final analysis, I appreciate the function of critics to evaluation and discovery, which render the lasting value of art works easier to be accessed by ordinary individuals. However, it is artists rather than critic who give and create lasting values for our society. For the value of a masterpiece can neither be exaggerated nor diminished by the commentary of critics. Moreover, by overstating the importance of critics, the speaker simply ignores the negative influence that critics exert on our society.
（总体来说，从分析的角度来说，写得不错。可是，出现了很大的问题，全文所有的内容都与第一段相悖，我以为你要写critic gives lasting value，如果从文章看，把第一段改一下吧，其他问题不大。）

11yvetteUID: 2102418

我来学习了
最赞的就是mkb57288限时好成功,而且句式词汇的应用都不在话下啊~

mkb57288UID: 2105771

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It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value.
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
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I concede with the speaker that critics are helpful in making art’s lasting value more accessible and appreciable to the mass. However, considering that the term of giving is conspicuously inappropriate for critics' function, the speaker’s assertion that critics give lasting value is open to doubt. Moreover, the speaker’s lopsided assertion also ignores possible negative influence from critic.

I concede that critics help us to appreciate art works and establish an aesthetic standard for our society, which facilitates the access to the lasting value of artistic masterpieces. Being excellent at evaluating works of art or artists themselves, critics are far more insightful than ordinary individuals in the domain of art. Therefore, by serving as a filter, which makes the most distinguished artistic works’ value more easily access to the mass, they can save time for the potential audience, readers, and so forth. Moreover, the commentary from critic, if represents the preference of the mass, can be taken as constructive feedbacks, which in turn will improve quality of art works.

However, "giving", which is a misleading term in this case, masks the actual function of critic--to discover and to appreciate. The misleading term overstates the importance of critics. In fact the creation of art works are premise of any meaningful appreciation--that is no criticism can be made until the accomplishment of an artistic masterpiece. And the development of art is right the cornerstone for the advancement by critics. Moreover, the lasting value, which are innate in a masterpiece can neither be enhanced nor depreciated by criticism. Van Gogh's paintings get their fame only until the death of the talent, and the symphony of Beethoven are criticized to be discordant at its first performance. However, the masterpieces manifest their lasting value as time passes by, despite the initial acrimonious commentary received before. Both of the telling example illustrate that the lasting values of art works just stay here, waiting to be discovered, no matter what is in critics’ commentary. Realizing the fact, it would be arbitrary for the speaker to claim that the last values of art are granted by critics.

In the concern with the negative effects of critics, lies another reason why I content with the speaker. In this business-oriented society, critics sometimes prove themselves no more than vehicles for attracting eyeballs, especially when utilized by mass media. In this matter, the objectivity and integrity commentary is severely impaired by the pursuit for profit. Since the acrimonious commentary usually catch ones' attention first, the criticism of art works are distorted to pander the preference and take potshots on artistic creation, which, in turn, oppress the passion of artists’ creation and undermine the lasting value actually given by artists.

In final analysis, I appreciate the function of critics to evaluate and discover the lasting value innate within art works, which render the value easier to be accessed by ordinary individuals. However, it is artists rather than critic who give and create lasting values for our society. For the value of a masterpiece can neither be exaggerated nor diminished by the commentary of critics. Moreover, by overstating the importance of critics, the speaker simply ignores the negative influence that critics exert on our society.

11yvetteUID: 2102418

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I concede with the speaker that critics are helpful in making art’s lasting value more accessible and appreciable [赞!] to the mass. However, considering that the term of giving is conspicuously inappropriate for critics' function, the speaker’s assertion that critics give lasting value is open to doubt. Moreover, the speaker’s lopsided assertion also ignores possible negative influence from critic. 开头真的很好啊~修改前就很直接提出观点,修改稿亦如此,不过更丰满

I concede that critics help us to appreciate art works and establish an aesthetic standard for our society, which facilitates the access to the lasting value of artistic masterpieces. Being excellent at evaluating works of art or artists themselves, critics are far more insightful than ordinary individuals in the domain of art. Therefore, by serving as a filter, which makes the most distinguished artistic works’ value more easily access to the mass, they can save time for the potential audience, readers, and so forth. Moreover, the commentary from critic, if represents the preference of the mass, can be taken as constructive feedbacks, which in turn will improve quality of art works.这一段,让步,承认critics的确对于大众认识艺术作品起到推动作用.总共四句话,条理关系很明确

However, "giving", which is a misleading term in this case, masks the actual function of critic--to discover and to appreciate. The misleading term overstates the importance of critics. In fact the creation of art works are premise of any meaningful appreciation--that is no criticism can be made until the accomplishment of an artistic masterpiece. And the development of art is right the cornerstone [赞!] for the advancement by critics. Moreover, the lasting value, which are innate in a masterpiece can neither be enhanced nor depreciated by criticism. [价值的确是与生俱来的,但是critics的认同,使得大众认同,是会让其value增值的,所有不会enhanced这点就不敢苟同;当然有价值的东西的确不会被depreciated,这点赞成.而且后面所举得例子也是支持有价值的大师之作是不会被淹没的] Van Gogh's paintings get their fame only until the death of the talent, and the symphony of Beethoven are criticized to be discordant at its first performance. However, the masterpieces manifest their lasting value as time passes by, despite the initial acrimonious commentary received before. Both of the telling example illustrate that the lasting values of art works just stay here, waiting to be discovered, no matter what is in critics’ commentary. Realizing the fact, it would be arbitrary for the speaker to claim that the last values of art are granted by critics. 这段分两方面讨论不应过分强调critics的作用

In the concern with the negative effects of critics, lies another reason why I content with the speaker. In this business-oriented society, critics sometimes prove themselves no more than vehicles for attracting eyeballs, especially when utilized by mass media. In this matter, the objectivity and integrity commentary is severely impaired by the pursuit for profit. Since the acrimonious commentary usually catch ones' attention first, the criticism of art works are distorted to pander the preference [再次赞] and take potshots on artistic creation, which, in turn, oppress the passion of artists’ creation and undermine the lasting value actually given by artists. 结合现状,有点针砭时弊的味道,赞!而且分析得也深入

In final analysis, I appreciate the function of critics to evaluate and discover the lasting value innate within art works, which render the value easier to be accessed by ordinary individuals. However, it is artists rather than critic who give and create lasting values for our society. For the value of a masterpiece can neither be exaggerated nor diminished by the commentary of critics. Moreover, by overstating the importance of critics, the speaker simply ignores the negative influence that critics exert on our society.

嗯,分析得很好的一篇,文字功底强这就不多说了~~~
真的很喜欢mkb57288的文章,是一种欣赏

xiaowenzi118UID: 202887

It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value.
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
------正文------ 485 words

I concede with the speaker that critics are helpful in making art works' lasting value accessible to the mass and be appreciated. However, the term of giving is conspicuously inappropriate for critics' function. Moreover, the speaker also ignores possible negative influence from critic.

Critics help us to appreciate art works and establish a aesthetic standard for our society, which facilitates an access to the lasting value of artistic masterpieces. Critics, who are excellent at evaluating works of art or artists themselves, are far more insightful than ordinary individuals in the domain of art. Therefore, they can serve as a filter to make the mass access to the most distinguished artistic works, which can save time for the potential audience, readers, and so forth. Moreover, the commentary from critic, if represents the preference of the mass can be taken as constructive feedbacks, which in turn can serve to improve quality of art works.（这里似乎只提到了critics促进了art的lasting value,却没有提到critics自身是不是具有lasting value，可以提一下一些正确的评价在今天都是具有价值的什么的吧）
However, "giving", which is a misleading term, masks the actual function of critic--to discover and to appreciate. The misleading assertion overstates the importance of critics by. In fact the creation of art works are premise of any meaningful appreciation--that is no criticism can be made until the accomplishment of an artistic masterpiece. （这个观点和上次nickaaronlee的critics rely on the artists to live差不多，个人觉得这是一个相当有力的反对观点，可惜我自己没有想到，他们的工作只是art的附属品使得他们的工作缺少long-lasting value） And the development of art is right the cornerstone for the advancement by critics. Moreover,（好像也和nickaaronlee犯了同样的错误，没有把这个观点展开写，不知道是不是不好写呢，不好举例能不能用什么比喻或者类比什么的来证明呢？个人觉得把上面那个观点好好展开的话意义会比加一个什么Moreover和一些俗例子要有新意得多） the lasting value, which are innate in a masterpiece can neither be enhanced by criticism nor depreciated.（这个可以另外作为一段，是另一个影响他们工作价值的地方，因为通常有问题，不被后人承认） Van Gogh's paintings get their fame only until the death of the talent, and the symphony of Beethoven are criticized to be discordant at its first display, however, the masterpieces manifest their lasting value as time passes by, despite the initial acrimonious commentary received before. Both of the telling example illustrate that the lasting values of art works just stay here, waiting to be discovered, no matter what is in critics’ commentary.

In the concern with the negative effects of critics, lies another reason why I content with the speaker. In this business-oriented society, critics sometimes prove themselves no more than vehicles for attracting eyeballs, especially when utilized by mass media. In this matter, the objectivity and integrity commentary is severely impaired by the pursuit for profit. For the acrimonious commentary usually catch ones' attention first, the criticism of art works are distorted to pander the preference and take potshots on the artistic creation, which, in turn, oppress the passion of artists’ creation and undermine the lasting value actually given by artists. （这一点和我差不多）
In final analysis, I appreciate the function of critics to evaluation and discovery, which render the lasting value of art works easier to be accessed by ordinary individuals. However, it is artists rather than critic who give and create lasting values for our society. For the value of a masterpiece can neither be exaggerated nor diminished by the commentary of critics. Moreover, by overstating the importance of critics, the speaker simply ignores the negative influence that critics exert on our society.

这道题我是全否的，第一次也没写好，被hustzwj大批了一通，说我一点也没有意识到题目里的long lasting value 这一项，现在看来不只是我有这个问题呀。

没看到你的修改稿,只改了原文. ;P