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The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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When it comes to that whether the greatness of individuals is decided by their contemporaries or their descendents, some people approve the former while some others believe the latter. However, the fact is that, the greatness is an intrinsic quality of the individuals not decided by others, and the only possibility is that others can evaluate the greatness of individuals subjectively. So that, the greatness evaluated by who is owing to the different situations.

To begin with, for professional evaluation, the giants are always found by people who live decades later. Reasons can be generalized as follows. First, the science is developing all the time, and the knowledge structure of human beings are more and more solid and improved. Contrasting to the earlier years' science and technology, they are more prosperous nowadays, and some difficulty problems for our ancestors seem like a piece of cake for us. For example, we all know that the earth is almost a sphere, but people living 1000 years ago purely believed that the earth is a cube. When Copernicus proposed that the earth was rotating around the sun, no one believed him, and he was sentenced to death for it. However, after years, his theory proved to be true and the fame came back to him. Accumulating all the marrows of the science historically, people become wiser and wiser to estimate the historic giants. Secondly, the theories are always brought earlier than their applications. People can only evaluate a result through examine its application, and then whether the theory is valuable can be checked. For this reason, time is a key factor for examination, and as a result the great persons' contemporaries can not judge their discoveries or inventions' true wealth.

Moreover, people living in different eras, feel different societal surroundings, the circumstance influences the judgment of human beings. As the society progressing, the democracy and civilization are enhanced. Many great ancestors who were not to be recognized in their years can be evaluated after them. Take Copernicus again, for he lived in a papalism society, once his theory was against the papacy's taste, he would never be recognized by the society. But time changed, when the whole society feels that democracy is suitable and merit for development, the chain in people's minds are unlocked, and the former scientific ideas are reexamined. Then we can return the fame to the significant predecessors.

Undeniable, some great people are emerging in their time. For their outstanding contributions are accepted by the society and the populace. Always, the contributions are linking to people's life closely. The former prime minister of Israel, Rabin, is such an outstanding people who devoted to improve the relationship of Israel and other Arabian countries especially Palestine. His greatness was recognized by the whole world and he got the Nobel Prize for Peace. Though he died unfortunately, but people in Israel even around the world would keep him in mind. People who are easily accessing to take the society and the populace into account are more likely to be identified by others, and insistence plays a key role. Doctor who saves the patients in emergency once can not be judged as great, but consideration for the patients from the day he or she becomes the doctor to his or her retirement or even longer would make the doctor praised as a great man.

To sum up, the greatness as an objective and internal quality, no one can determined by their taste but evaluate. Giants who research in abstruse areas are judged by their offspring more than their contemporaries, on the contrary, people's devotions which correlate to the society and social life would be rather easier examined whether great or not. Yet, we can not ignore the surroundings which influence the judgment of us, giants can be recognized in a more democratic circumstance.

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When it comes to that whether the greatness of individuals is decided by their contemporaries or their descendents, some people approve the former while some others believe the latter. （前面这句言之无物，不要养成这样的习惯）However, the fact is that, the greatness is an intrinsic quality of the individuals not decided by others（跟我的腹稿不谋而合）, and the only possibility is that others can evaluate the greatness of individuals subjectively（这个词。。不好说，往下看）. So that, the greatness evaluated by who is owing to the different situations.（模糊，最好在具体些）

To begin with, for professional evaluation（我不是很清楚这个表达什么意思，麻烦解释一下）, the giants are always found by people who live decades later. Reasons can be generalized as follows.（结构清晰，赞一下） First, the science is developing all the time, and the knowledge structure of human beings are more and more solid and improved. Contrasting to the earlier years' science and technology, they are more prosperous nowadays, and some difficulty problems for our ancestors seem like a piece of cake（口语化了不好） for us. For example, we all know that the earth is almost a sphere, but people living 1000 years ago purely believed that the earth is a cube. When Copernicus proposed that the earth was rotating around the sun, no one believed him, and he was sentenced to death for it. However, after years, his theory proved to be true and the fame came back to him. Accumulating all the marrows（好词） of the science historically, people become wiser and wiser to estimate the historic giants（比喻虽好，满篇都用于指代还是有点儿别扭）. Secondly,（这前后两点不太平很哦） the theories are always brought earlier than their applications. People can only evaluate a result through examine its application, and then whether the theory is valuable can be checked. For this reason, time is a key factor for examination, and as a result the great persons' contemporaries can not judge their discoveries or inventions' true wealth.（可能是开头引领得不够，觉得这一段和你的开头不是很一致的感觉，但论证是没有问题的，改一下开头）

Moreover, people living in different eras, feel different societal surroundings, the circumstance influences the judgment of human beings.（像环境这样的词太模糊了Ts一定要让读者清楚自己要说什么，不能似是而非） As the society progressing, the democracy and civilization are enhanced. Many great ancestors who were not to be recognized in their years can be evaluated after them. Take Copernicus again, for he lived in a papalism（强！） society, once his theory was against the papacy's taste, he would never be recognized by the society. But time changed, when the whole society feels that democracy is suitable and merit for development, the chain in people's minds are unlocked, and the former scientific ideas are reexamined. Then we can return the fame to the significant predecessors.（这一段感觉根题目的联系力度不大）

Undeniable, some great people are emerging in their time. For their outstanding contributions are accepted by the society and the populace. Always, the contributions are linking to people's life closely.（着前面的短句有点儿碎了，为了让TS表达更丰富的意思最好不要用） The former prime minister of Israel, Rabin, is such an outstanding people who devoted to improve the relationship of Israel and other Arabian countries especially Palestine. His greatness was recognized by the whole world and he got the Nobel Prize for Peace. Though he died unfortunately, but people in Israel even around the world would keep him in mind.（永垂不朽虽然也是重视那个意思 但是讲了Nobel就可以不说了，省字数，只要语言扣主题了就可以了） People who are easily accessing to take the society and the populace into account are more likely to be identified by others, and insistence plays a key role. Doctor who saves the patients in emergency once can not be judged as great, but consideration for the patients from the day he or she becomes the doctor to his or her retirement or even longer would make the doctor praised as a great man.（有点儿第一段的意思，但个人觉得距离上应该选取那些有很大贡献却无名的人）

To sum up, the greatness as an objective and internal quality, no one can determined by their taste but evaluate. （个人觉得很好的观点，可惜在文章中体现不足）Giants who research in abstruse areas are judged by their offspring more than their contemporaries, on the contrary, people's devotions which correlate to the society and social life would be rather easier examined whether great or not. Yet, we can not ignore the surroundings which influence the judgment of us, giants can be recognized in a more democratic circumstance.（结尾略长，不过还成）