argumennt192 熊熊的练习 互拍！

sebarinaUID：2108158

用pp3写的~正在试图写完~~~~555
每次字数都不少结果总是差一点写完……
没有怎么改~大家看看这样行不行~
互拍留连接~回拍！
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The author advocates that the West Roseville(WR) and Roseville(R) had better to be merged. He or she shows us several reasons--the unmerged confusion, the reduced cost after merge and the benefit brought to business. To support his or her view, the author provides some facts in present conditions and deduces the advantage after merge, and then makes an analogy to illustrate the benefit of merge. However, after carefully examination, we will find there are several flaws in the argument.

To begin with, the author fails to reveal the disadvantages at present, when the two town are seperated. Although the author tells us there may be some residents calls the police in another town, it does not mean they are confused about who they should ask for help. Perhaps, the residents in one town just have conflicts with ones in another town,and that they resort to the police of another town is out of question. If the scenario exists, the author could not convince us the disadvantage of present life.

A second problem is that the author makes a hasty deduction without enough
evidence. He or she indicates that the administrative costs will be saved since the services will no longer be duplicated. However, the author fails to take the population of administrative officers into account. It is true that, the departments of town will be merged to one, but the affairs to deal with will be more than before, which needs more officers and administrative spaces. And this cost will probably not be less than before, even increasing.

A Third problem is that the author makes a false analogy to illustrate the benefit that merge will bring to business. Maybe it is true that the merge of Hamden(H) and North Hamden(NH) brings in investment and money. Yet, the author cannot deduce the same merit will come to WR and R, if there is no comparison between the two situations. Perhaps the merge of H and NH is efficient and the new town develops well, but the merge of WR and R will not attract investment since the poor organization. Without ruling out the possibility, the author could not make his or her analogy grounded.

A final problem involves the author's incomplete consideration. Even if the merge can solve many problems and may bring in a lot of benefit to business, there may be some crucial disadvantages after the merge. It is possible that the merge will cost a lot, leading the government hard to run. And it is also possible that the residents of two towns do not like the merge any more. They may be unfriendly to the other group, which may makes the social conditions in decline. If so, the advocate of merge will be misleading to some extent.

To sum up, the argument is not as warrant as it stands. To better support the argument, the author needs to illustrate the reason more clearly. He or she ought to tell us if not merge, how the conditions of two towns will be in, and provide enough evidence to support the view that the merge will benefit. In addition, the author needs to take the disadvantages into consideration.

purple1228UID：2116196

先占个座~

purple1228UID：2116196

恩， 先统一提一点，合并的名词是merger，这个原文里有提到的啊~
The author advocates that the West Roseville(WR) and Roseville(R) had better to be merged. He or she shows us several reasons--the unmerged confusion, the reduced cost after merge and the benefit brought to business. To support his or her view, the author provides some facts in present conditions and deduces the advantage after merge, and then makes an analogy to illustrate the benefit of merge. However, after carefully examination, we will find there are several flaws in the argument.

To begin with, the author fails to reveal the disadvantages at present, when the two towns are seperated:seperate. Although the author tells us there may be这里不是there be句式吧？看着有点别扭... some residents calls the police in another town, it does not mean they are confused about to who they should ask for help. Perhaps, the residents in one town just have conflicts with ones in another:the other town,and that they resort to the police of another town is out of question. If the scenario exists, the author could not convince us the disadvantage of present life.

A second problem is that the author makes a hasty deduction without enough
evidence. He or she indicates that the administrative costs will be saved since the services will no longer be duplicated. However, the author fails to take the population of administrative officers into account. It is true that, the departments of town will be merged to one, but the affairs to deal with will be more than before, which needs主语到底是什么啊？ more officers and administrative spaces:space. And this cost will probably not be less than before, even increasing.

A Third problem is that the author makes a false analogy to illustrate the benefit that merge will bring to business. Maybe it is true that the merge of Hamden(H) and North Hamden(NH) brings in investment and money我怎么觉得是同义的啊，汗. Yet, the author cannot deduce the same merit will come to WR and R, if there is no comparison光有这个也不够啊 between the two situations. Perhaps the merge of H and NH is efficient and the new town develops well, but the merge of WR and R will not attract investment since the poor organization. Without ruling out the possibility, the author could not make his or her analogy grounded.

A final problem involves the author's incomplete consideration. Even if the merge can solve many problems and may bring in a lot of benefit to business感觉怪怪的, there may be some crucial disadvantages after the merge. It is possible that the merge will cost a lot, leading the government hard to run. And it is also possible that the residents of two towns do not like the merge any more. They may be unfriendly to the other group, which may makes:make the social conditions in decline. If so, the advocate of merge will be misleading to some extent.

To sum up, the argument is not as warrant as it stands. To better support the argument, the author needs to illustrate the reason more clearly. He or she ought to tell us if not merge, how the conditions of two towns will be in, and provide enough evidence to support the view that the merge will benefit. In addition, the author needs to take the disadvantages into consideration.

purple1228UID：2116196

恩，整体的格式还是很好地~
但是句首最好能有多一点变化:lol
对啦，问下sebarina,PP3里怎么保存文章啊？
汗死，不会的说:L

duckyl35UID：201612

The author advocates that the West Roseville(WR) and Roseville(R) had better to？had better do还是had better to do啊？偶手边没有字典，麻烦熊熊告诉偶一下。忘了……:L be merged. He or she shows us several reasons--the unmerged confusion, the reduced cost after mergemerging and the benefit brought to business. To support his or her view, the author provides some facts in present conditions and deduces the advantage after mergemerging, and then makes an analogy to illustrate the benefit of mergemerge是动词吧？:confused:. However, after carefully examination, we will find there are several flaws in the argument.

To begin with, the author fails to reveal the disadvantages at present, when the two towntowns are seperated. Although the author tells us there may be some residents calls the police infrom可能会好一些的！ another town, it does not mean they are confused about who they should ask for help. Perhaps, the residents in one town just have conflicts with ones in another town,and that they resort to the police of another town is out of question. If the scenario exists, the author could not convince us the disadvantage of present life.关于这个错误还有一点就是很有可能打错电话的例子不具代表性，因为很简单的办法就可以解决的，比如贴个告示什么的……是吧？:)

A second problem is that the author makes a hasty deduction without enough
evidence. He or she indicates that the administrative costs will be saved since the services will no longer be duplicated. However, the author fails to take the population of administrative officers into account. It is true that, the departments of town will be merged to one, but the affairs to deal with will be more than before, which needs more officers and administrative spaces. And this cost will probably not be less than before, even increasing.偶俩的想法一样一样一样地……嘎嘎~:handshake

A Third problem is that the author makes a false analogy to illustrate the benefit that mergethe merging of those two towns will bring to business. Maybe it is true that the merge:D of Hamden(H) and North Hamden(NH) brings in investment and money. Yet, the author cannot deduce the same merit will come to WR and R, if there is no comparison between the two situations. Perhaps the merge of H and NH is efficient and the new town develops well, but the merge of WR and R will not attract investment since the poor organization. Without ruling out the possibility, the author could not make his or her analogy grounded.还是那个merge^-^:D

A final problem involves??感觉很怪异…… the author's incomplete consideration. Even if the merge can solve many problems and may bring in a lot of benefit to business, there may be some crucial disadvantages after the merge. It is possible that the merge will cost a lot, leading the government hard to run. And it is also possible that the加个most吧！题目说了还是有一些人想合并的好像…… residents of two towns do not like the merge any more. They may be unfriendly to the other group, which may makes the social conditions in decline. If so, the advocate of merge will be misleading to some extent.

To sum up, the argument is not as warrant as it stands. To better support the argument, the author needs to illustrate the reasonfor merging more clearly. He or she ought to tell us if not merge, how the conditions of two towns will be in, and provide enough evidence to support the view that the merge will benefit. In addition, the author needs to take the disadvantages into consideration.
限时写到这个份儿上已经不错了，偶的那些分析可是想了半天的，在考场上是打死我也想不出来地～:L
熊熊还是很棒地！叫棒棒熊吧～嘎嘎……继续加油嘞！:lol:):handshake

sebarinaUID：2108158

which needs主语到底是什么啊？

前面的句子~~
[例]He came late, which made the dean angry.

sebarinaUID：2108158

comparison光有这个也不够啊

还要写点啥呢？

sebarinaUID：2108158

to purple
其他的接受~~嘿嘿

sebarinaUID：2108158

Originally posted by purple1228 at 2005-8-13 23:08
恩，整体的格式还是很好地~
但是句首最好能有多一点变化:lol
对啦，问下sebarina,PP3里怎么保存文章啊？
汗死，不会的说:L

我也是以血的教训学会的……
你写完了就把下面的section--verbal and q??都quit section,quit,quit...最后会出来个对话框告诉你多少分（这是机考得咚咚）然后点writing好像是~你的文章就看到了~就可以剪切复制了

sebarinaUID：2108158

？had better do还是had better to do啊？偶手边没有字典，麻烦熊熊告诉偶一下。忘了……

这个是没注意~常识呜呜……豆腐拿来要撞

sebarinaUID：2108158

呜呜原来还有好多简单错误……看来不练还是不行~~
谢谢duckly鼓励~熊熊会加油的！

purple1228UID：2116196

Originally posted by sebarina at 2005-8-14 00:21


还要写点啥呢？

要有足够的相似度嘛~

duckyl35UID：201612

大家一起加油嘛！！那个had better……哪位好心人指点一下？
是had better do 还是had better to do?
神智恍惚中……

叮咚UID：202883

是had better to do~~

sebarinaUID：2108158

完了完了~又犯错误了……
当时晕了