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clylizeUID: 150642

208. "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
人们的眼神、穿着和动作都揭示了他们的态度和兴趣。你可以透过观察一个社会中人们的外貌和举止来认识该社会的理念和价值观。
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1 不能以穿着来鉴定人们的态度和兴趣 人们在不同场合穿着是不一样的 比如在家里 运动场 参加婚礼 学习研究 同时一个人穿着是否好坏并不能说明她的兴趣和态度 比如爱因斯坦
2 不同年龄层的人穿着打扮的态度并不一样 不能通过这个还认识社会的理念 比如年轻的小孩 穿的很夸张 但是这个并不代表这个社会开放 另类
3 社会的理念和价值观 表现的形式很多 可以从文化 历史 政治统治 以及媒体 教育等方面去理解 体会 而不是局限于穿着 动作和举止

The author claims that if you want to understand a society’s ideas and values, you can observe the appearance and behavior of its people. Because the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. However, I do not think the view is right.

First, it is no wise that observe people’s attitudes and interests from their dress and action. Usually, people decide what they should wear about the place where they reach. They wear T-shirts and jeans to go shopping, wear sports wears to run and play games, wear business suits to join party and go to work. Whether a person likes his/her job or not, he/she should wear work clothes. So, it is difficulty to judge a person’s attitude from dress. The clothes do not reflect what the people interest in, too. Most people like wear sport wears. However, it does not mean all of them like sport very much. In fact, sport wears are comfortable to wear, and sometimes, they are cheaper than other clothes. Another example is Albert Einstein. Einstein does not care his dress. He often wears a black coat, and does not wear socks and tie. He has a long hair and does not bedeck it. Nevertheless, it can not prove that he is not a famous scientist, and does not interest in physical.

Second, people, who are in different generation, have different attitude about dress. Only through observing the way of people’s dress and act, drawing some conclusions is not reasonable. In China, the old like dress comfortable wears and do not care about fashion. The young like match fashion, and wear individual. Some students like sexy clothes. They like make up themselves as special girls. However, it does not mean China is an open country. In fact, most Chinese are conservative and shy.

Last but not least, Society has a great many paths to express its ideas and values, such as education, art, music, media, law and etc. Children are a country’s future and hope. When they go to school, they would learn what they should do or not, what is their duty, and so on. The books which are used in school are written by famous educators. And the educators have plenty of experiences about explaining the society’s values and ideas to children. Law is a measure about people’s action. It decides what can do or not. It is refer to society’s soul and government’s wish. Media is an important tool of government. Everything that wants to claim in media should get government’s permission. Media makes teleplay, music, and movie with the society’s core. And then, people can learn it from media without any difficulty.

In sum, people’s action, dress and appearance can not give right answer about society’s ideas and values. If a person wants to research the society’s soul, he/she should observe all sides about society, such as history, culture, media, laws and so on.

咯噔UID: 2114564

The author claims that if you want to understand a society’s ideas and values, you can observe the appearance and behavior of its people. Because the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. However, I do not think the view is right.

First, it is no wise that observe people’s attitudes and interests from their dress and action. Usually, people decide what they should wear about（accoding to） the place where they reach(arrive 比较好吧). They wear T-shirts and jeans to go shopping, wear sports wears to run and play games, wear business suits to join party and go to work. Whether a person likes his/her job or not, he/she should wear work clothes. So, it is difficulty to judge a person’s attitude from dress. The clothes do not reflect what the people好像是be interested in interest in, too. Most people like wear sport wears. However, it does not mean all of them like sport very much. In fact, sport wears are comfortable to wear, and sometimes, they are cheaper than other clothes. Another example is Albert Einstein. Einstein does not care his dress. He often wears a black coat, and does not wear socks and tie. He has a long hair and does not bedeck it. Nevertheless, it can not prove that he is not a famous scientist, and does not interest in physical. 我觉得你前一个例子有点重复，说了两边sport cloth and work cloth.而且我觉得你句子有点短。
Second, people, who are in different generation, have different attitude about dress. Only through observing the way of people’s dress and act, drawing some conclusions is not reasonable. In China, the old like dress comfortable wears and do not care about fashion. The young like match fashion, and wear individual. Some students like sexy clothes. They like make up（like doing） themselves as special girls. However, it does not mean China is an open country. In fact, most Chinese are conservative and shy.

Last but not least, Society has a great many paths to express its ideas and values, such as education, art, music, media, law and etc. Children are a country’s future and hope. When they go to school, they would learn what they should do or not, what is their duty, and so on. The books which are used in school are written by famous educators. And the educators have plenty of experiences about explaining the society’s values and ideas to children. Law is a measure about people’s action. It decides what can do or not. It is refer to society’s soul and government’s wish. Media is an important tool of government. Everything that wants to claim in media should get government’s permission. Media makes teleplay, music, and movie with the society’s core. And then, people can learn it from media without any difficulty.

In sum, people’s action, dress and appearance can not give right answer about society’s ideas and values. If a person wants to research the society’s soul, he/she should observe all sides about society, such as history, culture, media, laws and so on.

我觉得有两大毛病，1，句子太短。2，只有驳斥，没有赞成，会不会显得不全3.但我很喜欢你可以把身边小事做例子面？[/color]

lewangUID: 2128469

The author claims that if you want to understand a society’s ideas and values, you can observe the appearance and behavior of its people. Because the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. However, I do not think the view is right.

First, it is no (not) wise that (to) observe/judge people’s attitudes and interests from their dress and action. Usually, people decide what they should wear about the place where they reach. (What people wear is usually decided by where they go.)( For example,信号词啊，不用亏大了)They wear T-shirts and jeans to go shopping, wear sports wears to run and play games, wear business suits to join parties and go to work.（一个主语多个谓语？） Whether a person likes his/her job or not, he/she should wear work clothes. So, it is difficulty to judge a person’s attitude from dress. The clothes do not reflect what the people were interest in, too. Most people like to wear sport wears. However, it does not mean all of them like sport very much. In fact, sport wears are comfortable to wear, and sometimes, they are cheaper than other clothes. Another example is Albert Einstein. Einstein does not care his dress. He often wears a black coat, and does not wear socks and tie. He has a long hair and does not bedeck it. Nevertheless, it can not prove that he is not a famous scientist, and does not interest in physical. (Nevertheless, no one can deny that Einstein is a world famous scientist, although his dress does not show that he was interested in physics. 仅供参考)

Second, people, who are in different generation, have different attitudes about dress. Only through observing the way of people’s dress and act,（the way people dress and act）drawing some conclusions is not reasonable. In China, the old like dress comfortable wears and do not care about fashion. The young like to match fashion, and wear individually. Some students like sexy clothes. They like to (换成prefer 或enjoy 会避免重复) make up themselves as special girls. However, it does not mean China is an open country. In fact, most Chinese are conservative and shy.

Last but not least, society has a great many ways to express its ideas and values, such as education, art, music, media, law and so on.（或直接跟etc..） (妙，观点很好。我咋就没想到呢？) Children are a country’s future and hope. When they go to school, they would learn what they should do or not, what is their duty, and so on. The books, which they use at school, are written by famous educators. And the educators have plenty of experiences about explaining the society’s values and ideas to children. Furthermore, the law is a measure about people’s action. It decides what can do or not. (Laws are such standards that define whether an action can be done or not.) It refers to society’s soul and the government’s wish. Media is an important tool of governments. Everything that wants to claim in media should get government’s permission. Media makes teleplay, music, and movie with the society’s core. And then, people can learn it from media without any difficulty. (Education, law, media 之间的过渡不太自然。Media的部分似乎有些问题，我没读太懂)

In sum, people’s action, dress and appearance can not give a right answer about society’s ideas and values. If a person wants to research the society’s soul, he/she should observe all sides about society, such as history, culture, media, laws and so on.

lewangUID: 2128469

The author claims that if you want to understand a society’s ideas and values, you can observe the appearance and behavior of its people. Because the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. However, I do not think the view is right.

First, it is no (not) wise that (to) observe/judge people’s attitudes and interests from their dress and action. Usually, people decide what they should wear about the place where they reach. (What people wear is usually decided by where they go.)( For example,信号词啊，不用亏大了)They wear T-shirts and jeans to go shopping, wear sports wears to run and play games, wear business suits to join parties and go to work.（一个主语多个谓语？） Whether a person likes his/her job or not, he/she should wear work clothes. So, it is difficulty to judge a person’s attitude from dress. The clothes do not reflect what the people were interest in, too. Most people like to wear sport wears. However, it does not mean all of them like sport very much. In fact, sport wears are comfortable to wear, and sometimes, they are cheaper than other clothes. Another example is Albert Einstein. Einstein does not care his dress. He often wears a black coat, and does not wear socks and tie. He has a long hair and does not bedeck it. Nevertheless, it can not prove that he is not a famous scientist, and does not interest in physical. (Nevertheless, no one can deny that Einstein is a world famous scientist, although his dress does not show that he was interested in physics. 仅供参考)

Second, people, who are in different generation, have different attitudes about dress. Only through observing the way of people’s dress and act,（the way people dress and act）drawing some conclusions is not reasonable. In China, the old like dress comfortable wears and do not care about fashion. The young like to match fashion, and wear individually. Some students like sexy clothes. They like to (换成prefer 或enjoy 会避免重复) make up themselves as special girls. However, it does not mean China is an open country. In fact, most Chinese are conservative and shy.

Last but not least, society has a great many ways to express its ideas and values, such as education, art, music, media, law and so on.（或直接跟etc..） (妙，观点很好。我咋就没想到呢？) Children are a country’s future and hope. When they go to school, they would learn what they should do or not, what is their duty, and so on. The books, which they use at school, are written by famous educators. And the educators have plenty of experiences about explaining the society’s values and ideas to children. Furthermore, the law is a measure about people’s action. It decides what can do or not. (Laws are such standards that define whether an action can be done or not.) It refers to society’s soul and the government’s wish. Media is an important tool of governments. Everything that wants to claim in media should get government’s permission. Media makes teleplay, music, and movie with the society’s core. And then, people can learn it from media without any difficulty. (Education, law, media 之间的过渡不太自然。Media的部分似乎有些问题，我没读太懂)

In sum, people’s action, dress and appearance can not give a right answer about society’s ideas and values. If a person wants to research the society’s soul, he/she should observe all sides about society, such as history, culture, media, laws and so on.

naturalbeauUID: 2112291

The author claims that if you want to understand a society’s ideas and values, you can observe the appearance and behavior of its people. Because the way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. However, I do not think the view is right.

First, it is no wise that （not wise to）observe people’s attitudes and interests from their dress and action. Usually, people decide what they should wear about the place where they reach. They wear T-shirts and jeans to go shopping, wear sports wears to run and play games, (and) wear business suits to join party and go to work. Whether a person likes his/her job or not, he/she should wear work clothes. So, it is difficulty to judge a person’s attitude from dress. The clothes do not reflect what the people interest in, too. Most people like wear sport wears. However, it does not mean all of them like sport very much. In fact, sport wears are comfortable (to wear去掉), and sometimes, they are cheaper than other clothes. Another example is Albert Einstein. Einstein does not care his dress. He often wears a black coat, and does not wear socks and tie. He has a long hair and does not bedeck it. Nevertheless, it can not prove that he is not a famous scientist, and does not interest in physical.
在两个分论点之间可以用点连词，显得层次分明一些。

Second, people, who are in different generation, have different attitude about(toward) dress. Only through observing the way of people’s dress and act, drawing some conclusions is not reasonable. In China, the old(elder person) like dress comfortable wears and do not care about fashion. The young like match fashion, and wear individual. Some students like sexy clothes. They like make up themselves as special girls. However, it does not mean China is an open country. In fact, most Chinese are conservative and shy.
可以多变化点动词，不要一直用like
Last but not least, Society has a great many paths to express its ideas and values, such as education, art, music, media, law and etc. Children are a country’s future and hope. When they go to school, they would learn what they should do or not, what is their duty, and so on. The books which are used in school are written by famous educators. And the educators have plenty of experiences about explaining the society’s values and ideas to children. Law is a measure about people’s action. It decides what can do or not. It is refer to society’s soul and government’s wish. Media is an important tool of government. Everything that wants to claim in media should get government’s permission. Media makes teleplay, music, and movie with the society’s core. And then, people can learn it from media without any difficulty.

In sum, people’s action, dress and appearance can not give right answer about society’s ideas and values. If a person wants to research the society’s soul, he/she should observe all sides about society, such as history, culture, media, laws and so on.
总体来说还是可以的，就是用词尽量丰富一点，语句之间注意衔接。

clylizeUID: 150642

恩 谢谢 各位 我用the old 是和后面的the young 对比起来
词汇是我得弱项 我继续努力弄 谢谢哦