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All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.



Whether such a global university presented above is necessary or not is a heated debate nowadays. As far as I am concerned, all nations should spare no efforts to solve the world's most persistent social problems, but by developing such a university is neither practical nor efficient.

To begin with, building such a university is not practical. For one thing, it would cost us a lot of money, energy and time. Because the university should enroll students all over the world, there would be enough teachers, and translators to meet their requirement. For the other, it is hard to run. In this university, which language should teachers choose in teaching？ Normal colleges would choose their national language, but in this multi-national college it is difficult to correspond. Similarly, different nations' students have diverse customs. For example, Chinese students like to go to bed early while American students are costumed to sleep late in the night, so if the two nations' students live in the same room, how could they harmonize? As the old saying goes: when in Rome, do as a Rome man do. But in this university, students should do like whom?

As it is not practical to build such a university, why the opinion presented in the issue is popular? What are their reasons? Some would state that in such a university, it provides an opportunity for different nations’ students to communicate, because these nations may be not friendly and even hostile. Others claim that people from different nations can cooperate closely, so as to exert their advantages. However, their claim itself has some fallacy. If the global university can help solve the world's most persistent social problems and it can be built and run economically, why not build two or three such universities rather than one? As it is accepted by most people, the more such excellent students, the more problems are solved. In fact, these reasons could not support their opinion.

Instead of building such a university, hostile nations, as it is, could solve the communication problems in many other ways. For example, after World War Two, Chinese and Japanese began to communicate, so Beijing University appointed some excellent students to study in Japanese universities. As in return, some Japanese students were voluntary to go to China for studying. Through these students the two originally hostile nations can understand each other better, and the misapprehension can be diminished. In fact, it is an effective way to solve such social problems between nations, and usually more efficiently and economically.

Furthermore, with the help of the new technology like the internet and instant communication, people can hear of and learn about the events which happen thousands of miles away. Therefore cooperation does not require coming to the same place and seeing each other face to face. Basing on the existing universities to communicate is a good choice for nations. After all, a bird in hand is better than two in the wood.

In the course of human events, there are numerous social problems needed to deal with. All nations should try their best to tackle those problems. However, building such an university is neither practical nor economical, so nations should take other methods into account, and find the most efficient way to solve these problems.

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Whether such a global university presented above is necessary or not前面有whether了，不如去掉or not简洁 is a heated debate nowadays. As far as I am concerned, all nations should spare no efforts to solve the world's most persistent social problems, but by developing such a university is neither practical nor efficient. 这句结构上似乎有问题，by developing such a university好像不能做主语。能否改为…However, developing such a university is neither practical nor efficient.

To begin with, building such a university is not practical. For one thing, it would cost us a lot of money, energy and time. Because the university should enroll students all over the world, there would be enough teachers, and translators to meet their requirement. For the other, it is hard to run. In this university, which language should teachers choose in teaching？ Normal colleges would choose their nationalnative language, but in this multi-national college it is difficult to correspond. Similarly, different nations' students have diverse customs. For example, Chinese students like to go to bed early while American students are costumedbe used to to sleep late in the night, so if the two nations' students live in the same room, how could they harmonize? As这里语法不对了，主谓语没有了，把as去掉 the old saying goes: when in Rome, do as a Rome man do. But in this university, students should do like whom?

As it is not practical to build such a university, why the opinion presented in the issue is popular? What are their reasons? Some would state that in such a university, it provides an opportunity for different nations’ students to communicate, because these nations may be not friendly and even hostile. Others claim that people from different nations can cooperate closely, so as to exert their advantages. However, their claim itself has some fallacyfallacies. If the global university can help solve the world's most persistent social problems and it can be built and run economically, why not build two or three such universities rather than one? As it is accepted by most people, the more such excellent students, the more problems are solved. In fact, these reasons could not support their opinion. 这段话提点意见，一是最好开头加一段TS，不然段落中的However，让人感觉不知道这段的重点是什么，开头即说明一下这段是指出支持者的意见的错误会好一些。二是文中太多的问句，感觉不是很妥，Issue最关键的应该还是对论点的阐述。感叹句、问句用多了，是不是会削弱论证的力度？一点个人意见。

Instead of building such a university, hostile nations, as it is, could solve the communication problems in many other ways. For example, after World War Two, Chinese and Japanese began to communicate, so Beijing University appointed some excellent students to study in Japanese universities. As in return, some Japanese students were voluntary to go to China for studying. Through these students the two originally hostile nations can understand each other better, and the misapprehension can be diminished. In fact, it is an effective way to solve such social problems between nations, and usually more efficiently and economically.

Furthermore, with the help of the new technology like the internet and instant communication, people can hear of and learn about the events which happen thousands of miles away. Therefore cooperation does not require coming to the same place and seeing each other face to face. Basing on the existing universities to communicate is a good choice for nations. After all, a bird in hand is better than two in the wood. 这一段和上一段阐述的是一样的观点，都是其他的解决方法，不如写成一段

In the course of human events, there are numerous social problems needed to deal with. All nations should try their best to tackle those problems. However, building such an university is neither practical nor economical, so nations should take other methods into account, and find the most efficient way to solve these problems.

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Whether such a global university presented above is necessary or not is a heated debate nowadays. As far as I am concerned, all nations should spare no efforts to solve the world's most persistent social problems,没有转折吧 but by developing such a university is neither practical nor efficient在什么方面有效率呢.

To begin with, building such a university is not practical. For one thing, it would cost us a lot of money, energy and time. Because the university should enroll students all over the world, there would be enough teachers, and translators to meet their requirement. For the other, it is hard to run说的不够具体，在哪些方面最好大概说一下. In this university, which language should teachers choose in teaching？ Normal colleges would choose their national language, but in this multi-national college it is difficult to correspond. Similarly, different nations' students have diverse customs. For example, Chinese students like to go to bed early while American students are costumed to sleep late in the night, so if the two nations' students live in the same room, how could they harmonize?这个例子不够地典型 As the old saying goes: when in Rome, do as a Rome man do. But in this university, students should do like whom?

As it is not practical to build such a university, why the opinion presented in the issue is popular? What are their reasons前面有why了啊? Some would state that in such a university, it provides an opportunity for different nations’ students to communicate, 好象没有因果关系吧because these nations may be not friendly and even hostile. Others claim that people from different nations can cooperate closely, so as to exert their advantages. However, their claim itself has some fallacy. If the global university can help solve the world's most persistent social problems and it can be built and run economically, why not build two or three such universities rather than one这里有点死扣字眼了。。。题目的意思并没有强调one只是泛指的? As it is accepted by most people, the more such excellent students, the more problems are solved. In fact, these reasons could not support their opinion.

Instead of building such a university, hostile nations, as it复数 is, could solve the communication problems in many other ways. For example, after World War Two, Chinese and Japanese began to communicate, so Beijing University appointed some excellent students to study in Japanese universities. As in return, some Japanese students were voluntary to go to China for studying. Through these students the two originally hostile nations can understand each other better, and the misapprehension can be diminished. In fact, it is an effective way to solve such social problems between nations, and usually more efficiently and economically. 我的理解global university并不是一个实体，而是一个国际大学交流和学习的平台，这样互相交流学生也可以称做global university

Furthermore, with the help of the new technology like the internet and instant communication, people can hear of and learn about the events which happen thousands of miles away. Therefore cooperation does not require coming to the same place and seeing each other face to face. Basing on the existing universities to communicate is a good choice for nations. After all, a bird in hand is better than two in the wood.提出解决的方法最好不要用主要的篇幅去写，首先要让你的观点convincing，这才是最重要的。

In the course of human events, there are numerous social problems needed to deal with. All nations should try their best to tackle those problems. However, building such an university is neither practical nor economical, so nations should take other methods into account, and find the most efficient way to solve these problems.


开头你说practical nor efficient不过一直没有看到有关效率的段落，这就不够呼应了，而且看起来文章也不是那么有说服力了。。

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