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foreveraUID：202035

11. "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."


1．        首先给global university准确的定义：a platform of communication
2．        根据定义global university的建立很必要，原因如下：
（1）        global university能够促进国际交流，
（2）         global university能够充分利用学术资源
3．        尽管global university的作用不止于解决世界上最重要的社会问题。


Do all governments have the accountability to fund the development of a global university? And should global universities designed to solve the most persistent social problems of the world? Facing these complex issues, any extreme responses would be improper. And as far as I am concerned, global universities do contribute much to the society and the world, not limited to solving social problems. Therefore, the governments should allocate extra budget to fund the development of global universities.

To begin with, global university needs a clear definition to extent this issue. Generally, global university is a platform for communications in the both fields of academy and society. It is made up of numerous universities of traditional sense, rather than a singer university or college world famous. In other word, to this extent, global university is an educational and communicating system. And further the system has efficient arrangement-every university has its own function in the system and the element of the system cooperates with others.

Accordingly to this definition of global university, it is quite necessary and recommended that all nations should support the development of global university. And the reasons for this lie in two aspects as follows.

First and foremost, the development of global university is able to enhance communications between countries. On one hand, in the realm of social subject, such as world economy, international relationship, and politics, the foundation of global university engage an increasing number of preeminent professors to analysis and deal with the most serious social problems that great amounts of countries are suffering from. Taking the economic storm happened in Southeast Asia, professors from diverse regions made many valuable suggestions and possible predictions about the event. Due to the cooperation of the economist, the damage the storm caused was reduced to the lowest level. On the hand, in the realm of natural sciences, in the process of researching some complex subjects, the mind of a small group is always limited, and possibly misses the key point to find solution of the very subject. Under this circumstance, advices from others sometimes enlighten the trapped scholars.  

What’s more, the system of global system is able to apply the academic resource most efficiently. As many giant scientific researching projects can not be dealt by a singer country, in this sense, to split the project into pieces and to allocate the pieces to different country is the best solution. And the method of splitting and allocating is made in accordance with scientific analysis. For instance, the human genome project is too complicated to leave solo to any country, so the better developed and developing countries cooperate on the significant project. According to the development of biology, different country receives their duty of interpreting human genome. And then, the genetic code is connected.

Admittedly, global university is not designed to engage the students to solve most significant social problems in the world only. The founder of global university should not neglect the basic function of university-to impart the students with skills, knowledge and a good manner. Therefore, under this circumstance, the founders have the responsibility to balance the two aspect of demand.

To sum up, as for the benefit global university can bring to the society and the natural world, which is far more than solving social problems of the world, all nations should support the development of global university as much as possible.

modeuxUID：2107416

Do all governments have the accountability to fund the development of a global university? And should global universities 加个be吧，不然整句变成global university一个主语 designed to solve the most persistent social problems of the world? Facing these complex issues, any extreme responses would be improper. And as far as I am concerned, global universities do 还没有建呢，用could或者will可能好一些吧contribute much to the society and the world, not limited to solving social problems. Therefore, the governments should allocate extra 和上次一样，印象中extra作形容词是额外的意思，做副词表示“非常地” budget to fund the development of global universities.

To begin with, global university needs a clear definition to extent this issue. Generally, global university is a platform for communications in the both fields of academy and society. It is made up of numerous universities of traditional sense, rather than a singer university or college world famous. In other word, to this extent, global university is an educational and communicating system. And further the system has efficient arrangement-every university has its own function in the system and the element of the system cooperates with others. 这一段定义写得好的，先给题目中涉及到的概念下个定义，再开始论证，值得大家学习。

Accordingly to this definition of global university of global university去掉吧，读起来冗余了些, it is quite necessary and recommended that all nations should support the development of global university. And the reasons for this lie in two aspects as follows.

First and foremost, the development of global university is able to enhance communications between countries. On one hand, in the realm of social subject, such as world economy, international relationship, and politics, the foundation of global university engage engages an increasing number of preeminent professors to analysis and deal with the most serious social problems that great amounts of countries are suffering from. Taking the economic storm happened in Southeast Asia for example丢了~~~, professors from diverse regions made many valuable suggestions and possible predictions about the event. Due to the cooperation of the economist, the damage the storm caused 读起来不太顺，改成the damage cause by the storm好些 was reduced to the lowest level. On the hand, in the realm of natural sciences, in the process of researching some complex subjects, the mind of a small group is always limited, and possibly misses the key point to find solution of the very subject. Under this circumstance, advices from others sometimes 说有时候似乎削弱了论证的力量，不如换个语气强烈一点的词,always，是不是又太绝对了？楼主自己斟酌吧 enlighten the trapped scholars.  

What’s more, the system of global system is able to apply apply是应用，用来表达利用资源不太准，utilize？ the academic resource most efficiently. As many giant scientific researching projects can not be dealt dealt with by a singer country, in this sense, to split the project into pieces and to to去掉 allocate the pieces to different country is the best solution. And the method of splitting and allocating is made in accordance with scientific analysis. For instance, the human genome project is too complicated to leave solo to any country, so the better developed and developing countries cooperate on the significant project. According to the development of biology, different country 这里主谓不一致，前面用单数，后面又用到their了 receives their duty of interpreting human genome. And then, the genetic code is connected. 这段感觉TS不是很准，论述的内容是把复杂问题分工细化，合作解决。TS说的是充分利用学术资源，咋一看资源还以为是说图书馆之类的信息资源。不如说充分利用学术力量准些。楼主斟酌

Admittedly, global university is not designed to engage the students to solve most significant social problems in the world only. The founder of global university should not neglect the basic function of university-to impart the students with with有点多余 skills, knowledge and a good manner. Therefore, under this circumstance, the founders have the responsibility to balance the two aspect of demand.

To sum up, as for the benefit global university can bring to the society and the natural world, which is far more than solving social problems of the world, all nations should support the development of global university as much as possible.

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请教LZ
是否文章中的让步段都是必要的，我个人感觉看多了大家写的都是很注重大正里含个小负的这种写法的，可是我写的，唉，大家也看了，总喜欢，间接的说其他的，这是不是一个严重的问题？最近受此困扰严重，快崩溃了，我的破题问题很严重！
这一篇就跑题得没谱了，辜负了LZ之前的教导啊：
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=326610&page=1

不过LZ这篇里的让步段，说实话啊，其实没啥内容，跟前文也不搭，没有构成必要的逻辑上的转折或补充的关系，我认为。

另外，LZ的开头的模式很好哦，果然是写得多，有了自己的好模板啊！

mahuUID：179508

Do all governments have the accountability to fund the development of a global university? And should global universities designed to solve the most persistent social problems of the world? Facing these complex issues, any extreme responses would be improper. (这个开头很不错)And as far as I am concerned, global universities do contribute much to the society and the world, not limited to solving social problems. Therefore, the governments should allocate extra budget to fund the development of global universities.  

To begin with, global university needs a clear definition to extent this issue. Generally, global university is a platform for communications in the both fields of academy and society. It is made up of numerous universities of traditional sense, rather than a singer university or college world famous. In other word, to this extent, global university is an educational and communicating system. And further the system has efficient arrangement-every university has its own function in the system and the element of the system cooperates with others. 个人感觉，这样写非常好，本人也很想在论述之前，阐述一下题干中关键词的定义，但是发现很难写，很想和lz交流一下！
Accordingly to this definition of global university, it is quite necessary and recommended that all nations should support the development of global university. And the reasons for this lie in two aspects as follows.（把这一段可以并到上一段去，这样中间段4段刚刚好，否则显的这一段有点唐突）
First and foremost, the development of global university is able to enhance communications between countries. On one hand, in the realm of social subject, such as world economy, international relationship, and politics, the foundation of global university engage an increasing number of preeminent professors to analysis and deal with the most serious social problems that great amounts of countries are suffering from. Taking the economic storm happened in Southeast Asia, professors from diverse regions made many valuable suggestions and possible predictions about the event. Due to the cooperation of the economist, the damage the storm caused was reduced to the lowest level. On the (other) hand, in the realm of natural sciences, in the process of researching some complex subjects, the mind of a small group is always limited, and possibly misses the key point to find solution of the very subject. Under this circumstance, advices from others sometimes enlighten the trapped scholars.  

What’s more, the system of global system (连续两个system, 是不是换成education) is able to apply the academic resource most efficiently. As many giant scientific researching projects can not be dealt by a singer country, in this sense, to split the project into pieces and to allocate the pieces to different country is the best solution. And the method of splitting and allocating is made in accordance with scientific analysis.(这段论述很好，split….into pieces  and allocate, 几个动词用的很到位，很值得参考，赞！) For instance, the human genome project is too complicated to leave solo (solely) to any country, so the better developed and developing countries cooperate on the significant project. According to the development of biology, different country receives their duty of interpreting human genome. And then, the genetic code is connected.

Admittedly, global university is not designed to engage the students to solve most significant social problems in the world only  (感觉把这个only能放到design前就好了，你的意思是不只是global problem一个问题). The founder of global university should not neglect the basic function of university-to impart the students with skills, knowledge and a good manner. Therefore, under this circumstance, the founders have the responsibility to balance the two aspect of demand.

To sum up, as for the benefit global university can bring to the society and the natural world, which is far more than solving social problems of the world, all nations should support the development of global university as much as possible.  结尾可以写的更厚实一点，而且个人感觉把你在结尾中所说的两种优点并列起来，都是同样重要的比较好
Lz的例子举得不错，TS写的很好。

帮忙看一下我ISSUE11的啊
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cxlbread84UID：184012

Do all governments have the accountability to fund the development of a global university? And should global universities designed to solve the most persistent social problems of the world? Facing these complex issues, any extreme responses would be improper. And as far as I am concerned, global universities do contribute much to the society and the world, not limited to (not only in the facet of) solving social problems. Therefore, the governments should allocate extra budget to fund the development of global universities.

To begin with, global university needs a clear definition to extent （extend or develop） this issue. Generally, global university is a platform for communications in the both fields of academy and society. It is made up of numerous universities of traditional sense, rather than a singer university or college world famous ( a single world famous university or college). In other word, to this extent, (a) global university is an educational and communicating system. And further (Further, 更简洁) the system has efficient arrangement-every university has its own function in the system and the element of the system cooperates with others. （最后一句更像是说global university 的好处，是否放在下面？ 个人意见），传统意义上的大学，这好像是中文表达， 用traditional universities 就可以了吧
Accordingly to this definition of global university, it is quite necessary and recommended that all nations should support the development of global university. And the reasons for this lie in two aspects as follows.

First and foremost, the development of global university is able to enhance communications between countries. On one hand, in the realm of social subject, such as world economy, international relationship, and politics, the foundation of global university engage an increasing number of preeminent professors to analysis and deal with the most serious social problems that great amounts of countries are suffering from. Taking the economic storm happened in Southeast Asia, professors from diverse regions made many valuable suggestions and possible predictions about the event. Due to the cooperation of the economist, the damage the storm caused was reduced to the lowest level. On the （other）hand, in the realm of natural sciences, in the process of researching some complex subjects, the mind of a small group is always limited, and possibly misses the key point to find solution of the very subject. Under this circumstance, advices from others sometimes enlighten the trapped scholars.  

What’s more, the system of global system is able to apply the academic resource most efficiently. As many giant scientific researching projects can not be dealt by a singer country, in this sense, to split the project into pieces and to allocate the pieces to different country is the best solution. And the method of splitting and allocating is made in accordance with scientific analysis. For instance, the human genome project is too complicated to leave solo to any country, so the better developed and developing countries cooperate on the significant project. According to the development of biology, different country receives their duty of interpreting human genome. And then, the genetic code is connected.

Admittedly, global university is not designed to engage the students to solve most significant social problems in the world only. The founder of global university should not neglect the basic function of university-to impart the students with skills, knowledge and a good manner. Therefore, under this circumstance, the founders have the responsibility to balance the two aspect of demand. （impart sth to sb） 另外，这里用Admittedly 不大好吧，不像是让步啊， 更像是讨论另一个方面

To sum up, as for the benefit global university can bring to the society and the natural world, which is far more than solving social problems of the world, all nations should support the development of global university as much as possible.

cxlbread84UID：184012

上面我已经改了你的全文
另外，这是我对你两段的不同意见，感觉这样更连贯

To begin with, a global university needs a clear definition to develop this issue. Generally, global university is a platform for communications in the both fields of academy and society. It is made up of numerous universities of traditional sense, rather than a single world famous university or college. To this extent, a global university is an educational and communicating system in which its elements, the traditional colleges, function efficiently. Accordingly to this definition of global university, it is quite necessary and recommended that all nations should support the development of global university. And the reasons for this lie in two aspects as follows.

However, a global university is not only designed to engage the students to solve most significant social problems in the world, but also to impart skills, knowledge and a good manner to its students. The founders should not neglect the latter function of this university because it is the basic function of all colleges. In this point, founders should balance them.

foreveraUID：202035

多谢各位。。。~~

gzj123UID：192680

我觉得大哥的issue已经完全可以了(如果是限时的话)
但agument和issue比起来就...
agument是中国人的提粉利器哦!

foreveraUID：202035

啊狗？？你给我改的完全的看不懂。。。。