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"There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
“有两种法律，公正的与不公正的。置身于社会中的每个个人都有责任去遵守公正的法律，甚至更重要的是，去拒不服从并抵制不公正的法律。”

写作提纲：
开头，支持题目的观点。
二段，论证题目观点前半截的重要性，为什么人人要守法。
三段，论证由于什么事物都是在变化的，所以旧法不能再代表公正时，就要灭掉他。举商鞅的例子来佐证。
结尾，终于完了！

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Law is the quintessence of human rationalness, is the most essential principal of human society, is the light leading human to bright future. Without law, human society would like animal world being fraught with blood and cruelty. Without law, human society would backslide to the black time when stronger humiliating weaker and up-class exploiting down-class as human society used to be. So being a man, it is need to obey just laws, and even importantly, to improve unjust laws.

The just laws ensure the order of the society and powerfully control human behavior. But, on the other hand, the laws were so easily to be trampled. Everyday everybody has the time that it is to break the law or to satisfy his own desire. If we all choose the latter, it would bring transient pleasure, but in a long time, it would erode the foundation of the society and lead it to corrupt.  So every individual in the society has a responsibility obey just laws.

However, nothing keeps intact forever. Sometime we need break laws, especially when we found the laws cannot keep up with the pace of progressing of society or manifest the justice any longer. To some extent, this point is more important. For example, ShangYang a great innovator of china  living in more than 2000 years ago, he claimed bravely that the king must be punished when he breaks the law as ordinary people. The new law is so earthshaking, because the king was taken into the position up the law as the old law describing. ShangYang believes the old law is unjust, so he disobeys it, crashes it, and institutes a new just law to replace it. As the post history telling us, his new law influences on the progressing of china society profoundly.

Above all, we need obey just laws and resist unjust laws. Only we keeping this concept in our mind, our society would get interminate impetus to evolve to aboveboard future.

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[ Last edited by yunziluo on 2005-12-22 at 11:42 ]

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写作提纲：
开头，支持题目的观点。
二段，论证题目观点前半截的重要性，为什么人人要守法。
三段，论证由于什么事物都是在变化的，所以旧法不能再代表公正时，就要灭掉他。举商鞅的例子来佐证。
结尾，终于完了！[我先来晕一下你的提纲 :D]

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Law is the quintessence of human rationalness[好像没这个词哦 rationality?你是不是要说理性？查了一下好像是logos ], is[去掉is 宾语并列就好了] the most essential principal[principle] of human society, is[is改成and] the light leading human to [a] bright future. Without law, human society would like animal world being fraught with blood and cruelty. Without law, human society would backslide to the black time when stronger humiliating weaker and up-class exploiting down-class as human society used to be. [这段写的太煽情了吧 不大合适好像 尤其和你的主要观点没太大关系哦 可以适当简练]So being a man, it is need to obey just laws, and even importantly, to improve unjust laws.

The just laws ensure the order of the society and powerfully control human behavior. But, on the other hand, the laws were so easily to be trampled. Everyday everybody has the time that it is to break the law or to satisfy his own desire. [晕 没这么严重吧  而且这句话还有语法问题哦]If we all choose the latter, it would bring transient pleasure, but in a long time[for the long run], it would erode the foundation of the society and lead it to corrupt[corruption,lead to后面接名词].  So every individual in the society has a[the] responsibility obey just laws.

However, nothing keeps intact[不懂 什么意思这句话？] forever. Sometime[-s] we need [to] break laws, especially when we found [find] the laws cannot keep up with the pace of progressing of society or manifest the justice any longer. To some extent, this point is more important. For example, ShangYang [这里加逗号] a great innovator of china  living in more than 2000 years ago, he[去掉he] claimed bravely that the king must be punished when he breaks[broke] the law [as ordinary people这个放在be punished后面]. The new law is so earthshaking, because the king was taken into the position up the law as the old law describing.[可以说because the king had the power above the law as the old law described.] ShangYang believes[believed] the old law is[was] unjust, so he disobeys[时态！！] it, crashes it, and institutes a new just law to replace it. As the post[什么意思？] history telling[tells] us, his new law influences on[去掉on,及物的] the progressing[progress] of china society profoundly.

Above all, we need [to] obey just laws and resist unjust laws. Only we keeping this concept in our mind, our society would get interminate impetus to evolve to aboveboard future.
[Only by keeping this principle in our mind can our society gain impetus to develop a aboveboard(觉得这个词也不是很恰当:() future.]

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虽然倍受打击(自准备作文开始以来一直是这样),不过真的很感谢!!!

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