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【题目】argument140（总频率33）
140.The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University. "During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

【翻译】
在Thomas教授作为植物学教授的17年里，她证明了自己确实是值50000元年薪的。她的班级是本校最大的班级之一，这说明她在学生中间的受欢迎度。而且，她给学校带来的研究捐助在过去两年中都超过了她的年薪。因此，鉴于Thomas教授已被证实的教学和研究能力，我们建议将她的年薪增加10000元，并提升为系主任；如果没有这些加薪和提升，我们担心Thomas教授将会离开Elm City大学到别的学校就职。

写作提纲：
1、简述题目中的观点和论据。
2、作者没有任何证据表明Professor Thomas在教学和研究上的业绩就断定她是值得她的工资的，是不可信的。
3、仅仅因为Professor Thomas的课大就断定她受欢迎是无理的。很有可能是必修课，很有可能迟到，早退现象频繁。
4、因为Professor Thomas带来了捐赠就认为应该加薪是没理由的，也许别的教授也带来了加薪，也许她不再能带来捐赠。
5、声称不给Professor Thomas加薪，他就会离开学校是妄断。也许本校学术氛围好，而且她在此工作17年了。
6、要升Professor Thomas为主人无理由，一个好老师不一定能当好主任。


                                  正文

In the argument, the author recommends that Elm City University(ECU) should raise a 10,000 dollars to professor's and promote her to Department Chairperson. To support the recommendation, the author provides some evidences. However, several fallacies involve in the argument.

First of all, the author's assumption that Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000 is unsubstantiated. Since the author fails to provide any evidences of the records of the researching and teaching attainments of Professor Thomas to support the assumption, it is unfair to conclude that raise and promotion are necessary.

In the second place, the author provides the evidence that Professor Thomas 's class is the one of the largest classes in the university to indicate her popularity among students. However, the author provides no evidence that this is the case. It is entirely possible that her classes is necessary class that students must take. It is also possible that despite of the largest class, students are often late and leave early for her boring lecture. The author fails to rules out these possibilities, so he can not convince me that Professor Thomas is popular in the students.

Thirdly, based the fact that Professor Thomas has brought research grants exceeding her salary to university in each past tow years, the author recommends raise and promotion to her. However, the evidence is insufficient to support the conclusion. since it is not sure that Professor Thomas will continue to bring donates to university. Meanwhile, it is also possible that other professors  in the same department with Professor Thomas have brought the same even more donates to university. Thus, in either event , the author’s recommendation is unwarranted.

Fourthly, the author predicts that if Professor does not receive raise and promotion, she would leave the ECU for another college. However, it is the author's intention not Professor Thomas'. Since there is no evidence to indicate that Professor Thomas has the idea of leaving ECU where she has been working seventeen years. Moreover, raise and promotion are not the only reasons to determine leaving or not for a professor. Perhaps ECU has good academe which Professor Thomas thinks very important. Without deeply investigating, the author’s prediction is assertive.

Additionally, even if Professor Thomas is indeed excellent in academic field and teaching job, it is not a wise decision to promote her to Department Chairperson. Common sense tell us, being a good teacher and a good department chairperson is not the same thing. Perhaps Professor Thomas is lack the ability of management and sociability, so she is not competent for the Department Chairperson.

Above all, the argument is fraught with vague evidences and misleading assumptions. To convince us, the author need provides more reliable evidence.

[ Last edited by 11yaoyao on 2005-12-23 at 23:24 ]

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写作提纲：
1、简述题目中的观点和论据。
2、作者没有任何证据表明Professor Thomas在教学和研究上的业绩就断定她是值得她的工资的，是不可信的。
3、仅仅因为Professor Thomas的课大就断定她受欢迎是无理的。很有可能是必修课，很有可能迟到，早退现象频繁。
4、因为Professor Thomas带来了捐赠就认为应该加薪是没理由的，也许别的教授也带来了加薪，也许她不再能带来捐赠。
5、声称不给Professor Thomas加薪，他就会离开学校是妄断。也许本校学术氛围好，而且她在此工作17年了。
6、要升Professor Thomas为主人无理由，一个好老师不一定能当好主任。


                                  正文

In the argument, the author recommends that Elm City University(ECU) should raise a 10,000 dollars to professor's and promote her to Department Chairperson. To support the recommendation, the author provides some evidences. However, several fallacies involve in the argument.

First of all, the author's assumption that Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000 is unsubstantiated. Since the author fails to provide any evidences of the records of the researching and teaching attainments of Professor Thomas to support the assumption, it is unfair to conclude that raise and promotion are necessary.（这句话怎么好像不太通顺哦，你再看看:)）

In the second place, the author provides the evidence that Professor Thomas 's class is the one of the largest classes in the university to indicate her popularity among students. However, the author provides no evidence that this is the case（to support this case这样不知道是不是好一点:)）. It is entirely possible that her classes is necessary class that students must take. It is also possible that despite of the largest class, students are often late and leave early for her boring lecture. The author fails to rules out these possibilities, so he can not convince me that Professor Thomas is popular in the students.

Thirdly, based the fact that Professor Thomas has brought research grants exceeding her salary to university in each past tow years, the author recommends raise and promotion to her（句子成分是不是不太对啊，你在看看哦:)）. However, the evidence is insufficient to support the conclusion. since it is not sure that Professor Thomas will continue to bring donates （我个人觉得这里应该指代科研经费，不知道是不是自己理解错了）to university. Meanwhile, it is also possible that other professors  in the same department with Professor Thomas have brought the same even more donates to university. Thus, in either event , the author’s recommendation is unwarranted.

Fourthly, the author predicts that if Professor does not receive raise and promotion, she would leave the ECU for another college. However, it is the author's intention not Professor Thomas'. Since there is no evidence to indicate that Professor Thomas has the idea of leaving ECU where she has been working seventeen years. Moreover, raise and promotion are not the only reasons to determine leaving or not for a professor. Perhaps ECU has good academe which Professor Thomas thinks very important（这个定语从句好像写的不太好:)）. Without deeply investigating, the author’s prediction is assertive.

Additionally, even if Professor Thomas is indeed excellent in academic field and teaching job, it is not a wise decision to promote her to Department Chairperson. Common sense tell us, being a good teacher and a good department chairperson is not the same thing. Perhaps Professor Thomas is lack the ability of management and sociability, so she is not competent for the Department Chairperson.

Above all, the argument is fraught with vague evidences and misleading assumptions. To convince us, the author need provides more reliable evidence.
1.其实文章写的还是蛮不错的，面挺广的
2.有一个小建议，就是2－5段开头的时候，如果用同一类连接词是不是会更好，比如说first，secondly......
3.写的不错，加油吧！:victory:

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First of all, the author's assumption that Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000 is unsubstantiated. Since the author fails to provide any evidences of the records of the researching and teaching attainments of Professor Thomas to support the assumption 貌似是重复, it is unfair to conclude that raise and promotion are necessary.

In the second place, the author provides the evidence that Professor Thomas 's class is the one of the largest classes in the university to indicate her popularity among students. However, the author provides no evidence that this is the case. It is entirely possible that her classes is necessary 换个词试试，比如the very class that students must take. It is also possible it is possible用的好多，两句还都挨着，换一下，可以说there is the possibility什么的，当然这个说法不见得好，不过能有diversification可能会好一点吧 that despite of the largest class, students are often late and leave early for 这里用BECAUSE OF更明白一些 her boring lecture. The author fails to rules out these possibilities 同义词替换，比如可以用the odds, probability…, so he can not convince me that Professor Thomas is popular in AMONG the THE多余，the这个词是小词，但是很难用，不妨查下语法书或者字典，弄清楚比较好 students.

Thirdly, based on the fact that Professor Thomas has brought research grants exceeding her salary to university in each past tow spelling years, the author recommends raise and promotion to her. However, the evidence is insufficient to support the conclusion. since 如果是小写，是不是应该是逗号？ it is not sure that Professor Thomas will continue to bring donates to university. Meanwhile, it is also possible that other professors  in the same department with Professor Thomas have brought the same even more donates 这句话没懂哦，楼主想说什么？ to university. Thus, in either event, the author’s recommendation is unwarranted.

Fourthly, the author predicts that if Professor does not receive receive的宾语不能是raise和promotion哦 raise and promotion, she would leave the ECU for another college. However, it is the author's intention not Professor Thomas'. Since there is no evidence to indicate that Professor Thomas has the idea of leaving ECU where she has been working seventeen years. Moreover, raise and promotion are not the only reasons 貌似可以用单数，我们可以再讨论 to determine leaving or not for a professor. Perhaps ECU has good academe which Professor Thomas thinks very important. Without deeply investigating, the author’s prediction is assertive.

Additionally, even if Professor Thomas is indeed excellent in academic field and teaching job teaching job是要说什么，教育工作么？SIGH，这样也太直白了，又是 MOT A MOT的翻译，不对哦，楼主再查一下，其实是很简单的说法, it is not a wise decision to promote her to 查一下PROMOTE的用法吧 Department Chairperson. Common sense tell 单数 us, being a good teacher and a good department chairperson is not the same thing. Perhaps Professor Thomas is lack LACK这个词，10个人用9个错，楼主查字典吧，这个词多数做补足语或者状语的the ability of management and sociability, so she is not competent for the Department Chairperson.

Above all, the argument is fraught with vague evidences and misleading assumptions. To convince us, the author need provides more reliable evidence
结尾……太简单啦，总结，提出办法，或者以前有这样的例子，总结，然后把错误类型列出来，或者还有……详细情况查阅精华区的分析，有的是啊……
可能说话会比较直接，不当之处多多包涵，继续加油！