argument140 GOGOGO小组 交作业了!!

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The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
'During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college.'

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提纲:
1.没有提到教授有不满,有意向去其它学校,属于作者的猜想
2.课堂大不能说明受欢迎;也没有相应学生的民意调查
3.学术好不一点适合管理,可能毁了一个教授啊

The arguer recommends that we should raise the salary of Professor Thomas and give her promotion to Department Chairperson; otherwise she would leave Elm City University for another college because we ignore her perfect teaching and research abilities. It seems to be sound and convincing at first glance. However, a further analysis would reveal that the argument commits several fallacies.

In the first place, the arguer claims that without such a raise and promotion, Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University. But he does not show us that Professor Thomas has an interest in other universities or is discontent with her salary and position. So, we could not see the possibility that Professor Thomas has a desire to leave for another college. The arguer draws his conclusion from a wrong assumption.

Secondly, the arguer fails to provide strong evidences to demonstrate that Professor Thomas has a perfect teaching and researching abilities in his argument. The merely fact that her classes are among the largest classes at the university does not follow her good ability in teaching. Maybe her course is required to attend; hence it does not have any connection with her popularity. Also, the arguer failed to provide any information about whether the students in her class are satisfied with her teaching or not. If the students are required to choose her classes and not satisfy with her teaching, it would very hard to convince us that she is popular among students.

Thirdly, the arguer believes that she should be promoted to be the Chairperson of the Department. I disagree with the arguer on this aspect. Even Professor Thomas excels in her research, it doesn抰 follow that she is qualified to be a good manager.Beause management involves a lot of responsibilities and personal relationships and so forth; it might be a total brand-new territory for a Professor. So it's possible that we get a bad manager at the cost of a excellent Professor, which is definitely a great loss to the university.

In sum, the arguer does not provide us enough evidences to show Professor Thomas' teaching and research abilities. If he takes action hastily, we have every reason to doubt that it would incur dissatisfaction from other professors in the university.

加一UID: 2168628

The arguer recommends that we should raise the salary of Professor Thomas and give her promotion to Department Chairperson; otherwise she would leave Elm City University for another college because we ignore her perfect teaching and research abilities. It seems to be sound and convincing at first glance. However, a further analysis would reveal that the argument commits several fallacies.

In the first place, the arguer claims that without such a raise and promotion, Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University. But he does not show us that Professor Thomas has an interest in other universities or is discontent with her salary and position. So, we could not see the possibility that Professor Thomas has a desire to leave for another college. The arguer draws his conclusion from a wrong assumption.
我觉得如果等教授开始联系别的学校的时候再谈加薪的问题就有些让人心寒了，而且教授没准私下里已经联系别的工作了。学术委员会毕竟不是CIA，这种消息他们也是拿不到的，只能防患于未然。

Secondly, the arguer fails to provide strong evidences to demonstrate that Professor Thomas has a perfect teaching and researching abilities in his argument. The merely fact that her classes are among the largest classes at the university does not follow her good ability in teaching. Maybe her course is required to attend; hence it does not have any connection with her popularity. Also, the arguer failed to provide any information about whether the students in her class are satisfied with her teaching or not. If the students are required to choose her classes and not satisfy with her teaching, it would very hard to convince us that she is popular among students.少动词
Thirdly, the arguer believes that she should be promoted to be the Chairperson of the Department. I disagree with the arguer on this aspect. Even Professor Thomas excels in her research, it doesn't follow that she is qualified to be a good manager.Beause management involves a lot of responsibilities and personal relationships (呵呵,我没想到)and so forth; it might be a total brand-new territory for a Professor. So it's possible that we get a bad manager at the cost of a excellent Professor, which is definitely a great loss to the university.

In sum, the arguer does not provide us enough evidences to show Professor Thomas' teaching and research abilities. If he takes action hastily, we have every(为什么要用every呢?a lot of 之类的就可以啊) reason to doubt that it would incur dissatisfaction from other professors in the university.

建议把Firstly这样的开头换成Admittedly等词语，毕竟First,Second这样的结构咱们从高中就开始用拉。文章的结构比以前刚开始写的时候好了很多，争取把每段再展开来写。文章好像没有涉及到科研经费的问题，我觉得这应该是一个比较明显的问题。先不说她的经费似乎少了点，即使是植物学的基金少，也要拿她的经费数量和别的教授比较以后再做道理啊。呵呵这次作业交的这么早，下次继续努力啊！加油~

[ Last edited by 加一 on 2005-12-24 at 11:17 ]

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The arguer recommends that we should raise the salary of Professor Thomas and give her promotion to Department Chairperson; otherwise she would leave Elm City University for another college [because we ignore her perfect teaching and research abilities题目中没这么说最好不要写]. It seems to be sound and convincing at first glance. However, a further analysis would reveal that the argument commits[好词！] several fallacies.

In the first place, the arguer claims that without such a raise and promotion, Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University. But he does not show us that Professor Thomas has an interest in other universities or is discontent with her salary and position. So, we could not see the possibility that Professor Thomas has a desire to leave for another college. The arguer draws his conclusion from a wrong[这词有点重了 用ungrounded/unsubstantiate好些] assumption.

Secondly, the arguer fails to provide strong evidences to demonstrate that Professor Thomas has a perfect teaching and researching[这段后面论述没涉及research ability, topic sentense还是不要写 如果写的话下文一定要有论及] abilities in his argument. The merely fact that her classes are among the largest classes at the university does not follow her good ability in teaching. Maybe her course is required to attend; hence it does not have any connection with her popularity. Also, the arguer failed to provide any information about whether the students in her class are satisfied with her teaching or not. If the students are required to choose her classes and not satisfy[satisfied/content] with her teaching, it would [be] very hard to convince us that she is popular among students.

Thirdly, the arguer believes that she should be promoted to be the Chairperson of the Department. I disagree with the arguer on[in, aspect一般都与in搭配] this aspect. Even [if] Professor Thomas excels in her research, it doesn抰 follow that she is qualified to be a good manager.Beause management involves a lot of responsibilities and personal relationships and so forth; it might be a total brand-new territory for a Professor.[我喜欢这句！] So it's possible that we get a bad manager at the cost of[前面最好加一句她难以2者兼顾 这里的at the cost of才显得justified] a excellent Professor, which is definitely a great loss to the university.

In sum, the arguer does not provide us enough evidences to show Professor Thomas' teaching and research abilities. If he takes action hastily, we have every reason to doubt that it would incur dissatisfaction from other professors in the university. [最后一句是新观点 不应出现在结尾段]

[这篇写得不错 清晰流畅简洁又不失深度 比我写得要好 学习！
不过关于research ability的问题没有论述 而且结尾有点仓促 不过瑕不掩瑜哦 xixi
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