Argument38 Kito组第六次作业，谢谢拍砖~

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题目
Argument38 The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
   
翻译：我们注意到一种保证可以显著减少学校和工作岗位的缺席的革新疗法。一项研究报告说在附近的East Meria，鱼的消费量很高，那里的人们每年因为治感冒而去看医生的次数只有一或两次。显然，吃较大量的鱼可以预防感冒。由于感冒是学校和单位缺席的最常见原因，我们建议每天服用Ichthaid，一种从鱼油中提炼的营养物质，作为预防感冒和减少缺席率的有效措施。

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提纲
（1）研究报告没有说明鱼的消费量高和那里的人们因为感冒看医生次数少有直接关系。有可能East Meria靠海，鱼产量丰富，所以消费量高。也有可能那里的人们生活不富裕，感冒并不去看医生，而是自己吃药。
（2）即使吃大量鱼能预防感冒，但感冒并不一定是学校和单位缺勤的最常见原因。
（3）即使吃鱼能预防感冒，但不一定服用Ichthaid就能有效果。  

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In this argument, the arguer suggests that people in West Meria should use Ichthaid daily to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. He supports his suggestion by a study report which points out that people in nearby East Meria consume a large amount of fish and they visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. In addition, he gives out his suggestion on the assumption that colds are the main reason for absences. The suggestion seems reasonable, but after careful examination, we can point out several flaws as follows.

First of all, the study report used by the arguer does not reveals that there is direct relation between the higher fish consumption and the fewer times of visiting doctor because of colds. It is possible that East Meria is near to the sea and the higher fish consumption is caused by the higher output. On the other hand, it is likely that the living standard of East Meria is relatively low, or the medicine condition is oppositely pool, as a result, people there are hardly to afford the high treatment fee, and they would rather give a dose themselves than go to visit doctor just because of colds. So the arguer commits the fallacy of assuming that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds.

Second of all, even if eating fish can guard against colds, it is not assured that colds are the mainly reason for absences. It is likely that catching colds is just a excuse most often used by people and there are other genuine reasons for people's absences. For example, some students are indulged with computer games and not reluctant to go to school, so they cheats the teachers by declaring they catch colds. There is another example. In most company, absences for sick leave maybe deduct little or even no salary, consequently, when employers have some emergent matters to deal with at once, they will use the peg of colds. So the arguer should conduct a deep and wide survey to confirm whether colds are the real reason for absences from school and work.

In addition, granted again that eating large amount of fish can prevent colds, the arguer does not tell which kind of nutritional material of fish is really acting. He only suggests people to use Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. Is it certain that Ichthaid can contribute to people health as same as fish? Of course not. It is very likely that the vital material is from fish's pearl eyes, instead of fish oil. So it also needs to be validated.

To sum up, the argument is unacceptable because it depends on a questionably causal relationship between eating fish and preventing colds. Moreover, it fails to give evidences that colds are the real reason for absence, and Ichthaid has use. So to make the suggestion more convincing, the facets discussed above should be taken into account.

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In this argument, the arguer suggests that people in West Meria should use Ichthaid daily to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. He supports his suggestion by a study report which points out that people in nearby East Meria consume a large amount of fish and they visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. In addition, he gives out his suggestion on the assumption that colds are the main reason for absences. The suggestion seems reasonable, but after careful examination, we can point out several flaws as follows.

First of all, the study report used by the arguer does not reveals that there is direct relation between the higher fish consumption and the fewer times of visiting doctor because of colds. It is possible that East Meria is near to the sea and the higher fish consumption is caused by the higher output. On the other hand, it is likely that the living standard of East Meria is relatively low, or the medicine condition is oppositely pool, as a result, people there are hardly to afford the high treatment fee, and they would rather give a dose themselves than go to visit doctor just because of colds. So the arguer commits the fallacy of assuming that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds.

Second of all, even if eating fish can guard against colds, it is not assured that colds are the mainly（main） reason for absences. It is likely that catching colds is just a（an） excuse most often used by people and there are other genuine reasons for people's absences. For example, some students are indulged with computer games and not reluctant to go to school, so they cheats the teachers by declaring（declare是宣布，声明这些意思吧，用在这里似乎有点夸张） they catch colds. There is another example. In most company, absences for sick leave maybe deduct little or even no salary, consequently, when employers have some emergent matters to deal with at once, they will use the peg of colds. So the arguer should conduct a deep and wide survey to confirm whether colds are the real reason for absences from school and work.

In addition, granted again that eating large amount of fish can prevent colds, the arguer does not tell which kind of nutritional material of fish is really acting. He only suggests people to use Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. Is it certain that Ichthaid can contribute to people health as（the） same as fish? Of course not. It is very likely that the vital material is from fish's pearl eyes, instead of fish oil. So it also needs to be validated.

To sum up, the argument is unacceptable because it depends on a questionably causal relationship between eating fish and preventing colds. Moreover, it fails to give evidences that colds are the real reason for absence, and Ichthaid has use（is useful in prevention of colds). So to make the suggestion more convincing, the facets discussed above should be taken into account.

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谢谢智恩忙着考试还来帮我看作文，:hug: 嘿嘿，我再改改

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题目
Argument38 The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
   
翻译：我们注意到一种保证可以显著减少学校和工作岗位的缺席的革新疗法。一项研究报告说在附近的East Meria，鱼的消费量很高，那里的人们每年因为治感冒而去看医生的次数只有一或两次。显然，吃较大量的鱼可以预防感冒。由于感冒是学校和单位缺席的最常见原因，我们建议每天服用Ichthaid，一种从鱼油中提炼的营养物质，作为预防感冒和减少缺席率的有效措施。

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提纲
（1）研究报告没有说明鱼的消费量高和那里的人们因为感冒看医生次数少有直接关系。有可能East Meria靠海，鱼产量丰富，所以消费量高。也有可能那里的人们生活不富裕，感冒并不去看医生，而是自己吃药。
（2）即使吃大量鱼能预防感冒，但感冒并不一定是学校和单位缺勤的最常见原因。Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work,题目已经说了感冒是缺席最常见的原因，是不是可以换个角度说即使能预防感冒不一定能减少缺席，或者说感冒少了可能有其它缺席理由？
（3）即使吃鱼能预防感冒，但不一定服用Ichthaid就能有效果。  

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字数：493 words
时间：提纲（15分钟）+正文（1小时）= 1小时15分钟
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正文
In this argument, the arguer suggests that people in West Meria should use Ichthaid daily to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. He supports his suggestion（你怎么知道作者性别的？还是用to support his recommendation the arguer cites the study吧？） by a study report去掉 which points out that people in nearby East Meria consume a large amount of fish and they visit the去掉 doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. In addition, he gives out his suggestion（the arguer's suggestion based on the assumption that colds are the main reason for absences.(这个假设题目好像是说已经成立的呀，不知是否我理解偏差，你说呢？ The suggestion seems reasonable, but after careful examination, we can point out several flaws as follows.

First of all, the study report去掉 used by the arguer does not reveals reveal that there is direct relation(a correlation,你是想说有关系，还是想说有因果联系啊？如果是后者，那还是用a causal relationship吧？) between the higher fish consumption and the fewer times(我用lower rate，也不知道好不好呀？ of visiting doctor because of colds. It is possible that East Meria is near to去掉 the sea and the higher fish consumption is caused by the higher output. On the other hand, it is likely that the living standard of East Meria is relatively low, or the medicine condition（用medical吧，你是想说医疗条件吗？） is oppositely（comparatively) pool,poor as a result, people there are hardly(hardly 只有副词词性，用are not able to或cannot 吧？ to afford the high treatment fee, and they would rather give a dose themselves than go to visit doctor just because of colds. So the arguer commits the fallacy of assuming that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds.（这句话很明显是指出作者的错误，如果没有so的话应该是用在开头的，我认为如果你想用在结尾应该这样说：Thus, the arguer's cannot convince me based on the dubious assumption that........你认为呢？
Second of all, even if eating fish can guard against colds, it is not assured that colds are the mainly main reason for absences. It is likely that catching colds is just a an excuse most often used by people and there are other genuine reasons for people's absences. For example, some students are indulged with computer games and not reluctant to go to school, so they cheats the teachers by declaring they catch colds.（我觉得感冒是借口在上面提到就可以了，不一定要举个例子来展开讲的，你说呢？ There is another example. In most company companies, absences for sick leave去掉 maybe deduct little or even no salary, consequently, when employers have some emergent matters to deal with at once, they will use the peg of colds. So the arguer should conduct a deep and wide survey to confirm whether colds are the real reason for absences from school and work.

In addition, granted again that eating large amount of fish can prevent colds, the arguer does not tell which kind of nutritional material of fish is really acting(effective). He The arguer only suggests people to use Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. Is it certain that Ichthaid can contribute to people health as same as fish? Of course not.(有待证实呀？) It is very likely that the vital material is from fish's pearl eyes, instead of fish oil. So it also needs to be validated.

To sum up, the argument is unacceptable because it depends on a questionably causal relationship between eating fish and preventing colds. Moreover, it fails to give evidences that colds are the real reason for absence, and Ichthaid has use(and that Ichthaid is effective as well as fish). So to make the suggestion more convincing, the facets(它是立方体的一个面，不一定看待事物的方面吧？我是这样理解的） discussed above should be taken into account.
这篇文章写的很好，只是我有两个问题不明白，第一，你在提纲里提到感冒不一定是缺席最常见的原因，可是文章已经说明事实是这样的啊？第二，你在第二点论述的时候说感冒是人们缺席的借口，一定需要举详细的例子来展开吗？
我觉得你第三个论点驳斥的很好，Ichthaid不一定象natural fish一样有效果。
这次改的这么晚，实在抱歉！！！