Argument25 快要考了 多谢指点^-^

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【题目】Argument25
The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.

"Two years ago, the town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
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【翻译】
两年前Ocean View建造了一个新的市立高尔夫球场和度假旅馆。过去两年中，Ocean View的旅客增加了，开设了很多新的商业，而且税收增加了30％。改善Hopewell的经济，产生更多税收的最好途径就是建立一个和Ocean View类似的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆。
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【提纲】
1. 新建造的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆与游客的增加没有必然的联系。很可能O开设了一个迪斯尼乐园之类的，很受欢迎。
2. 而且，新建的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆与新商业的开辟和税收增加也没有关系。很有可能政府采取了各种优惠政策比如减税给予资金的资助来刺激商业的开辟。同样，税收的增加完全有可能是游客的增加和新商业的开辟造成的，而这些都与高尔夫球场度假旅馆无关。
3. 就算我们承认这种因果联系，也不能证明对于O成立的事情对于H同样适用。很可能H市是以重工业为主，污染很严重，本地的居民都纷纷搬走，根本就不会有游客来，许多新的商业也会因为环境和客源的问题不选择这里。这种情况下，税收就更不可能增加了。而且更糟糕的是，作者没有提供H的详细信息，很可能他们根本没有能力去修建高尔夫球场和度假旅馆，这样的建议反而可能使经济变得更坏。
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【正文】
Prior to choosing to build a golf course and resort hotel for the purpose of improving Hopewell's economy and generating additional tax revenues, I find the evidence presented in this argument requires an in-depth scrutiny from several aspects. The author seems to have posited that the new construction would have the same effect in Hopewell as that in Ocean View without ruling out the other factors and thus draw a conclusion that is fundamentally flawed.

To begin with, the author fails to establish a causal relationship between the new construction and the increase of tourism. As mentioned in the argument, the author attempts to convince us that it must be the golf course and resort hotel that lead to the increase of tourism, which, however, may be not the case. As we know, tourism in one area depends on several dimensions, say, landscape, environment, transportation and the like. It is entirely possible that a Disney Park was built in Ocean View two years ago, which will surely be an appeal to not only children but also many adults. Or perhaps the local government made great efforts to ameliorate the environment in Ocean View, which may also attracts the tourists' attentions. Accordingly, since the author fails to respond to these concerns, the assumption that golf course and resort hotel contribute to the increase of tourism is untenable.

In a not dissimilar way, the author illogically presumes that the opening of new businesses and the increase of tax revenues in Ocean View must be attributable to golf course and resort hotel. Possibly, the local government, in order to attract new businesses, promulgated a serious of policies to attract new business, say, reduce the current tax rate or offer financial support to the new businesses willing to invest in Ocean View. By doing that, it is natural that the opening of new business increased, which tends to be absolutely irrelevant to the golf course and resort hotel. Moreover, the tax revenues may increase for the same reason that the new businesses increased. Without taking these alternatives into account, the author cannot justify the authenticity and credibility of his assertion.

Before coming to finish my analysis, we might also turn our focus to the author's conclusion which indicates that building a golf course and resort hotel in Hopewell will surely contribute to precipitate the development of economy. Nevertheless, there is nowhere more ridiculous than this conclusion. For one thing, the author provides no clear evidence to show that the two areas are similar enough. As a consequence, we have sufficient reasons to assume that the major industry in Hopewell caused severe pollution and thus did great harm to the environment. In that case, local residents may feel uncomfortable living in Hopewell and thereby crave for leaving, let alone the tourists and the new businesses. For another thing, absent further information about the status quo in Hopewell, it would be pernicious to adopt the author's recommendation. Perhaps the economy in Hopewell is too awful to afford money to build a new golf course and resort hotel. If so, the new construction is presumed to exacerbate the current hardship rather than alleviate it as the author claims. Hence, any of these scenarios will inevitably undermine the author's assertion.

To sum up, the argument is weaken by the flaws discussed above. To better evaluate it, the author should bear the causal relationships mentioned in this argument. Furthermore, the author should also demonstrate the similarity between the two areas in order to apply the experience of Ocean View to Hopewell.

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Argument25 快要考了 多谢指点^-^

【题目】Argument25
The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.

"Two years ago, the town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
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【翻译】
两年前Ocean View建造了一个新的市立高尔夫球场和度假旅馆。过去两年中，Ocean View的旅客增加了，开设了很多新的商业，而且税收增加了30％。改善Hopewell的经济，产生更多税收的最好途径就是建立一个和Ocean View类似的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆。
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【提纲】
1. 新建造的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆与游客的增加没有必然的联系。很可能O开设了一个迪斯尼乐园之类的，很受欢迎。（很好！）
2. 而且，新建的高尔夫球场和度假旅馆与新商业的开辟和税收增加也没有关系。很有可能政府采取了各种优惠政策比如减税给予资金的资助来刺激商业的开辟。同样，税收的增加完全有可能是游客的增加和新商业的开辟造成的，而这些都与高尔夫球场度假旅馆无关。
3. 就算我们承认这种因果联系，也不能证明对于O成立的事情对于H同样适用。很可能H市是以重工业为主，污染很严重，本地的居民都纷纷搬走，根本就不会有游客来，许多新的商业也会因为环境和客源的问题不选择这里。这种情况下，税收就更不可能增加了。而且更糟糕的是，作者没有提供H的详细信息，很可能他们根本没有能力去修建高尔夫球场和度假旅馆，这样的建议反而可能使经济变得更坏。（近乎完美的提纲 ！）
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【正文】
Prior to choosing to build a golf course and resort hotel for the purpose of improving Hopewell's economy and generating additional tax revenues, I find the evidence presented in this argument requires an in-depth scrutiny from several aspects. The author seems to have posited that the new construction would have the same effect in Hopewell as that in Ocean View without ruling out the other factors and thus draw a conclusion that is fundamentally flawed.（good！）

To begin with, the author fails to establish a causal relationship between the new construction and the increase of tourism. As mentioned in the argument, the author attempts to convince us that it must be the golf course and resort hotel that lead to the increase of tourism, which, however, may be not the case. As we know, tourism in one area depends on several dimensions, say, landscape, environment, transportation and the like. It is entirely possible that a Disney Park was built in Ocean View two years ago, which will surely be an appeal to not only children but also many adults. Or perhaps the local government made great efforts to ameliorate the environment in Ocean View, which may also attracts the tourists' attentions. Accordingly, since the author fails to respond to these concerns, the assumption that golf course and resort hotel contribute to the increase of tourism is untenable.（看你的文章就像享受柔美的音乐一样，自己和你一比就相形见绌,学习中……）
In a not dissimilar way, the author illogically presumes that the opening of new businesses and the increase of tax revenues in Ocean View must be attributable to golf course and resort hotel. Possibly, the local government, in order to attract new businesses, promulgated a serious of policies to attract new business, say, reduce the current tax rate or offer financial support to the new businesses willing to invest in Ocean View. By doing that, it is natural that the opening of new business increased, which tends to be absolutely irrelevant to the golf course and resort hotel. Moreover, the tax revenues may increase for the same reason that the new businesses increased. Without taking these alternatives into account, the author cannot justify the authenticity and credibility of his assertion.（很全面的驳斥。）
Before coming to finish my analysis, we might also turn our focus to the author's conclusion which indicates that building a golf course and resort hotel in Hopewell will surely contribute to precipitate the development of economy. Nevertheless, there is nowhere more ridiculous than this conclusion. For one thing, the author provides no clear evidence to show that the two areas are similar enough. As a consequence, we have sufficient reasons to assume that the major industry in Hopewell caused severe pollution and thus did great harm to the environment. In that case, local residents may feel uncomfortable living in Hopewell and thereby crave for leaving, let alone the tourists and the new businesses. For another thing, absent further information about the status quo in Hopewell, it would be pernicious to adopt the author's recommendation. Perhaps the economy in Hopewell is too awful to afford money to build a new golf course and resort hotel. If so, the new construction is presumed to exacerbate the current hardship rather than alleviate it as the author claims. Hence, any of these scenarios will inevitably undermine the author's assertion.（全面，学习中……）
To sum up, the argument is weaken by the flaws discussed above. To better evaluate it, the author should bear the causal relationships mentioned in this argument. Furthermore, the author should also demonstrate the similarity between the two areas in order to apply the experience of Ocean View to Hopewell.
你的文章写得很好！！文中充斥着GRE词汇，真的很羡慕，继续努力！）

[ 本帖最后由 lawrence1984 于 2006-2-15 18:02 编辑 ]

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