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lemon45UID: 2115748

Argument140: 494 words
The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
'During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college.'

The arguer recommends that Professor Thomas receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson in order to avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college. To substantiate her value, the arguer indicates that her classes are among the largest at the university, and she has brought to the university in research more money than her salary in each of the last two years. On the surface, it seems to be somewhat correct. However in actually, the arguer ignores certain important concerns and points, which should be addressed to prove. In my point of view, the arguer suffers from the following flaws.

To begin with, the arguer notes that Professor Thomas's classes have the largest number of students at university, which implicated that she is very popular among students. It is problematic that the why a great deal of students attend her class. Just because she is popular? It is highly possibly that the classes she bought are very important for students, especially whose majors are Biology or Botany. Another possibility is that she gives high scores to students, who choose and attend her classes. So, having a lot of students in her classes cannot prove that she is popular among the students.

In addition, the arguer indicates that in cash of the last two year, Professor Thomas has brought to the university in research grants more money that her salary. There is no significant sign in the argument that what did she brought to school before the last two years. Perhaps, the project, which has let her bring much money in research for school are finished. Maybe, she will not bring any money from now on. In a word, we doubt that whether her project will still useful in increasing the university's research grants or not.

Furthermore, as we all know, being a Department Chairperson need various capacities, such as the abilities of teaching, administering and researching. But unfortunately, there is no evidence to show that Professor Thomas has the abilities, as showing above, to be the Department Chairperson. Even if we admit she is very popular among students and she can bring a lot of money to university's research grants, we still cannot recommend she be the Department Chairperson.

Last but not least, raising her money and let her be the Department Chairperson may not avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college. If she has the decision of leaving Elm City University for another college, she will ignore the benefits that Elm City University gives her, such as raising her salary and let she be the Department Chairperson.

Overall, the reasoning that recommending Professor Thomas be the Department Chairperson and raised salary seems somewhat logical as presented above since the manager of the university cares about the person with ability. However before any finical decisions are made about raising her salary and asking her to be the Department Chairperson, should evaluate all possibilities and causes about her abilities.

Nancy131492UID: 2169227

Argument140: 494 words
The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
'During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college.'

The arguer recommends that Professor Thomas receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson in order to avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college.(prevent sb from doing更好) To substantiate her value, the arguer indicates that her classes are among the largest at the university, and she has brought to the university in research more money than her salary in each of the last two years. On the surface, it seems to be somewhat correct. （不好）However in actually, the arguer ignores certain important concerns and points, which should be addressed to prove. In my point of view, the arguer suffers from the following flaws.

To begin with, the arguer notes that Professor Thomas's classes have the largest number of students at university, which implicated （为什么用过去时）that she is very popular among students. It is problematic that the why a great deal of students attend her class. Just because she is popular? （语法错误，怎么改不清楚）It is highly possibly（语法错误） that the classes she bought （taught?）are very important for students, especially whose majors are Biology or Botany. (why?)Another possibility is that she gives high scores to students, who choose and attend her classes. So, having a lot of students in her classes cannot prove that she is popular among the students.

In addition, the arguer indicates that in cash(each) of the last two year, Professor Thomas has brought to the university in research grants more money that(than) her salary. There is no significant sign in the argument that what did she brought to school before the last two years. Perhaps, the project, which has let her bring much money in research for school are finished. Maybe, she will not bring any money from now on. In a word, we doubt that whether her project will still useful in increasing the university's research grants or not.(the last two sentences are not good)

Furthermore, as we all know, being a Department Chairperson need various capacities, such as the abilities of teaching, administering and researching. But unfortunately, there is no evidence to show that Professor Thomas has the abilities, as showing above, to be the Department Chairperson. Even if we admit she is very popular among students and she can bring a lot of money to university's research grants, we still cannot recommend she be(is) the Department Chairperson.

Last but not least, raising her money and let her be the Department Chairperson may not avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college. If she has the decision of leaving Elm City University for another college, she will ignore the benefits that Elm City University gives her, such as raising her salary and let she be the Department Chairperson.

Overall, the reasoning that recommending Professor Thomas be(?) the Department Chairperson and raised salary seems somewhat logical as presented above since the manager of the university cares about the person with ability. However before any finical decisions are made about raising her salary and asking her to be the Department Chairperson, should evaluate all possibilities and causes about her abilities.
总的来说还不错，第一次计时，比我好多

夏花秋叶UID: 2180544

看你们写得都那么好，我压力好大啊-____-我是新手，还没写过argu的，请多多指教

The arguer recommends that Professor Thomas receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson in order to avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college. To substantiate her value, the arguer indicates that her classes are among the largest at the university, and she has brought to the university in research more money than her salary in each of the last two years. On the surface, it seems to be (去掉"to be"，就是"it seems")somewhat correct (correct不合适，好像没有"somewhat" correct，建议改成"somewhat acceptable/reasonable" ). However in actually(要不"However"，要不"actually"), the arguer ignores certain important concerns and points, which should be addressed to prove. In my point of view, the arguer suffers from the following flaws.

To begin with, the arguer notes that Professor Thomas's classes have the largest number of students at university, which implicated（过去式？） that she is very popular among students. It is problematic that the why a great deal of students attend her class.（这句话不太懂，要不用why疑问句，要不用reason陈述句） Just because she is popular? It is highly possibly that the classes she bought（笔误吧:)） are very important for （to） students, especially whose majors are Biology or Botany（这句话语法上不太对，建议改成"especially those who major in biology or botany）. Another possibility is that she gives （此处建议加上relatively）high scores to students, who choose and attend her classes（这个分句看起来有点多余）. So, having a lot of students in her classes cannot prove that she is popular among the students.
（教我们科技英语的外教说in English, "popular" indicates low quality，应该避免这个词。建议用well-respected，不过此处我觉得用名次形式popularity好些）

In addition, the arguer indicates that in cash of the last two year, Professor Thomas has brought to the university in research grants more money that her salary（brought sth. to the university）. There is no significant sign in the argument that what did she brought to school before the last two years. Perhaps, the project, which has let her bring much money in research for school are finished. Maybe, she will not bring any money from now on. （这句话换个说法？）In a word, we doubt that whether her project will still useful in increasing the university's research grants or not.

Furthermore, as we all know, being a Department Chairperson need various capacities, such as the abilities of （去掉"the abilities of"）teaching, administering and researching. But unfortunately, there is no evidence to show that Professor Thomas has the abilities, as showing above, to be the Department Chairperson. Even if we admit she is very popular among students and she can（还是那位外教说，in english "can" indicates doubt，应该避免） bring a lot of money to university's research grants, we still cannot recommend she be the Department Chairperson（recommend的用法好像不对？）.

Last but not least, raising her money and let（let 口语化了，尽量避免） her be the Department Chairperson may not avoid her leaving Elm City University for another college. If she has the decision of leaving Elm City University for another college, she will ignore the benefits that Elm City University gives her, such as raising her salary and let she be the Department Chairperson.

Overall, the reasoning that recommending Professor Thomas be the Department Chairperson and raised salary seems somewhat logical as presented above since the manager of the university cares about the person with ability. However before any finical decisions are made about raising her salary and asking her to be the Department Chairperson, （此处缺少主语）should evaluate all possibilities and causes about her abilities.