ISSUE17 [越洋农场]Pewcg8

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提纲：
开头段：法律是使维护社会稳定，促进社会发展的重要因素，在建设文明，法制社会的进程中，我们的公民的责任是维护法律的尊严，保障其实施，而违抗法律（不管是否是公正的）都不是公民应该有的行为．
正文段１：（应该遵守所有法律）
论证：法律的作用．．．．首先点明，一方面是维护社会发展，一方面是维护个人权利，不遵守法律，将对这两方面都造成巨大的损害．（反面论证我们必须遵守公正法,正好和下文衔接）
正文段２：（当然，没有绝对公正的法律）
论证:由于社会地位,个人信仰,社会团体,政治理念和在具体的法律行为中,法人的地位不同,那么可以说没有一个绝对的标准来判断是否一个法律是公正的.而且,由于法律调整的是社会中人与人之间的关系和社会发展过程中规范的是人的行为,社会的不断变化必然导致一个不合适的法律出现.
正文段３：（但是，对待不公正的法律，我们不能违抗，而是用其他办法解决问题）
违抗法律不是一个文明社会应该出现的情况,我们应该合理的解决这一问题.
结尾段：社会发展是每一个公民的责任，而为社会的法制建设做出自己的应该有的行动，也是每一个公民的义务．法律需要全社会的维护，遵守，才能更好的发挥在社会进步中的作用．

正文:
TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
WORDS: 666          TIME: 51:57          DATE: 2006-8-6

In a civilized society, the most important factor that can both regulate and control its citizens and groups and even the society itself should be nothing but the law. It is our responsibility to obey all the laws. Resisting laws is not a rational action of any citizens.

The body of law consists of rules and regulations concerning both civil and individual rights as well as social relations. Throughout history, the law has evolved, from a tool for the ruling class to dominate those lower classes, into a mechanism to regulate human-behavior and social development. This trend will continue to take place, as we make our efforts to build a civilization will peace and prosperity. It is significant for us to obey all the laws to help the law system go ground smoothly and it will definitely and eventually do good to us. If people only choose some to obey, or even care nothing about laws, our system of justice and the society as a whole will get into a dilemma. Consider the criminal law, which deals with crimes. It is accepted by all countries around the world that killing people will be punished no matter what the motivation of the criminal is or whether this criminal is intentional. If some people hold the opinion that unintentional killing or taking one's life when you thought he or she should be punished need not be punished, and refused to obey the law, the society would be replete with chaos. Obviously, it will do harm to both citizens and the society. It is vital to let laws to safeguard the fairness of our society.

However, I have to concede that there are hardly any appropriate criterions to judge whether a law is fair or not, in other words, it is hardly to evaluate whether laws we obey are just or unjust. As people with respective social status, personal beliefs and political convictions are probably to take different position in juristic acts, their judgment on whether a law is a just one or not will surely differ. Moreover, it is possible if an adverse judgment is pronounced on some people, they are more likely to consider this law as an unjust one. A case in the business world serves to illustrate this point well. Small business groups are protected against those large corporations in almost every law system, for the sake of keeping balance in business affairs. It is clear that those large and transnational firms would think that this very law is unjust while other small groups and some politicians consider it as a just one. Due to distinct positions they stand, people can hardly find a criterion to devide laws into two part. In fact, since laws control citizens' behavior and govern social relationships, it is obvious that as our society are developing and moving dramatically fast, some laws will absolutely become unsuitable. Those unsuitable laws will show unjust and partial in certain cases.

But being unjust should not be the excuse for us to resist these laws. As
I just mentioned, disobeying and resisting laws will result in nothing other than a chaos, which will do no good to the society and ourselves. In a civilized society, in which violence no longer exist; it is unwise to react to unjust laws in an irrational way. The law system itself is constructed in a well-knit manner; the legislative, executive and judicial branches work together well. If there are really some laws that are no longer appropriate, what we should do is giving our advice to those legislative department as well as our suggestions, then the legislators will take these into their considerations. Only in this way can we contribute to the project of building a more civilized and legal society.

In sum, it is every citizen's responsibility to make efforts to the development and prosperity of our society, and obeying all laws and giving advice on some inappropriate laws should be our incumbent duty.

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提纲：
开头段：法律是使维护社会稳定，促进社会发展的重要因素，在建设文明，法制社会的进程中，我们的公民的责任是维护法律的尊严，保障其实施，而违抗法律（不管是否是公正的）都不是公民应该有的行为．
正文段１：（应该遵守所有法律）
论证：法律的作用．．．．首先点明，一方面是维护社会发展，一方面是维护个人权利，不遵守法律，将对这两方面都造成巨大的损害．（反面论证我们必须遵守公正法,正好和下文衔接）
正文段２：（当然，没有绝对公正的法律）
论证:由于社会地位,个人信仰,社会团体,政治理念和在具体的法律行为中,法人的地位不同,那么可以说没有一个绝对的标准来判断是否一个法律是公正的.而且,由于法律调整的是社会中人与人之间的关系和社会发展过程中规范的是人的行为,社会的不断变化必然导致一个不合适的法律出现.
正文段３：（但是，对待不公正的法律，我们不能违抗，而是用其他办法解决问题）
违抗法律不是一个文明社会应该出现的情况,我们应该合理的解决这一问题.
结尾段：社会发展是每一个公民的责任，而为社会的法制建设做出自己的应该有的行动，也是每一个公民的义务．法律需要全社会的维护，遵守，才能更好的发挥在社会进步中的作用．

正文:
TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
WORDS: 666          TIME: 51:57          DATE: 2006-8-6

In a civilized society, the most important factor that can both regulate and control its citizens and groups and even the society itself should be nothing but the law. It is our responsibility to obey all the laws. Resisting laws is not a rational action of any citizens.（ Pewcg8的开头总是很简明，值得学习）

（事实性的论述一般不宜作为主题句，而通常是作为理由，因为没有太多辩护的必要。次段首句明显属于事实。虽然这里可能不是主题句但放在第一句会引起判卷人误以为是，毕竟改卷时间有限。）The body of law consists of rules and regulations concerning both civil and individual rights as well as social relations. Throughout history, the law has evolved, from a tool for the ruling class to dominate those lower classes, into a mechanism to regulate human-behavior and social development. This trend will continue to take place, as we make our efforts to build a civilization will peace and prosperity. It is significant for us to obey all the laws to help the law system go ground smoothly and it will definitely and eventually do good to us. If people only choose some to obey, or even care nothing about laws, our system of justice and the society as a whole will get into a dilemma. Consider the criminal law, which deals with crimes.（Consider what? 还是加上通些吧，as an example） It is accepted by all countries around the world that killing people will be punished no matter what the motivation of the criminal is or whether this criminal is intentional.（这句话说得欠妥吧，比如如果是正当防卫呢？建议不太了解的时候用一些表揣测意想的词） If some people hold the opinion that unintentional killing or taking one's life when you thought he or she should be punished need not be punished, and refused to obey the law, the society would be replete with chaos. Obviously, it will do harm to both citizens and the society. It is vital to let laws to safeguard the fairness of our society.

However, I have to concede that there are hardly any appropriate criterions to judge whether a law is fair or not, in other words, it is hardly to evaluate whether laws we obey are just or unjust. As people with respective social status, personal beliefs and political convictions are probably to take different position in juristic acts, their judgment on whether a law is a just one or not will surely differ. Moreover, it is possible if an adverse judgment is pronounced on some people, they are more likely to consider this law as an unjust one. A case in the business world serves to illustrate this point well. Small business groups are protected against those large corporations in almost every law system, for the sake of keeping balance in business affairs. It is clear that those large and transnational firms would think that this very law is unjust while other small groups and some politicians consider it as a just one. Due to distinct positions they stand, people can hardly find a criterion to devide laws into two part. In fact, since laws control citizens' behavior and govern social relationships, it is obvious that as our society are developing and moving dramatically fast, some laws will absolutely become unsuitable. Those unsuitable laws will show unjust and partial （patialness或prejudice）in certain cases.

But being unjust should not be the excuse for us to resist these laws. As I just mentioned, disobeying and resisting laws will result in nothing other than a chaos, which will do no good to the society and ourselves. In a civilized society, in which violence no longer exist(exists), it is unwise to react to unjust laws in an irrational way. The law system itself is constructed in a well-knit manner; the legislative, executive and judicial branches work together well. If there are really some laws that are no longer appropriate, what we should do is giving our advice to those legislative department as well as our suggestions, then the legislators will (would) take these into their considerations. Only in this way can we contribute to the project of building a more civilized and legal society. (这段理由感觉欠妥，拿civilized society的现象作为理由，难到是utopia, 这种社会在现实中存在吗，有可能实现吗？要知道任何国家的任何法律都是不尽完善的，不然还需要立法，司法，检查机构吗？)
In sum, it is every citizen's responsibility to make efforts to the development and prosperity of our society, and obeying all laws and giving advice on some inappropriate laws should be our incumbent duty.

总结：
1．第一段的主题不算鲜明，看看我的建议。
2．感觉文章还是缺乏例子作为支撑，整个文章基本是在说理，多一些论据会使文章更据说服力一些。
3．开头和结尾都很简明，也算是一种风格吧！

楼住请帮我改一两篇吧,在总贴里，好:D多篇没改!:handshake

[ 本帖最后由 morallrey 于 2006-8-7 23:08 编辑 ]

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In a civilized society, the most important factor that can both regulate and control its citizens and groups and even the society itself should be nothing but the law. It is our responsibility to obey all the laws. Resisting laws is not a rational action of any citizens.

The body of law consists of rules and regulations concerning both civil and individual rights as well as social relations. Throughout history, the law has evolved, from a tool for the ruling class to dominate those lower classes, into a mechanism to regulate human-behavior and social development. This trend will continue to take place, as we make our efforts同意替换exert ourselves to to build a civilization will peace and prosperitywill peace and prosperity什么意思？. It is significant for us to obey all the laws to help the law system go ground smoothly and it will definitely and eventually do good to us. If people only感觉这里merely比较好 choose some to obey, or even care nothing about laws, our system of justice and the society as a whole will get into a dilemma. Consider the criminal law, which deals with crimes. It is accepted by all countries around the world that killing people will be punished no matter what the motivation of the criminal is or whether this criminal is intentional. If some people hold the opinion that unintentional killing or taking one's life when you thought he or she should be punished need not be punished, and refused to obey the law, the society would be replete with chaos. Obviously, it will do harm to both citizens and the society. It is vital to let laws to safeguard the fairness of our society.这一段是你的核心理论。如果按照昨天讨论的结构来说，这个应该放在后面。但是这么写，应该也可以吧。总分结构。

However, I have to concede that there are hardly any appropriate criterions to judge whether a law is fair or not, in other words, it is hardly to evaluate whether laws we obey are just or unjust直接or not 不是更好~. As people with respective social status, personal beliefs and political convictions are probably to take different position in juristic acts, their judgment on whether a law is a just one or not will surely differ. Moreover, it is possible if an adverse judgment is pronounced on some people, they are more likely to consider this law as an unjust one. A case in the business world serves to illustrate this point well. Small business groups are protected against those large corporations in almost every law system, for the sake of keeping balance in business affairs. It is clear that those large and transnational firms would think that this very law is unjust while other small groups and some politicians consider it as a just one. Due to distinct positions they stand, people can hardly find a criterion to devide laws into two part. In fact, since laws control citizens' behavior and govern social relationships, it is obvious that as our society are developing and moving dramatically fast, some laws will absolutely become unsuitable. Those unsuitable laws will show unjust and partial in certain cases.

But being unjust should not be the excuse for us to resist these laws. As
I just mentioned, disobeying and resisting laws will result in nothing other than a chaos, which will do no good to the society and ourselves. In a civilized society, in which violence no longer exist; it is unwise to react to unjust laws in an irrational way. The law system itself is constructed in a well-knit manner; the legislative, executive and judicial branches work together well. If there are really some laws that are no longer appropriate, what we should do is giving our advice to those legislative department as well as our suggestions, then the legislators will take these into their considerations. Only in this way can we contribute to the project of building a more civilized and legal society.

In sum, it is every citizen's responsibility to make efforts to the development and prosperity of our society, and obeying all laws and giving advice on some inappropriate laws should be our incumbent duty.最后一段要写过三句。
我觉得这个题目最重要的应该是对不公正法律的理解。even more importantly,这个是题目说的。想想看，对于正当法律的维护，大家都很清楚的。你用了2，3两段来主要说这个大家都知道的道理，这样似乎在结构上有些不合理。既然同意坚持不公正的法律，就应该重点放在这里。另外，如果按照昨天讨论的结构来处理，把不公正放在后面应该是对的。但是关键问题在于，这个段跟前面的比较，比较孤立了。因为公正和不公正的法律在本质上是不同的，所以才造成了对待上的不同。所以，我觉得，如果是段落之间逻辑和吸引人的话，应该把不公正的法律的讨论写到2段。第一段写人们该反对不公正的法律。这样反对会有什么好的结果什么的。我想这个是必然的。 第2段写，但是这些结果能够保证吗？不能。这样会造成各种更严重的问题。把第一段的东西推翻。然后再从理论上谈，为什么要遵守不公正的法律。这样应该会有一定的段落转折，而且推翻的很彻底。这是我的思路。

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感觉你的思路是总分,把公平和不公平的同等对待.
但是这个题目最好还是多说些对不公平的看法上吧.

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