ISSUE182【0706G－~4而后生~小组】第6次作业 by nap

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TOPIC: ISSUE182 - "It is dangerous to trust only intelligence."
WORDS: 596->614          TIME: 0:33:58          DATE: 2007-3-23 Updated!

The statement argues that people should not only depend on intelligence. As far as I am concerned, the statement is right and people should also resort to other non-intelligence factors, such as emotion, when they want to solve problems and when only depending on intelligence people may do some harmful things.

Admittedly, in the modern society we largely depend on intelligence to solve problems. With the highly developed technology, people find their lives more convenient. The main factor that improves the development of technology is intelligence. For example, the invention of computer is the result of intelligence. When people want to design the motherboard of the computer, they must own the knowledge of electronic circuit and knowledge of which is the result of intelligence. On the other hand, if someone wants to develop the program, he must master the computer science or even math and the latter one is also the result of intelligence. Not only in the field of IT but also in other fields such as bio-technology, geographic if people want to solve realistic problems must they resort to intelligence.

On the other hand, some factors such as emotion should be used in solving problems. If a leader want to manage a corporation, though is possible to deal with the organization only by intelligence, it is quite difficult to let all the employee to work with the same aim since most of them may have some own goals and the corporation's aim is not related to his own business. However, as we know that if the leader can motivate the moral of the whole corporation's people he may reach his goal. Many surveys indicate that it is emotion that can make the whole employee motivated and then share a similar goal. As the study of modern manage science, one of the most important roles of the leader is to make all the workers feel they are needed and essential and thus they may view the company as their own home and then work hard.

In the art field it is similar that using emotion can succeed. The role of the artists is to show their feeling to the artwork. We can hardly image how an artist who only have the knowledge of constructing a picture but do not have his own feeling to make an impressive painting. For example, in the Renaissance age most of the artists not only know how a picture is framed but also know a lot of knowing of the religion things.

Moreover, some problems will not be mollified by intelligence. The intelligence is the way to solve some detail problem and if someone's mind is out of control, for example he want to succeed by harm others, he may bring damage. There are many almost unknown scientists who study some fields by using some criminal methods. Although we must admit that they are very intelligent, they do harm to the society. For example there is an ingenious doctor who wants to know how some certain diseases work in the human body. In order to do research in this, he makes some experience in his patient who does not know this. Despite the high intelligence he owns, because of lacking deserved moral, he brings harm to others and eventually he will meet punish from the society.

In sum, we must admit that in the modern society, the intelligence plays an important role in making people's lives comfortable. However, we must know that the intelligence is not the only factor that should be depended on but also some other ones such as emotion. Besides, if we only depend on intelligence there may be some dangerous events to be happening.


有谁能帮我挑一下语言的错误？谢谢:)

[ 本帖最后由 nap 于 2007-3-30 17:41 编辑 ]

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The statement argues that people should not only depend on intelligence. As far as I am concerned, the statement is right and people should also resort to other non-intelligence factors when they want to solve problems and when only depend on intelligence people may do some harmful things(这块语法上肯定有问题，没主语).

Admittedly, in the modern society we largely depend on intelligence to solve problems. With the highly developed technology, people find their lives convenient. The main factor that improves the development of technology is intelligence. For example, the invention of computer is the result of intelligence. When people want to design the motherboard of the computer, they must own the knowledge of electronic circuit and such knowledge is the result of intelligence. On the other hand, if someone wants to develop the program, he must master the computer science or even math and the latter is also the result of intelligence. Not only in the field of IT but also in other fields such as bio-technology, geographic if people want to do something must they resort to intelligence.

Other factors such as emotion should be used in solving problems. If a leader want to manage a corporation, though is possible to deal with the organization only by intelligence, it is quite difficult to let all the employee to work with the same aim for most of them may have some own goals and the corporation's aim is not related to his own business. However, as we know that if the leader can motivate the moral of the whole corporation's people he may win. Many surveys indicate that it is emotion that can make the whole employee motivated and then work in a single（用一个表示共同的词似乎更好） goal. As the study of modern manage science, one of the most important roles of the leader is to make all the workers feel they are needed and essential and thus they may view the company as their own home and then work hard.

In the art field it is similar that using emotion can succeed. The role of the artists is to show their feeling to the artwork. We can hardly image how an artist who only have the knowledge of constructing a picture but do not have his own feeling to make an impressive painting. For example, in the renaissance（这个词当文艺复兴讲时是不是要大写，我感觉。。。） age most of the artists not only know how a picture is framed but also know a lot of knowing of the religion things.

In addition, some problems will not be mollified by intelligence and sometimes even worsen（什么更糟，感觉没有说完。。。）. The intelligence is the way to solve some detail problem and if someone's mind is out of control, for example he want to succeed by harm others, he may bring damage. There are many almost unknown scientists who study some fields by using some criminal methods. Though we must admit that they are very intelligent, they do harm to the society. For example there is a ingenious doctor who want to know how some certain diseases work in the human body. In order to do research in this, he makes some experience in his patient who does not know this. Despite the high intelligence he owns, because he does not have a good moral, he brings harm to others.

In sum, we must admit that in the modern society, the intelligence plays an important role in making people's lives comfortable. However, we must know that the intelligence is not the only factor that should be depended on but also some other ones（but also这里用的有问题）. Besides, if we only depend on intelligence there may be some dangerous events to be happening.


我个人觉得你的正文部分只有第二段、第五段在谈这个题目，三四两段说感情也能解决问题实际有些跑题。

题目说的是，只相信智慧是危险的。那么你说感情怎么怎么重要，并没有说明只相信指挥是危险的。尤其没有体现出危险二字。如果你能举出这样的例子，说艺术家只用智慧在作画，那么它的作品就没什么价值了，那我觉得还可以哈。。。

事实上，第五段你说的很好，就在于你提出了无道德运用智慧是危险的。你可以类比提出其他观点。

吹毛求疵哈。。。

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The statement argues that people should not only depend on intelligence. As far as I am concerned, the statement is right and people should also resort to other non-intelligence factors when they want to solve problems and when only depending on intelligence people may do some harmful things.

Admittedly, in the modern society we largely depend on intelligence to solve problems. With the highly developed technology, people find their lives (more) convenient. (这两句间有个衔接会流畅一些)The main factor that improves the development of technology is intelligence. For example, the invention of computer is the result of intelligence. When people want to design the motherboard of the computer, they must own the knowledge of electronic circuit and such knowledge (the knowledge of which) is the result of intelligence. On the other hand, if someone wants to develop the program, he must master the computer science or even math and the latter(one) is also the result of intelligence. Not only in the field of IT but also in other fields such as bio-technology, geographic if people want to do something must they resort to intelligence(这句稍微有点别扭).

(能够承上启下一下就不会显得emotion issue那么唐突了)Other factors such as emotion should be used in solving problems. If a leader want to manage a corporation, though is possible to deal with the organization only by intelligence, it is quite difficult to let all the employee to work with the same aim for(because) most of them may have some own goals and the corporation's aim is not related to his own business. However, as we know that if the leader can motivate the moral of the whole corporation's people, he may win(加个宾语win什么，可能读起来好一点). Many surveys indicate that it is emotion that can make the whole employee motivated and then share a similar goal. As the study of modern manage science, one of the most important roles of the leader is to make all the workers feel they are needed and essential and thus they may view the company as their own home and then work hard.

In the art field it is similar that using emotion can succeed. The role of the artists is to show their feeling to the artwork. We can hardly image how an artist who only have the knowledge of constructing a picture but do not have his own feeling to make an impressive painting. For example, in the Renaissance age most of the artists not only know how a picture is framed but also know a lot of knowing of the religion things.

In addition, some problems will not be mollified by intelligence. The intelligence is the way to solve some detail problems and if someone's mind is out of control, for example he want to succeed by harm others, he may bring damage. There are many almost unknown scientists who study some fields by using some criminal methods. AlThough we must admit that they are very intelligent, they do harm to the society. For example there is an ingenious doctor who wants to know how some certain diseases work in the human body. In order to do research in this, he makes some experience in his patient who does not know this. Despite the high intelligence he owns, because he does not have a good moral, he brings harm to others(这句力度不太够，可以说会受到社会的惩罚和谴责什么的).

In sum, we must admit that in the modern society, the intelligence plays an important role in making people's lives comfortable. However, we must know that the intelligence is not the only factor that should be depended on but also some other ones such as emotion. Besides, if we only depend on intelligence there may be some dangerous events to be happening.

字数很多的说~佩服佩服，例子不错，只是时间太紧张而有一些语言上的小问题，加油！