九月IBT--第7次作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE1 - You have the opportunity to visit aforeign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specificreasons and details to explain your choice.
WORDS: 352         TIME: 00:25:29          DATE:2007-7-24 19:26:22

I will visit Russia if I have a opportunityto visit a alien country for twoweeks after considering the short time itself and many attractive aspects ofthat with the following.

The main reason why I want to visit Russia is that I can see the Russian life.The styles of Russian buildings are of Eastern Orthodox which are ratherdifferent from those in West Europe and I haveonly seen the Gothic ones of theWest European style. At Russia,I can visit the Orthodox Churches, ones that have round domes which are unlikethe ones of Goth, with the(delete) sharp roof(s). In addition, I can taste theRussian bread. This kind is a big one with a hard skin as the result of baked. I have tasted ones in my hometown with the similar material while I think it may be tastier baked in Russia, in theoriginal way.

After that I will go through the mountain crossing the Russia and Siberiawill emerge. Though Siberia is a cold area,there are many large forests there. I can walk though the forests in the shadowof trees in both summer and winter with thick enough clothes. Here I can seethe leaves falling to the ground. Moreover, I can learn the natives' life. I can take part in their hunting,certainly in the secure state, and then I will have a wonderful experience oflurking behind the tree. Besides, I can see there mains of the explosion atTungus, a famous mysterious matter, and try to guess the reason of that.

After having a trip north, I can see the Arctic.In Arctic, I can watch the polar bear at thesafe distance. I will appreciate how that large animal catching fish from thecold water or swimming for a long distance to the other side of the ice sheet.Additionally, I will know how the native people live in this cold and nearlybare area.

Thus, since Russiais such an attractive country, I will not miss this good opportunity ofvisiting it in two weeks.



以前一直写议论文，从来没有这么困难的写过这种文章

Plant can provide food, shelter, clothing,or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the peoplein your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

I think grass is very important for thepeople in my country.
First, grass can prevent the environmentproblem.
It can reduce the amount of the carbondioxide better that forests and make the earth much cooler.
Second, in my country the problem ofdesertification is very heavy and grass can prevent it.
The grass can grow up easily along thedesert.
What’s more, we can grow grass easily afterchoosing the right species.
That’s the reasons why grass is veryimportant.

[ 本帖最后由 nap 于 2007-7-25 20:15 编辑 ]

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九月IBT--第7次作业
TOPIC: ISSUE1 - You have the opportunity to visit aforeign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
WORDS: 352         TIME: 00:25:29          DATE:2007-7-24 19:26:22

I will visit Russia if I have a opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks after considering the short time itself and many attractive aspects of that with the following.（第一段是不是可以改一下题目中的说法，paraphrase）

The main reason why I want to visit Russia is that I can see the Russian life. The style of Russian building(s) is(are) of Eastern Orthodox which is(are) rather different from those in West Europe and I have only seen the Gothic ones in(of) the West European style. At Russia, I can visit the Orthodox Churches, ones that have round domes which are unlike the ones of Goth, with the(delete) sharp roof(s). In addition, I can taste the Russian bread. This kind is a big one with a hard skin as the result of baking.(改成非限制性定语从句吧) I have tasted ones in my home town with the similar material while I think it may be tastier baked in Russia, in the original way.（这一段非常好，句子流畅，例子充分）

After that I will go through the mountain crossing the Russia and Siberia will emerge. Though Siberia is a cold area, there are many large forests there. I can walk though the forests in the shadow of the(delete) trees in both summer and winter with thick enough clothes. Here I can see the leaves falling to the ground. Moreover, I can see(learn) the natives' life. I can take part in their hunting, certainly in the secure state, and then I will have a wonderful experience of lurking behind the tree. Besides, I can see there mains of the explosion at Tungus, a famous mysterious matter, and try to guess the reason of that.（很好的段）

After having a trip north, I can see the Arctic. In Arctic, I can watch the polar bear at the safe distance. I will appreciate how that large animal catching fish from the cold water or swimming for a long distance to the other side of the ice sheet. Additionally, I will know how the native people live in this cold and nearly bare area.

Thus, since Russia is such an attractive country,I will not miss this good opportunity of visiting it in two weeks.（最后一段再展开谈一下就更好了）

以前一直写议论文，从来没有这么困难的写过这种文章
整篇文章流畅自然，但是我个人感觉主题不明确，每段主题句应该是reason啊，但是文章好像是在写游记，不过文章还是很棒的！比我强～
请问您什么时候能帮我改一下啊，谢谢了～
Plant can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the peoplein your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

I think grass is very important for the people in my country.
First, grass can prevent the environment problem.
It can reduce the amount of the carbon dioxide better that forests and make the earth much cooler.
Second, in my country the problem of desertification is very heavy and grass can prevent it.
The grass can grow up easily along the desert.
What’s more, we can grow grass easily after choosing the right species.
That’s the reasons why grass is very important
写的不错的，但是说起来跟写的有些不同，不够流利，不过经过练习你会说得更好的～