十月金秋第十二次作业 请拍

mantnkhUID：2303879

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Writing:
It is normally acknowledged that the TV programs of a country can tell us about the country, especially through its advertisement showing on the TV. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the idea and my conclusion is based on the following reasons.

Firstly, some public advertisement can reflect the reality of current social situation of the country. These public advertisements not made for profiting but for provoking the responsibility and realization of myriad social problems. An example shed light on this point. It is an advertisement showing on the golden time of CCTV which is one of the most important TV channels in my country that portrays many kids who live in poor areas and can not afford to school. Through it, we come to know about these real problem surrounding our country, and such facts that we can not realized without advertisement.

What is more, the fashion of the society which we could feel by those fashionable advertisements is what people pursuing in this country. Through the portion of varying advertisement, we could know the consuming level of the people there. For example, the cognition and using for computer is must be increasing rapidly if the advertisements related to computer and laptop frequently coming out on the TV. Besides, it is also revealed that which kind of sports is the most popular game in the country. Whatever the advertisements are for food or beverage or even for cigarettes, the fact that they always designed with soccer game proved that soccer is the favorite game among people in this country.

Last but not least, the cultures of the country are often showing to us ensuing with advertisement. In order to see this point clearly, let us take India for example. In the country people eat by their hands, hardly do they use knife and chopsticks. In advertisement relating to their meal with family, we find the interesting aspect of the culture in the country.

Based on above discussion, we can safely draw the conclusion that advertising tell us about a country not only by its content but also the proportion of it.

fss528UID：2259545

第一段:我认为主旨句最好直接点题说广告能反映一个国家的一些信息为好.因为原句有点概念扩大,变成了电视节目.而且禁不起推敲,毕竟一些直接反映国家文化.地理等方面的节目比广告更能体现国家特色.
第二段:第一句的advertisement改为复数.这段的论点很新颖:)
第三段:For example, the cognition and using for computer is (is去掉)must be increasing rapidly if the advertisements related to computer and laptop frequently coming out on the TV.
最后,结尾略显仓促.

总体来说.楼主的论点选择都很好,很新颖.略加润色,使内容更丰富一些就更好了:loveliness:

fss528UID：2259545

如果有时间的话也帮我看看第十二次作业:)

mantnkhUID：2303879

谢谢批改，这两天比较忙，没过来，你的第１２次作业我改过了，呵呵