09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文1月22号作业 by cmj

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Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies
are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you
prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
写了32分钟。。。。。。悲愤。。。。。就差那么点。。。。。

From the time it was invented, movie is the always the core in the field of entertainment. But the types of movie have expanded to many, such as science fiction and suspense. As it to me, I mainly category them into to two sections, film for laughs and film for thoughts. Undoubtably I will choose the former one as my favorite.

For one thing, I strongly believe that movies that amuse audience can help to find the real of life. According to my own film experience, it is not until I have finished my work than I will see those moving pictures. That is to say, I watch them just for the reason that they can salve me from the bog of logic, calm me down form piles of work and welcome me back to pure life. Take Bruce Almighty as an example, a film that I love most. Every time I watch it, I feel myself filled with those little joy jumps out from the screen and then the world in my eye seems brighter. Addicted to such feeling, I can never say no the amusing movies.

For another, I can also get something from those amusing pictures. This can also be exampled by Bruce Almighty. After laughing to tears again and again, I begin to catch some details such as the tramp, who always held a board that have little words but was actually the truth of life. I believe this little but glitter point must exits in every movie that amuses, for as movie now is not only a product but also a kind of culture, containing variety of elements is acquired by thousands of people who pay on the film. In this way, behind the laughing face of the film, I can also see their tears.

In summary, I can honestly tell everyone that I love amusing movies as they show me both light and shadow of life. Although it seems that serious film can also tell me about these things but as I prefer watching after work, I inevitably have my tendency to those who make me relaxed, that is, of course, amusing movies.

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From the time it was invented, movie is the always the core in the field of entertainment. But the types of movie have expanded to many, such as science fiction and suspense. As it to me, I mainly category them into to two sections, film for laughs and film for thoughts. Undoubtably (Undoubtedly) I will choose the former one as my favorite.

For one thing, I strongly believe that movies that amuse audience can help to find the real of life. According to my own film experience, it is not until I have finished my work than I will see those moving pictures. That is to say, I watch them just for the reason that they can salve (save?) me from the bog of logic, calm me down form (from) piles of work and welcome me back to pure life. Take Bruce Almighty as an example, a film that I love most. Every time I watch it, I feel myself filled with those little joy jumps out from the screen and then the world in my eye seems brighter. Addicted to such feeling, I can never say no the amusing movies. (例子举得很合理，学习～)

For another, I can also get something from those amusing pictures. This can also be exampled by Bruce Almighty. After laughing to tears again and again, I begin to catch some details such as the tramp, who (which) always held a board that have little words but was actually the truth of life. I believe this little but glitter point must exits in every movie that amuses, for as movie now is not only a product but also a kind of culture, containing variety of elements is acquired by thousands of people who pay on the film. In this way, behind the laughing face （of the film 觉得去掉更通顺些）, I can also see their tears.

In summary, I can honestly tell everyone that I love amusing movies as they show me both light and shadow of life. Although it seems that serious film can also tell me about these things but as I prefer watching after work, I inevitably have my tendency to those who make me relaxed, that is, of course, amusing movies.
写得挺好的，例子恰当，句式变换很多，值得学习啊
不好意思，水平有限～

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From the time it was invented, movie is the always the core in the field of entertainment. But the types of movie have expanded to many, such as science fiction and suspense. As it to me, I mainly category them into to two sections, film for laughs and film for thoughts. Undoubtably I will choose the former one as my favorite.
For one thing, I strongly believe that movies that amuse audience can help to find the real of life. According to my own film experience, it is not until I have finished my work than I will see those moving pictures. That is to say, I watch them just for the reason that they can salve me from the bog of logic, calm me down form(from) piles of work and welcome me back to pure life. Take Bruce Almighty as an example, a film that I love most. Every time I watch it, I feel myself filled with those little joy jumps out from the screen and then the world in my eye seems brighter. Addicted to such feeling, I can never say no the amusing movies.

For another, I can also get something from those amusing pictures. This can also be exampled by Bruce Almighty. After laughing to tears again and again, I begin to catch some details such as the tramp, who(which) always held a board that have little words but was actually the truth of life. I believe this little but glitter point must exits in every movie that amuses, for as movie now is not only a product but also a kind of culture, containing variety of elements is acquired by thousands of people who pay on the film. In this way, behind the laughing face of the film, I can also see their tears.
In summary, I can honestly tell everyone that I love amusing movies as they show me both light and shadow of life. Although it seems that serious film can also tell me about these things but as I prefer watching after work, I inevitably have my tendency to those who(which) make me relaxed, that is, of course, amusing movies.
写得不错，结构清晰，例子也很好（貌似举2个不同的会更好），用词丰富，确实值得学习。。

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感谢批改~
2L~那个是salve。。我想用个过重的词表达一下强烈的小情感~嘿嘿~
3L~我觉得一个例子很好啊~这样可以充分说明我的观点是有例可依的~你觉得呢~？
另外tramp，貌似是流浪汉。。？用who没错吧。。