【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 alexdel第五次作业】

alexdelUID: 2265655

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

      Although technology approves our lives day by day,I am still in favor of the idea that technology make people’s lives more complicated.It can be best exemplified by the cars and computers below.
      As we know,technology brings cars,but brings traffic jams and pollution at the same time. Incontestable,we move much more quickly by cars rather than on feet.However,if cars are never invented,we needn’t move any long distance at all.Just consider how the ancients live without cars.They lived and worked together with families and rarely moved far away.It was also a live full of pleasure for most people.But now,case have changed while we face long time traffic jams and deeply polluted air caused by the cars.So,cars make us move faster,but we will never thank cars,will we?
     For the other instance,computer technology makes troubles more than benefits.Computers undeniable have peerless ability of calculating.We can work easier with computers,we can study with computers and we can play computer games for fun.But there is a premise that we know how to do these things with computers.We would study,study,study,just on a so complex a tool！What if we live without a computer?We would live better!In fact,we would find out that we had not so much work to do,we needn’t to keep studying,and we could entertain in other ways.We just live for simple lives,and it is computer which makes lives complicated.
    Not only the two products of technology but also many other merchandise born of modern civilization such as telephone,television,plane and so on have changed our lives a lot.Considerring the outcome of them seriously,we will finally say that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

风潇子UID: 2247811

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

Although technology approves ？our lives day by day,I am still in favor of the idea that technology make people’s lives more complicated.It can be best exemplified by the cars and computers below.

As we know,technology brings cars,but it also brings traffic jams and pollution at the same time. Incontestable,we move much more quickly by cars rather than on feet.However,if cars are never invented,we needn’t move any long distance at all.(是不是应该用虚拟语气)Just consider how the ancients lived without cars.They lived and worked together with families and rarely moved far away.It was also a live full of pleasure for most people.But now,case have changed while we face long time traffic jams and deeply polluted air caused by the cars.So,cars make us move faster,but we will never thank cars,will we
其实我觉得变得复杂不一定都是不好的
     For the other instance,computer technology makes troubles more than benefits.Computers undeniably have peerless ability of calculating.We can work easier with computers,we can study with computers and we can play computer games for fun.(其实可以直入主题，谈复杂)But there is a premise that we know how to do these things with computers.We would study,study,study,just on a so complex a tool！What if we live without a computer?We would live better!In fact,we would find out that we had not so much work to do,we needn’t to keep studying,and we could entertain in other ways.We just live for simple lives,and it is computer which makes lives complicated.
可以讲讲电脑程序如何复杂，二进制啊，编程啊，防毒啊，网页设计啊。。。
  Not only the two products of technology but also many other merchandise born of modern civilization such as telephone,television,plane and so on have changed our lives a lot.Considerring the outcome of them seriously,we will finally say that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

首先，好像字数不太够，建议下次多写点，其次标点后应该是要空一格的吧
从结构上而言，其实可以谈的更广泛些，科技对生活的影响还是方方面面很多的，复杂程度比如交通，通信，伦理道德，生化武器什么的
语言上，可以换点更高级的词语
加油！

liurui8802UID: 2595045

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.      Although technology approves our lives（一般不说improve life,而是improve life standards) day by day,I am still in favor of the idea that technology make people’s lives more complicated.It can be best exemplified by the cars and computers discussed below.      As we know,technology brings cars,but(and) brings traffic jams and pollution (at the same time)as well. Incontestable(undoubtedly),we move much more quickly by cars rather than on feet(on foot固定搭配）.However,if cars are never invented,we needn’t（can never) move(travel)any long distance at all.)Just consider how the ancients(ancient是个形容词，这里要名词） live without cars.They lived and worked together with families and rarely moved far away.It was also a live full of pleasure for most people.(rewrite:technology brings us cars which are indispensable in today's transportation system.Just compare how we can cover a long distance which is a unsurmountable task for our ancestors.But now,case have(has) changed while we face long-time traffic jams and deeply(heavily) polluted air caused by the fume from cars.So,cars make us move faster,but we will never thank cars,will we?     （For the other instance,）Likewise,computer technology makes troubles more than benefits.Computers undeniably(这里要用副词） have peerless ability of calculating.We can work easier with computers,we can study with computers and we can play computer games for fun.But there is a premise that we know how to do these things with computers.We would study,study,study,just on a so complex a tool！（这句太中式英语了）What if we live without a computer?We would live better!In fact,we would find out that we had not so much work to do,we needn’t to keep studying（这句话不太对，没有电脑我们还是要学习的）,and we could（can) entertain in other ways.We just live for simple lives,and it is computer which makes lives complicated.（这段论述不太充分，计算机让我们有更多的工作，我们要学习使用电脑，但是没有计算机，生活就一定会变简单？结论下的仓促了。）    Not only the two products of technology but also many other merchandise born of modern civilization such as telephone,television,plane and so on还是中式英语 have changed our lives a lot.Considerringthe outcome of them seriously,we will finally say that technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.（论述不严密，就算计算机和车让生活更复杂，也不能一概而论说科技就一定让生活变复杂。）       
总体而论，感觉你的文章词汇和句式还是初级的阶段，中式英语比较多，建议多加强词汇和句式语法的训练，特别是中式英语，如果对自己的表达没有把握，应该尽量用自己熟悉的表达，但是这也是建立在词汇和句式上的。