TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 zhongguowutong 第六次作业

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agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide?

Some people like to travel in a group led by a tour guide. In my point of view, however, it is doubtable a good way to have a good trip when you perceive it deeply.

People always have fun when they are in a group, they laugh together, talk together, exchange opinions, share sadness and joys, even sometimes you have troubles, you may turn to them to look for help and comforts. But people are truly different, everyone is special, when conflicts come out, there is little chance to reach agreement, especially in a group. Many people have such experience that some ones want to have a rest after a long climbing journey while others in the group hope to get the top soon, or some group members want to go shopping in a new place while others expect take more pictures of grand landscape, so the group has to ends up with splitting up. Even some people are willing to sacrifice their own interest to have acting together, it takes long time to make a decision satisfying everyone, and precious time is wasting in worthless discussion.

Good in leading by a tour guide? There are also some problems. Some people would argue that it is convenient to have a tour guide when you are in a entirely new place, why don’t you just enjoy arranged hotel and food and beautiful introduction, after all, a tour guide is familiar with this place. The truth is tour guides render travelers easier to lower their guard. Some of them may consider their own interest to bring travelers to familiar shops and persuade them to buy items there, actually the guide and the owner may get agreement previously, he can get a small amount of money back if he successfully brings guests shopping there.

Admittedly there are still some pros for traveling in a group led by a tour guide, at least we are less likely to get lost or feel lonely, people need helps when they are in new. However, if seeing it in another extent, we will found out travel along or just with love ones is not a bad option. Feel peace in hearts, listen to music when we pass one place ,or just go where you go, do what you do, travel is also with pleasure and joys.

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Some people like to travel in a group led by a tour guide. In my point of view, however, it is doubtable(doubtful that traveling as a group is 强调句缺真正主语) a good way to have a good(wonderful,建议换掉good，因为刚刚用过） trip when you perceive it deeply.

People always have fun when they are in a group, （since) they (can) laugh together, talk together, exchange opinions, share sadness and joys, even sometimes you have troubles, you may turn to them to look for help and comforts(因为前边均使用的并列的动词短语，建议此处改为统一形式）. But people are truly different, （that means 建议加入一些连接词增强逻辑感）everyone is special, when conflicts come out, there is little chance to reach agreement, especially in a group. Many people have such experience that (when)some ones(one) want to have a rest after a long climbing journey while others in the group hope to get the top soon, (;不同例子间建议使用分号，或将长句切割成短句)or some group members want to go shopping in a new place while others expect take more pictures of grand landscape, so the group has to ends up with splitting up. Even some people are willing to sacrifice their own interest to have acting together, it takes long time to make a decision satisfying everyone, and precious time is wasting(wasted)in worthless discussion(s).

Good in leading by a tour guide? (语法貌似有错误，因为不知道你的原意，我没办法改，sorry）There are also some problems. Some people would argue that it is convenient to have a tour guide when you are in a entirely new place, why don’t you just enjoy arranged hotel and food and beautiful introduction, （建议断开长句，因为后边有关于tour guide的详细例子）after all, a tour guide is familiar with this place. The truth is tour guides render travelers easier to lower their guard. Some of them may consider their own interest to bring travelers to familiar shops and persuade them to buy items there, actually the guide and the owner may get agreement previously, he can get a small amount of money back if he successfully brings guests shopping there.

Admittedly there are still some pros for traveling in a group led by a tour guide, at least we are less likely to get lost or feel lonely, people need helps when they are in new. However, if seeing（ look)  it in another extent（from another perspective) , we will found(find) out travel（that traveling) along or just with love ones is not a bad option. (you are able to) Feel peace in hearts, listen(listening) to music when we pass one place ,or just go where you go, do what you do, travel is also with pleasure and joys.

因为是第一次给人该文章，所以不怎么得要领，请你见谅。文章的思路比较好，但是语法错误比较多。另外gg/mm?偏好使用长句，但是长句的意层分隔不是很好，建议先使用短句，这样可以减少错误，也可以让文章层次更分明。
恩，继续努力吧~加油！