〖TOEFL 4—6月-Dark_Tournament写作小组 奔跑蜗牛 第六次作业〗

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

第六次作业 agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.
Traveling, as a favorable reaction, is wide popular during modern people’s life. Some people like to travel independently, while others prefer to travel with a group led by a tour guide. From my personal angle alone, I prefer to travel in a tour group rather than travel alone. Because there are more advantages of traveling with a group than traveling alone.

First of all, by traveling in a group, you will enjoy the comfort and safety of group travel. You will never worry about the tickets booking; finding hotels, transportation and so on, for the tour guide would arrange in advance sightseeing schedule and other services during the trip. Then it is safe to travel with a group led by a tour guide. It is dangouers to excursion alone in a forest or ascends mountains, but to walk with a group people led by a tour guide, you will be less afraid and losing way, and the tour guide will handle emergency situations.

In addition, we can learn more information from a good tour guide, who is professional knowledge and rich experiences about certain places. Thus our trip will become more efficient and enjoyable. A common problem of people traveling around is unfamiliar langrage of the country they are visiting. The tour guide who have inrich knowledge and at lest know one foreign language. He will tell us the stories behind the places of interest and led us the errect way. We can accumulate more knowledge about the city tradition, history, and know more about the places where we visit.


What is more, traveling on the road is boring, at that moment, a good tour guide, most of them are very nice and humorous, will relieve the borings by telling jokes or some interesting stories. Sometimes playing cards or having some games with others in the group will help.

I prefer to travel with a group led by tour guide rather than travel alone not only because the trip will be easier, but also because we can have more fun by with other travelers’ company.

天聋地哑UID: 2594947

哇·~~~  蜗牛版主的习作。  我要好好学习学习。

ddcmj519UID: 176326

木有细看。
但是
1.人称，分段1用的you，后面变成we了。个人觉得这个，读着不是很舒服，可能问题也不大吧~
2.整体上看，内容分配的。。额。。分段3内容，及结尾段内容偏少，个人比较推荐直接分段3不要，字数堆去结尾~花花时间好好搞结尾应该蛮有好处吧~~

加油~~

liurui8802UID: 2595045

Traveling, as a favorable reaction（recreation）, is widely popular during modern people’s life（lives）. Some people like to travel independently, while others prefer to travel with a group led by a tour guide. From my personal angle alone, I prefer to travel in a tour group rather than travel alone. Because there are more advantages of traveling with a group than traveling alone.


First of all, by traveling in a group, you will enjoy the comfort and safety of group travel. You will never worry about the tickets booking; finding hotels, transportation and so on, for the tour guide would arrange in advance sightseeing schedule and other services during the trip. Then(besides) it is safe to travel with a group led by a tour guide. It is dangouers拼写 to excursion这里应该是个动词
alone in a forest or ascends mountains, but to walk with a group of people led by a tour guide(to…从语法角度看这里只能看成目的，和你本意不符，换用with,或者accompaning by), you will be less afraid and losing way(you will be safer and less likely to lose your way), and the tour guide will handle emergency situations.: d& o5 F3 R6 n, H1 t
In addition, we can learn more information from a good tour guide, who is(has) professional knowledge and rich experience about certain places. Thus our trip will become more efficient and enjoyable. A common problem of people traveling around is unfamiliar langrage(没这样的说法) of the country they are visiting. The tour guide who have inrich (rich)knowledge and at lest know one foreign language(你这是个定语从句，没主句). He will tell us the stories behind the places of interest and led us the errect way（看不懂）. We can accumulate more knowledge about the city tradition, history, and know more about the places where we visit.0 z; [5 G' Z- g# D' W' I
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What is more, traveling on the road is boring, at that moment, a good tour guide, most of them are very nice and humorous, will relieve the borings（bordom） by telling jokes or some interesting stories. Sometimes playing cards or having some games with others in the group will help.

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I prefer to travel with a group led by tour guide rather than travel alone not only because the trip will be easier, but also because we can have more fun by with other travelers’ company.(when we are in a group)

chelseajcoleUID: 2589519

Traveling, as a favorable reaction, (拼错了吧）is wide popular during modern people’s life. （为什么是DURING？用IN不是就可以表达在“现代生活中"这样一个意思了吗？)Some people like to travel independently, while others prefer to travel with a group led by a tour guide. From my personal angle alone, I prefer to travel in a tour group rather than travel alone. Because there are more advantages of traveling with a group than traveling alone.
结构清晰，开头REstate，然后提出观点，接着一句过渡


First of all, by traveling in a group, you will enjoy the comfort and safety of group travel. You will never worry about the tickets booking; finding hotels, transportation and so on, for the tour guide would arrange in advance sightseeing schedule and other services during the trip. Then it is safe to travel with a group led by a tour guide. It is dangouers to excursion alone in a forest or ascends mountains, but to walk with a group people led by a tour guide, you will be less afraid and losing way, and the tour guide will handle emergency situations
围绕COMFORT 和 SAEFTY 写，思维比较严密，我也找不出什么语言问题

In addition, we can learn more information from a good tour guide, who is professional knowledge and rich experiences about certain places. Thus our trip will become more efficient and enjoyable. A common problem of people traveling around is unfamiliar langrage of the country they are visiting. The tour guide who have inrich（？） knowledge and at lest know one foreign language. （这里建议可以断一下句，The tour guide,who have rich knowledge about the place we travel,and at least,know one foreign language,will not only solve the problem of language barrier  but will tell us the stories behind the scenery and led us the way directly),He will tell us the stories behind the places of interest and led us the errect way. We can accumulate more knowledge about the city tradition, history, and know more about the places where we visit.


What is more, traveling on the road is boring, at that moment, a good (an experienced)tour guide, most of them are very nice and humorous, will relieve the borings(tedious bus time )by telling jokes or some interesting stories. Sometimes playing cards or having some games with others in the group will help.

I prefer to travel with a group led by tour guide rather than travel alone not only because the trip will be easier, but also because we can have more fun by with other travelers’ company.