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Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past

I generally disagree with the idea that the development of technology undermines children’s creativity. In my view, the ever advancing technology actually serves to free children from the many limits that bordered their creativity before, and children are now more creative thanks to the technology.

To begin with, technology is able to free children from those repetitive and low intellectual works, and thus enable children to spend more time on purely creative work. For example, many of us used to experience the long and dull calculation process in math problems. There were many times that we were trapped in the calculation process which neither developed our understanding of math nor our overall intellectual level. Nowadays, however, children can easily solve the calculation problem with under the aid of computer or electronic calculator, and in turn spend more time to think about what the math problem tries to indicate and how it could be solved in other possible ways. All these aspects are absolutely more creativity demanding works than the simple but time-consuming calculation process. So in this sense, children could be granted more freedom and time to creative work thanks to the development of technology.

Moreover, advancement in technology brings about new type of knowledge and new ways through which knowledge are transmitted, and in turn, opens a brand new world for children’s creativity. Take the internet for example, it enables children to absorb the latest development in human civilization with unimaginable speed and convenience. With all these up-to-date information and knowledge available, children nowadays, with their creativity, are able to step into the frontier of technology in an early age. Thus t is no longer shocking now for us to hear the news about some young talents coming up with great innovations or designs. Such things simply could not take place without the modern technology which helps to present these talents with the new and advanced knowledge.

With all these merits that technology have in encouraging children’s creativity, there’s still something I want to point out. In my perspective, only through a careful guide of parents and teachers could children make the best use of technology as to aid either their creative ideas or practice. Otherwise, unfortunates might occur whether it is some kids get addicted to on-line games, or children misled by some illegal contents in the internet.

To conclude, the development of technology generally provides children with great ease to make use of their creative mind and to do some innovative work. And children are thus more creative now than they were before. But still it should not be ignored that such things could only take place when the children are properly guided by their parents and teachers.

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1# neozhongnl
I generally disagree with the idea that the development of technology undermines children’s creativity. In my view, the ever advancing（advanced） technology actually serves to free children from the many limits that bordered(是阻碍吗？border没有阻碍的意思吧？) their creativity before, and children are now more creative thanks to the technology.: G' `2 M. L0 H; r2 _4 X9 U

To begin with, technology is able to free children from those repetitive and low intellectual works, and thus enable children to spend more time on purely creative work. For example, many of us used to experience the long and dull calculation process in math problems. There were many times that we were trapped in the calculation process which neither developed our understanding of math nor our(去掉) overall （our） intellectual level. Nowadays, however, children can easily solve the calculation problem with under（去掉其中一个） the aid of computer or electronic calculator, and in turn spend more time to think about what the math problem tries to indicate and how it could be solved in other possible ways. All these aspects are absolutely more creativity demanding works than the simple but time-consuming calculation process. So in this sense, children could be granted more freedom and time to creative work thanks to the development of technology.! w4 S& a1 v  x, b7 `

Moreover, advancement in technology brings about new type of knowledge and new ways through which knowledge are transmitted, and in turn, opens a brand new world for children’s creativity. Take the internet for example, it enables children to absorb the latest development in human civilization with unimaginable speed and convenience. With all these up-to-date information and knowledge available, children nowadays, with their creativity, are able to step into the frontier of technology in an early age. Thus t（打错）
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With all these merits that technology have in encouraging children’s creativity, there’s still something I want to point out. In my perspective, only through a careful guide of parents and teachers could children make the best use of technology as to aid either their creative ideas or practice. Otherwise, unfortunates might occur whether it is some kids get addicted to on-line games, or children misled by some illegal contents in the internet., u. q1 i0 I0 b3 R9 y0 d

To conclude, the development of technology generally provides children with great ease to make use of their creative mind and to do some innovative work. And children are thus more creative now than they were before. But still it should not be ignored that such things could only take place when the children are properly guided by their parents and teachers.
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1# neozhongnl
Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past

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I generally disagree with the idea that the development of technology undermines children’s creativity. In my view, the ever advancing technology actually serves to free children from the many limits that bordered their creativity before, and children are now more creative thanks to the technology.; q2 P( k" M* t- P, t: V6 f


To begin with, technology is able to free children from those repetitive and low intellectual works, and thus enable children to spend more time on purely creative work. For example, many of us used to experience the long and dull calculation process in math problems. There were many times that we were trapped in the calculation process which neither developed our understanding of math nor our overall intellectual level. Nowadays, however, children can easily solve the calculation problem with 去掉两个介词中的其中一个under the aid of computer or electronic calculator, and in turn spend more time to think about what the math problem tries to indicate and how it could be solved in other possible ways. All these aspects are absolutely more creativity demanding works than the simple but time-consuming calculation process. So in this sense, children could be granted more freedom and time to creative work thanks to the development of technology.: {) u1 ~9 \& m3 a1 H4 p

Moreover, advancement in technology brings about new type of knowledge and new ways through which knowledge are transmitted, and in turn, opens a brand new好词 world for children’s creativity. Take the internet for example, it enables children to absorb the latest development in human civilization with unimaginable speed and convenience. With all these up-to-date information and knowledge available, children nowadays, with their creativity, are able to step into the frontier of technology好词 in an early age. Thus it is no longer shocking now for us to hear the news about some young talents coming up with great innovations or designs. Such things simply could not take place without the modern technology which helps to present these talents with the new and advanced knowledge.9 F$ P2 `: x9 ^

With all these merits that technology have in encouraging children’s creativity, there’s still something I want to point out. In my perspective, only through a careful guide of parents and teachers could children make the best use of technology as to aid 这里是不是改成execute好一些呢either their creative ideas or practice. Otherwise, unfortunates might occur whether it is some kids get addicted to on-line games, or children misled by some illegal contents in the internet.这句话当中的whether句型用得不太对哦
To conclude, the development of technology generally provides children with great ease to make use of their creative mind and to do some innovative work. And children are thus more creative now than they were before. But still it should not be ignored that such things could only take place when the children are properly guided by their parents and teachers.
作者采用两个分论点来阐述技术进步带来的好处，另外最后一段也指出了技术进步可能带来的问题，行文流畅。
这次改得匆忙，希望以后共同切磋哈~~~