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天使左路UID: 2606987

Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.
Nowadays , technology with its rapidly development has more and more compact on our daily lives through plenty of material such as television , telephone,computer and so forth.The wide spread of technology all over the world still cause a considerable problem : ” does technologe cause children show less creative ? ” .I contend that this statement is not completely true .
Frist of all , the technology will give many opportinities to the children to create lots of usefull material .By instance,internet as a most available tool can be used by children to create some sites to accomplish their ideas thus can improve their creativities.As is known to us , many world wide companies will ask many people to create some internet advertisements which children can involve in.Additionally, technology can provide a flat to the children to share their ideas and thoughts so that children from different place can know themselves more than ever , which is absolutely useful to the culturing creativities of children .
However , part of parents assert that technology does harm to their children because the accomplished technology just provides a path that children follow without thinking any more. Tempting as
such claim might be , it’s hardly true.What cause the creativities down is the conventional educantion form not the technology itself . For example
many teachers in each grade do nothing but just teach the students how to use the technology instead of managing this skill,which kill the children’s inspiration of creativity mostly .
In a brief , children live in a world without technology as their counterparts in the past may create less material because they have less stage to show their intelligence . People cannot be so quite arbritry to claim that the children creativities killer is the tecnology .
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Nowadays , technology with its rapidly(rapid )development has more and more compact on our daily lives through plenty of material (s)such as television , telephone,computer and so forth.The wide spread of technology all over the world still cause a considerable problem : ” does technologe cause children show less creative ? ” .I contend that this statement is not completely true .

Frist of all , the(删) technology will give（gives） many opportinities to the children to create lots of usefull material (s).By (For)instance,internet as a most available tool can be used by children to create some sites to accomplish their ideas thus can improve their creativities.As is known to us , many world wide companies will ask many people to create some internet advertisements which children can involve in.Additionally, technology can provide a flat to the children to share their ideas and thoughts so that children from different place can know themselves more than ever , which is absolutely useful to the culturing creativities of children .

However , part(s) of parents assert that technology does harm to their children because the accomplished technology just provides a path that children follow without thinking any more. Tempting as. w/ such claim might be , it’s hardly true.What cause the creativities down is the conventional educantion form (rather than)not the technology itself . For example many teachers in each grade do nothing but just teach the (删)students how to use the technology instead of managing this skill,which kill the children’s inspiration of creativity mostly ./ B1 P# y: i; f% ^0 Y( F

In a brief , children live in a world without technology as their counterparts in the past may create less material （s这个词出现了好几遍）because they have less stage to show their intelligence . People cannot be so quite arbritry to claim that the children creativities killer is the tecnology .) t" W

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1# 天使左路
Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.; X" d' ?6 E3 Z" M2 r' T6 Vra
Nowadays , technology with its rapidly rapid development has more and more compact这里的compact指的是什么呢？不是太懂 on our daily lives through plenty of materials such as television , telephone, computer and so forth. The wide spread of technology all over the world still causes a considerable problem : ” does technology cause children to show less creative ? ” .I contend that this statement is not completely true .
First of all , the technology will give many opportunities to the children to create lots of useful material .Byfor instance, internet as a most available tool can be used by children to create some sites to accomplish their ideas thus can improve their creativities. As is known to us, many world wide companies will ask many people to create some internet advertisements which children can be involved in. Additionally, technology can provide a flat platform to the children to share their ideas and thoughts so that children from different places can know themselves more than ever , which is absolutely useful to the culturing creativities of children.

However , part of parents assert that technology does harm to their children because the accomplished technology just provides a path that children follow without thinking any more. Tempting as such claim might be , it’s hardly true. What causes the creativities down is the conventional education form not the technology itself . For example
many teachers in each grade do nothing but just teach the students how to use the technology instead of managing this skill, which kills the children’s inspiration of creativity mostly .5 Z$ g# s2 v9 n# j
In brief, children live in a world without technology as their counterparts in the past may create less material achievements？ because they have less stage to show their intelligence . People cannot be so quite arbitrary to claim that the children creativities’ killer is the technology .
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