[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 水龙娃娃的 第十一次作业]

水龙娃娃UID: 2359238

With rapid pace of education perfection in many countries, there is no consensus among an increasing number of people that whether it is better to solve problems by our own knowledge and experience rather than asking other people for help. From my perspective, people should use their information to settle problems for the following reasons.

First of all, what kind of means best fits us is our best choice for solving problems and no one could understand us better than ourselves when we run into a difficult situation. Take me for example, as for me, a student of major in finance, must have microeconomics and macroeconomics final examinations. After studying in a whole semester, I knew the latter one would be my weak while a large amount of my classmates told me the first one was more difficult and everyone should get completely ready for microeconomics rather than macroeconomics. Thanks to my knowledge concerning about myself, I got high grade in both classes for I spent no effort almost on macroeconomics. Therefore, asking advice from other people does not mean it is correct and we must believe in ourselves and be braver to face difficulties using our own knowledge.

Additionally, it is the most terrific manner for us to improve ourselves ability to solve questions though use our own knowledge and experience. For instance, when I purchase a new bookshelf which needs to build it by myself, I would like to read introduction brochure instead of asking my father for advice even though he had bought a DIY shoetree before. The process which I enjoyed could make me be more practical and calm down to deal with any issue. If I am always asking my parents or friends’ advice, I become more dependent on others and do not adapt to society and live along in the future. Millions children has lost their creativity since they usually rely on other’s help in daily time.

Admittedly, we might concede that there will be some benefits which could be brought by asking others for advice. People may provide us some useful information to solve problems like how you could handle it and it is better for you to do some things and so forth. However, the merits of asking people for advice are so limited compared with its shortages.

Consequently, though we admit that asking other people for advice has some benefits, we really consider taking advantages of using our own knowledge and experience to solve problems such as being suitable to our own situation and practicing our capability of addressing questions without ignoring the all the drawbacks of depending on others.

gundammoleUID: 2300958

1# 水龙娃娃
With the rapid pace of education perfection in many countries, there is no consensus among an increasing number of people that(of) whether it is better to solve problems by our own knowledge and experience rather than(rather than 改为or) asking other people for help. From my perspective, people should use their information to settle problems for the following reasons.

First of all, what kind of means best fits us is our best choice for solving problems(这半句看不懂，表达不对) and no one could understand us better than ourselves when we run into a difficult situation. Take me for example, as for me（与前面的Take me for example重复了，可以去掉）, a student of major in finance(I’m a student in finance specialty), must have(facing) microeconomics and macroeconomics final examinations. After studying in(for) a whole semester, I knew the latter one would be my weak(weakness) while a large amount of my classmates told me the first(former) one was more difficult and everyone should get completely ready for microeconomics rather than macroeconomics. Thanks to my knowledge concerning about myself, I got high grade in both classes for I spent no effort almost(almost提到no前面) on macroeconomics. Therefore, asking advice from other people does not mean it is correct and we must believe in ourselves and be braver to face difficulties using our own knowledge.

Additionally, it is the most terrific manner for us to improve ourselves(our) ability to(by) solve questions though(through) use our own knowledge and experience. For instance, when I purchase a new bookshelf which needs to build it(be assembled) by myself, I would like to read introduction brochure instead of asking my father for advice even though he had bought a DIY shoetree before. The process which I enjoyed could make me be more practical and calm down to deal with any issue. If I am always asking my parents or friends’ advice, I will become more dependent on others and do(can) not adapt to society and live along in the future. Millions children has lost their creativity since they usually rely on other’s help in daily time.* n9 Y! y

Admittedly, we might concede that there will be some benefits which could be brought by asking others for advice. People may provide us some useful information to solve problems like how you could handle it and it is better for you to do some things(something) and so forth. However, the merits of asking people for advice are so limited compared with its shortages。(既然叙述ask for advice的好处，那为什么不说下坏处呢？最好能在末尾稍微提下坏处。)

Consequently, though we admit that asking other people for advice has some benefits, we really consider taking advantages of using（去掉） our own knowledge and experience to solve problems such as being suitable to our own situation and practicing our capability of addressing questions without ignoring the all the drawbacks of depending on others.（最后这句有点长了，可以分成两句）

与第八次作文相比，现在进步多了！但是有些用词和语法上还是要注意。
总的来说不错，逻辑清晰，语句通顺。只是我觉得没必要叙述你否认的观点的好处，只要指出它的弊端就可以是文章更有舒服力了。
如有修改错误的地方，尽管指出。共勉^_^

glasses415UID: 2603267

With(the) rapid pace of education perfection in many countries, there is no consensus among an increasing number of people that whether it is better to solve problems by (useing) our own knowledge and experience rather than(whether ...or...把rather than 改为  or```) asking other people for help. From my perspective, people should use their information to settle problems for the following reasons.4 w0 E# ~0 b* e+ \* q2 l; x * ?3 z$ r# m7 F! _) d& a3 T0 IFirst of all, what kind of means best fits us is our best choice for solving problems （句子不通吧````）and no one could understand us better than ourselves when we run into a difficult situation. Take me for example, as for me, a student of major in finance, must have microeconomics and macroeconomics(in) final examinations. After studying in(in 改为for) a whole semester, I knew the latter one would be my weak while a large amount of my classmates told me the first one was more difficult and everyone should get completely ready for microeconomics rather than macroeconomics. Thanks to my knowledge concerning about myself, I got high grade in both classes for I spent no effort almost on macroeconomics. Therefore, asking advice from other people does not mean it is correct and we must believe in ourselves and be braver to face difficulties using our own knowledge. 3 S4 e- {7 s' b5 q3 Y, F0 f/ b7 \ & z7 D3 T! S6 }6 q Additionally, it is the most terrific manner for us to improve ourselves（our own or our） ability to solve questions though use our own knowledge and experience. For instance, when I purchase a new bookshelf which needs to build it by myself, I would like to read introduction brochure instead of asking my father for advice even though he had bought a DIY shoetree before. The process which I enjoyed could make me be more practical and calm down to deal with any issue. If I am always asking my parents or friends’ advice, I become more dependent on others and do not adapt to society and live along in the future. Millions children has lost their creativity since they usually rely on other’s help in daily time. ' L: C  i6 j) C4 x; S, C& \ 3 r: P. T; F7 C4 X& |0 xAdmittedly, we might concede that there will be some benefits which could be brought by asking others for advice. People may provide us some useful information to solve problems like how you could handle it and it is better for you to do some things and so forth. However, the merits of asking people for advice are so limited compared with its shortages. 5 V6 G- q; ]0 U: V: m6 `) Q * V! ?2 L. _/ ^& U6 V1 AConsequently, though we admit that asking other people for advice has some benefits, we really consider taking advantages of using our own knowledge and experience to solve problems such as being suitable to our own situation and practicing our capability of addressing questions without ignoring the all the drawbacks of depending on others. 总体感觉你写的句子都太长了···可以把它弄成几个句子写的么··额····因为我的能力有限····所以改的也····额···请多包涵···· 也请你帮我改一下，，我写的也不好··· 大家共同进步····

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