TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组桑梓的 第十六次作业

桑梓UID: 2613051

No one can deny the fact that the pace of the world is accelerating all the time that almost everyone has to face an avalanche of issues all the time. Some argue that we are busy doing different things that we can do few things well. While others do not think so, according to what I know, I am in support with the latter group.

Admittedly, the opinion that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things makes sense to some extent. We all have such experiences that there are just so many things that we do not know how to deal with them; we even do not know how and where to start. I had one at the end of my last semester: four exams to be prepared for, an essay to write and a presentation to be made. At first, they really drove me crazy. When I was preparing my exams, the essay kept lingering in my mind that I couldn't focus on my study; when writing the essay, I kept worrying about my presentation; when revising my presentation, I wanted to do my study since there was so much I did not understand. I was overwhelmed to deal with these different things and I thought that I would never figure them out and the results would be terrible. At that time, I wholeheartedly agree that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things.

However, a friend helped me out and changed my attitude toward the opinion mentioned above. She taught me how to control the time. With her help, I made myself an effective schedule and kept myself focus on one thing at a time. In the end, everything was finished well. Not until then did I realized that we have the ability to do different things well, even if the things seem to be overwhelming. What we need is to learn how to arrange our time and make the best out of the limited time. What really matters is not the number of the things you are dealing with but the ability to take control of your time and the intention to do things well, if you do not want to, you can fail the only thing you are doing. Try to make the best use of your time, and you will find that you can do a lot of things well. When eating the breakfast, turn on the radio and you can get information; when waiting for the bus, take out your book and read a few lines; when you are tied of one thing, instead of forcing yourself to keep on just stop and turn to another one. You will soon find out that too many things is not that overwhelming and you can do them well.

To sum up, as far as I am concerned, I fully object to the notion that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things. The only reason that people fail to do different things well is that they do not try their best in the correct way. Just as the old saying"Where there is a will, there is a way", if you really want to do things well, you will find a way.

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

No one can deny the fact that the pace of the world is accelerating all the time that almost everyone has to face an avalanche of issues all the time. Some argue that we are busy doing different things that we can do few things well. While others do not think so, according to what I know, I am in support with the latter group.
Admittedly, the opinion that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things makes sense to some extent. We all have such experiences that there are just so many things that we do not know how to deal with them; we even do not know how and where to start. I had one at the end of my last semester: four exams to be prepared for, an essay to write and a presentation to be made. At first, they really drove me crazy. When I was preparing my exams, the essay kept lingering in my mind that I couldn't focus on my study; when writing the essay, I kept worrying about my presentation; when revising my presentation, I wanted to do my study since there was so much I did not understand. I was overwhelmed to deal with these different things and I thought that I would never figure them out and the results would be terrible. At that time, I wholeheartedly agree that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things.（这段让步段挺好的，好像美国人觉得观点之前有让步整个文章就会客观公正许多，向楼主学习。不过我觉得这段略长了一些，短点更好吧，例子很生动，能说明问题。）

However, a friend helped me out and changed my attitude toward the opinion mentioned above. She taught me how to control the time. With her help, I made myself an effective schedule and kept myself focus on one thing at a time. In the end, everything was finished well. Not until then did I realized that we have the ability to do different things well, even if the things seem to be overwhelming.（这个过渡句挺好的，学习这个句型） What we need is to learn (to learn is)how to arrange our time and make the best out of the limited time. What really matters is not the number of the things you are dealing with, but the ability to take control of your time and the intention to do things well. if you do not want to, you can fail the only thing you are doing. Try to make the best use of your time, and you will find that you can do a lot of things well. When eating the breakfast, turn on the radio and you can get information; when waiting for the bus, take out your book and read a few lines; when you are tied of one thing, instead of forcing yourself to keep on just stop and turn to another one. You will soon find out that too many things is not that overwhelming and you can do them well。(好像美国人不太喜欢举例的时候用you,他们喜欢用we这个人称）

To sum up, as far as I am concerned, I fully object to the notion that people can do few things well when they are busy doing different things. The only reason that people fail to do different things well is that they do not try their best in the correct way. Just as the old saying"Where there is a will, there is a way", if you really want to do things well, you will find a way.

楼主只有一个意见吗？就是让步之后说“做事多而不精”是因为没有安排好时间，论证挺好的，但是觉得再有一个原因会更充分一点。
还有一点小建议，楼主的长句用的有点多，长短句兼用效果会更好，加油~
楼主的长句写的很好，学习了，我自己写作文语法老是错，嘿嘿~