：【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 beyondarchi 第16次作业】!

neozhongnlUID: 2448721

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.



I generally agree with the statement that if people distribute their attention on so many things, it is likely that they can do few of them well. I would like to further arguer that the modern society actually seeks to avoid such problem itself by specifying people to specific jobs and position.

To begin with, it is true to me that people can not do everything well if his/her attention are separated on different things. Every human being only has limited knowledge, experience on certain things, besides his/her time which could be devoted to a certain task is also limited. Under such circumstances, if he/she tries to manage a lot of task at the same time, each task could only obtain even more limited attention and consideration from the already limited energy that the man has to offer. Thus it will be very likely that none of the tasks could be done well. Throughout our studying and working experience, we are reminded from time to time to concentrate our attention and time on certain important task at one time, in fact only in this way could we achieve success in certain areas.

Moreover, my observation on such issue indicates that the society has become more and more specified in terms of people’s occupation and positions. In my opinion, such phenomenon becomes more obvious especially in modern times when the fast advancement of technology and the speeding flow of huge amount of information and new knowledge simply make it impossible for individuals to grasp a deep and broad understanding of many fields. Take the architects’ job for example. Long gone the days when one single architect would be assigned to design the exterior, the interior, the structure of a building, now the architect are aid by civil engineer, the interior designer and many other designers with specific knowledge to do a design. The specification of architect is a clear example that only by allowing people focusing on specific field and then working together, could them follow the rapid change in modern society.

To conclude, it is true that people can not do everything well if their attention and energy are distributed to many different tasks. In fact, the modern society has well adapted itself to the rapid changes by allocating people to specific jobs and positions to allow them concentrate on specific areas.

tensionhjjUID: 2611892

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I generally agree with the statement that if people distribute their attention on so(to) many things, it is likely that they can do few of them well. I would like to further arguer that the modern society actually seeks to avoid such problem itself by specifying people to specific jobs and position.

To begin with, it is true to me that people can not do everything well if his/her attention are(is) separated on(to) different things. Every human being(Everybody) only has limited knowledge, experience on certain things, besides his/her time which could be devoted to a certain task is also limited. Under such circumstances, if he/she tries to manage a lot of task（tasks） at the same time, each task could only obtain even more limited attention and consideration from the already(去掉，already没有做定语的用法) limited energy that the man has to offer.（if从句没主语了……这句十分怪异建议不要写那么长从句套从句，语法好像都是错的……） Thus it will be very likely that none of the tasks could be done well. Throughout our studying and working experience, we are reminded from time to time to（remind是跟of吧） concentrate our attention and time on certain important task（tasks） at one time, in fact only in this way could we achieve success in certain areas.

Moreover, my observation on such issue indicates that the society has become more and more specified in terms of people’s occupation and positions. In my opinion, such phenomenon becomes more obvious especially in modern times when the fast advancement of technology and the speeding flow of huge amount of information and new knowledge simply make it impossible for individuals to grasp a deep and broad understanding of many fields. Take the architects’ job for example. Long gone the days when one single architect would be assigned to design the exterior, the interior, the structure of a building, now the architect are aid by civil engineer, the interior designer and many other designers with specific knowledge to do a design. The specification of architect is a clear example that only by allowing people focusing on specific field and then working together, could them follow the rapid change in modern society." ~+ \+ i9 X- ~" Z5w
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To conclude, it is true that people can not do everything well if their attention and energy are distributed to many different tasks. In fact, the modern society has well adapted itself（去掉） to the rapid changes by allocating people to specific jobs and positions to allow them concentrate on specific areas.


说真的我第二段没怎么看懂。。
觉得你的文章模板痕迹很重而且很喜欢用从句套从句的长句。。。这样很容易出错的。。

mimicaUID: 2457275

I generally agree with the statement that if people distribute their attention on so many things, it is likely that they can do few of them well. I would like to further arguer that the modern society actually seeks to avoid such problem itself by specifying people to specific jobs and positions.

To begin with, it is true to me that people can not do everything well if his/her attention are (is)separated on different things. Every human being only has limited knowledge,(and) experience on certain things, besides his/her time which could be devoted to a certain task is also limited. Under such circumstances, if he/she tries to manage a lot of task at the same time, each task could only obtain even more limited （less）attention and consideration from the already limited energy that the man has to offer.(这一句有点怪) Thus it will be very likely that none of the tasks could be done well. Throughout our studying and working experience, we are reminded from time to time to concentrate our attention and time on certain important task at one time, in fact only in this way could we achieve success in certain areas.+ A. ?  ~  y: d2 @/ s2 Q0 B* `
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Moreover, my observation on such issue indicates that the society has become more and more specified in terms of people’s occupation and positions. In my opinion, such phenomenon becomes more obvious especially in modern times when the fast advancement of technology and the speeding flow of huge amount of information and new knowledge simply make it impossible for individuals to grasp a deep and broad understanding of many fields.(真长) Take the architects’ job for example. Long gone the days when one single architect would be assigned to design the exterior, the interior, the structure of a building, now the architect are aid by civil engineer, the interior designer and many other designers with specific knowledge to do a design. The specification of architect is a clear example that only by allowing people focusing on specific field and then working together, could them follow the rapid change in modern society.

To conclude, it is true that people can not do everything well if their attention and energy are distributed to many different tasks. In fact, the modern society has well adapted itself to the rapid changes by allocating people to specific jobs and positions to allow them concentrate on specific areas.

句式一长，就觉得不够细致调理了。用词很灵活。